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 Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 2:42 am
I made this fanfiction because I love writing stories I guess
Plus it's part of my English coursework for school
So I want to see what you guys think of it before I hand it in
It's PG-13 because there is only a kiss in it, nothing too extreme
I am the main character, Katie
But all the information given about me, my family, my school etc.
Is untrue, I wouldn't put personal information
So please enjoy my story, and once you have read it, give it a rating out of ten!
Thank you ^^
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 2:44 am
Chapter 1 I was woken by the deafening sound of my horrid alarm clock, of which I was determined to get rid of some day. It was the first day of my new high school. East Croma High. I hated starting new schools, but I suppose you could say I was getting used to it, with my family moving around so much. All of my great friends were now left behind, I had no one. Just me, myself and I. I lay there in my creaking bed, wondering how my first day would turn out. Would I ever make any friends? Or would I just make enemies?
“Oh, so you’re finally up then?” asked my sister, as she was putting on her make-up. That was nothing new. I had to share a room with her and it was living hell. Her name was Bethany, and she had long blonde hair, wore make-up 24/7 and wore average teenage girly clothes. I was a lot more different to my sister. I had long black hair, just below my shoulders, and it had red streaks in it. I always wore a bit of black eyeliner with a black or red top, and just a pair of baggy ripped jeans. Whatever was most comfortable. There was a year apart between Bethany and I. She was 17 and I was 16.
“Katie, you go to school, planning to wear horrible clothes, and then expect to make friends?” sniggered Bethany.
“Shut up Bethers, and mind your own business, would you?” for some weird reason I had always called Bethany, Bethers. It was just a weird habit that had grown on me. She dropped her lip gloss and swung around to face me.
“Shut up you rock chick wannabe!” yelled Bethany.
“What? Rock chick wannabe? As if! I’m just myself, I’m not a wannabe of anyone. Why don’t you just get over yourself you Paris Hilton wannabe?” as I spoke she threw a childish tantrum and stomped out of our room. I finally could get ready for school.
A while later Bethany and I were driving to school, in her “fabulous” sports car. She was listening to Hilary Duff again and it was driving me insane. I could just stomp all over her horrible CD collection.
At long last we arrived and I hurried out of her dumb car. My arms were full of books and I was trying to look at my notes, telling me what rooms I had to go to for the day. The first room was room 216. I wasn’t concentrating on were I was walking and bumped into a boy, and stumbled to the ground. Our books fell everywhere.
“Uh…I’m sorry” said the boy.
“No, it’s alright, I should have been watching where I was going. It was my fault.” I said, picking my books from the ground. Soon our books were in our arms again and I finally got to see what the boy looked like. He wore black clothes, with a red tie. He had longish black hair and he wore black eyeliner. He looked like he hadn’t slept in ages.
“Where you headed to?” he asked me.
“Umm…room 216, but I have no idea where that is.” I replied, shuffling my notes into my pocket.
“Well that’s art class, I’m going there too. Come on I’ll show you the way” he said smiling.
“Alright then, thanks” I smiled back, and we entered the school building.
“So, I guess you’re new here then, huh?” he asked as we walked up the noisy corridor, packed with people.
“Yeah, I change schools a lot, since my family always move around, but we’re hoping to stay here.” I replied, trying to smile.
“I’m sure you’ll like it here, oh and I’ll let you meet the rest of my friends at lunch, ok?”
“That would be great”
We soon arrived at room 216 and we opened the door, finding the teacher staring at us very angrily.
“GERARD WAY, NEW GIRL! You are both late!” yelled the teacher. Everyone in the class sniggered, except one boy with light brown hair, and who wore black glasses.
“Sorry sir, I was showing her-” started Gerard.
“No back-sass boy! Sit down!” cut in the teacher, then he turned to me, “As for you young lady, come here, beside me”
I walked towards the teacher, feeling nervous because everyone was staring at me, I’m not comfortable with people staring at me.
“Class, this is Katie Beckett, she is the new girl in our school, so treat her with respect!” yelled the teacher, then he turned to me, “My name is Mr Hobins, now go and take a seat beside Gerard, since you two already seem acquainted.”
Without a word, I walked down to my seat, and sat beside Gerard and the boy who wore the glasses. Mr Hobins soon started blabbing on about an art project due in a month, but I wasn’t concentrating on what he was saying. Gerard had taken out his art book, and I couldn’t help but often glance at his wonderful artwork, covering his dark and dreary art school book. I was amazed by his incredible talent.
