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A Collection of Choruses

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Reese_Roper

PostPosted: Thu Nov 09, 2006 5:57 pm


Okay, I am terrible at verses, but I can do choruses, kinda.

This is the chorus-sequence thing from a song I'm working on about a little girl who is going to go visit her grandfather, who has Alzheimer’s and is in a home for the elderly. The first chorus is her mother, the second her, the third her grandpa.

1st Chorus:

He won't remember your name,
He won't remember your age,
He won't remember your height or weight.
He won't remember your voice
Or the wave of your hair,
He won't remember your likes or hates,
And scary as it seems,
He won't remember you.

2nd Chorus:

He don't remember my name,
He don't remember my age,
He don't remember my height or weight.
He don't remember my voice
Or the wave of my hair,
He don't remember my likes or hates,
But scariest of all,
He didn't remember me.

Bridge:

Oh, I know you love me, Grandpa,
And your love for is true,
But if you can't remember me,
Will you forget that, too?

And he said...

3rd Chorus:

I can't remember your name,
I can't remember your age,
I can't remember your height or weight.
I can't remember your voice
Or the wave of your hair,
I can't remember your likes or hates,
But, baby don't forget,
I will always love you.

Love you.
PostPosted: Thu Nov 09, 2006 6:51 pm


Oh, boy. I just found a sticky note with a chorus I wrote at about three in the morning with no sleep. xD

I believe this one was supposed to be about a best friend moving away. There is sort of a double meaning to that last line.

Chorus:

Good-bye, my heart
Farewell, my friend
I promise this is not the end
And miles apart I want you to know
Though there's a stopping point where you will go
There is no "end" to "Friends"

Bridge:

We'll say goodbye
We'll hug, we'll wave
And it tears at me so
I loved you first
You loved me best
And as I watch you go...

Repeat Chorus

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PostPosted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 5:04 pm


you are very good at choruses,i love every single part 3nodding heart
BRAVO!!!!
PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 8:27 am


Thank-you. <3

Most of my writing is done at night, when I'm completely out of it from sleep deprivation, so I'm amazed anyone thinks it's any good.

Reese_Roper


Daisuke Kiriyama

PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 8:29 am


Nicely done!

At least your writings are a lot happier than mine.
PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 10:11 am


Very nicley done! You are good at choruses. I would love to hear these to music, I'm sure they would be even more beautiful.

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Reese_Roper

PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 12:38 pm


Next time my brother comes home he can get the microphone to work with the computer. Then I could record them. Or else find someone who either can write music or has a machine that writes it as you sing it.
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