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 2:57 am
Chapter 2 “So are you all clear on what do to?” asked Mr Hobins with an angry tone.
“Yes sir” shouted everyone, except Gerard and I, who clearly hadn’t been listening to a word Mr Hobins had said.
“Ok, you may work in three’s for this project, so and choose your group members, and come up with ideas” he said as he sat back down at his desk. All the popular kids went with each other. All the jocks went with each other. All the skaters went with each other. It was like these different people were not allowed to mix at all.
“Hey Mikey!” shouted Gerard, across to the boy who wore the black glasses, “You can work with Katie and I” It was amazing…I had two friends already.
So the long day of boring school went on, but for once I actually enjoyed every second of it. I loved going to art to work with Mikey and Gerard. Then in Science I got to work with Gerard again, and in English I worked with Mikey!
Soon enough, lunch came, and me, Gerard and Mikey headed to the cafeteria to get lunch. We got our lunch and went outside to find a seat. We sat at a table with three other guys. One had black hair, a cute little face, and a lip ring. The second had an afro, and his hair was wild and fluffy, but really cute. And the third one had ginger hair, a side fringe which covered his right eye, and also had a lip ring.
“Hey guys, this is the new girl, Katie Beckett.” said Mikey, then he turned to me and said, “This is Frankie, Ray and Bob.”
“Hello” I said to them nervously.
“What’s up Katie? It’s cool to have a new girl. So I guess you’ll be hanging around with us then?” asked Frankie.
“Well, I’ve been hanging around with Mikey and Gerard all day, and I have no other friends…..so if it’s alright with you guys.” I replied.
“It’s cool, we’ve never had a girl hang around with us before” giggled Gerard.
“Well now you have me” I blushed as I spoke.
Suddenly a girl walked by, wearing a cheerleading outfit, she was tall, blonde and looked like a snob.
“Go for it Mikey, now’s your chance!” said Ray laughing.
“I’m going….to ask her out.” said Mikey as he gulped. Wait….Mikey had a crush on someone? NOOOOO!
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 3:15 am
Chapter 3 Mikey went up to the girl named Tiffany and stood behind her.
“Hey…umm…Tiffany?” he asked.
She turned around, flicked her hair and looked disgusted at Mikey.
“What do you want Harry Potter!?” she asked sniggering.
“I was just wondering if you would like to go to the Homecoming dance with me”
“WHAT!? Are you out of you stupid little mind? Me the most popular girl in school, go to the greatest dance of the year with Harry Potter!?” we all watched this happening, and I couldn’t bare to see Mikey’s heart getting torn at the scenes.
Then she answered, “Oh please, you aren’t good enough for me, get out of my sight you loser.” and at that, she flicked her hair and walked away. Mikey was heart-broken, but he just sat down and stayed quiet. Then all of a sudden Tiffany came back and called me over to her. I rolled my eyes, got up and went over to her
“What do you want?” I asked her angrily.
“I know you’re sister, and she’s a right loser” Tiffany replied.
“You can say that again”
“Anyway, I want you to ditch those losers and become one of us”
“Ditch my friends to become a snob? No thanks” I went to walk away, but she pulled me back.
“Here’s my number if you ever change your mind” as she spoke she handed me a small piece of paper with her number written on it. I stuffed it into my pocket and sat back down at my table.
“What did she want?” asked Gerard.
“Something she will never get” I replied.
“What’s that?”
“For me to ditch you guys to become a snob like her” I turned to Mikey, “Are you alright? She was pretty harsh on you”
“No, I’m no ok” replied Mikey sadly.
“Would you like it if I asked you to come with the Homecoming dance with me then?” I asked him through a smile.
“You would? That would be great. Katie, you’re a great friend” said Mikey as he hugged me. Suddenly the bell rang. We dumped our left-overs into the bin and rushed off to class.
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 3:28 am
Chapter 4 It was the night of the Homecoming dance. My best friend from my old school, named Diane came, to tag along with me at the dance.
“Are you almost ready? I want to see you in your dress!” moaned Diane. I opened the bathroom door, and walked out in a beautiful white dress. I wore a necklace made from crystals, and a small tiara on my head.
“Do you think Mikey will like me?” I asked grinning.
“Woah, you put a lot of effort into this one Katie! Well I suppose since it’s your first Homecoming…but of course Mikey will like you! You look amazing!” replied Diane excitedly.
A while later we all arrived at the Homecoming dance. Gerard, Mikey, Ray, Frankie and Bon were all wearing cute tuxedos.
“You look like a million dollars Katie!” said Gerard, as he ran over and hugged me in excitement.
“Diane, this is Gerard, Mikey, Frankie, Ray, and Bob” I pointed to each one of them as I said their name.
“Well hello there” said Frankie.
“Hello handsome!” giggled Diane, she and Frankie walked off to get a drink. Diane wasn’t afraid to speak her kind. So Gerard, Mikey, Ray, Bob and I hung around with each other for a while.
A good while later the final dance came. The slow dance.
“May I have this dance?” asked Mikey holding out his hand to me.
“Of course you can” I said as I took his hand.
We danced closely and I rested my head on his chest as we danced.
“I never pictured this, having a handsome boy dance with me at my first Homecoming.” I said holding his hands and resting my head as we danced.
“You’re just a lucky girl, you look beautiful tonight” he whispered in my ear.
Soon the dance was over and it was time to announce Homecoming King and Queen.
“Ok, so this year it is not anyone popular from King and Queen,. I don’t even know these two. The Homecoming King and Queen this year are……Mikey Way and Katie Beckett!” said the boy who was the principal’s son. I was gob smacked. I had won homecoming Queen, and Mikey as my King, at my first Homecoming! Mikey and I went up on stage and everyone cheered except Tiffany, who sat in a seat in the corner of the room sulking. Mikey and I kissed, and he held my hand.
“You’ll always be my queen” he whispered in my ear. Then I kissed him on the cheek.
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 3:38 am
Chapter 5 It is now eight years later. I had graduated from East Croma High School and started my own life and settled into a family. I didn’t have a husband, but I had a two year old son named Kyle.
One afternoon I turned on the TV , and turned on MTV2.
“When I was….a young boy…my father…took my into the city…to see a marching band…” sang a man on TV, who had short, blonde hair, and was in a band named “My Chemical Romance”
I had kept in touch with Tiffany, for some weird reason, but I didn’t become a snob. I rang her number on my cell.
“Hello?” answered Tiffany.
“Hiya Tiffany, turn your TV onto MTV2 a minute.” I replied.
“Alright……..woah, they are good, who are they!?”
“Remember the four boys back in High School, Gerard, Mikey, Bob, Frankie, and Ray? That is them, as My Chemical Romance.”
“Which one is Mikey? None of them look like Mikey…or Gerard!”
“Gerard is the singer, and Mikey is the bassist, the one standing directly in front of the drums, do you see him?”
“Yeah, and he is sure hott from the last time I seen him eight years ago! He’s single right?”
“No, he has a fiancée”
“REALLY!? Who!?” she asked in amazement.
“Me”THE END
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 3:41 am
And that's the end of my story
Please post here on what you think of it ^^
I read in the rules that you have to try not to make a member of the band hook-up with a fan
Well really, I wasn't their fan at the start, I was their friend
So...that's alright right?
Thank-you <33
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 3:58 am
It was pretty good...I like how you used Skater Boy as the basis for the song. The thing is, it moves kind of fast...but it works out well.
I think I'd rate it a 7 out of 10.
Keep writing! (I say that to everyone. xd )
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 8:38 am
dorkifiedchick It was pretty good...I like how you used Skater Boy as the basis for the song. The thing is, it moves kind of fast...but it works out well. I think I'd rate it a 7 out of 10. Keep writing! (I say that to everyone. xd )
But it's for English coursework, and when I write it down
It covers six pages back and front O.O
We aren't allowed more than five pages because the teacher couldn't be bothered reading them all -.-
Yes, I used the Skater boy basis xP
Thanks for your rating ^^
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 10:21 am
XBreak Dance-Not HeartsX dorkifiedchick It was pretty good...I like how you used Skater Boy as the basis for the song. The thing is, it moves kind of fast...but it works out well. I think I'd rate it a 7 out of 10. Keep writing! (I say that to everyone. xd )
But it's for English coursework, and when I write it down
It covers six pages back and front O.O
We aren't allowed more than five pages because the teacher couldn't be bothered reading them all -.-
Yes, I used the Skater boy basis xP
Thanks for your rating ^^I HATE when teachers put page limits...then they get mad when you write too much. Heh. But I think it would work well for the coursework then. Is it for a grade? Hope you get a good one!
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 6:59 pm
It's good, but really fast. I can't believe there was a page limlit. I'd like to see if you wrote something similar but could do whatever you wanted with it. *Hint, hint* xd
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Posted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 8:55 pm
I think after it's graded and stuff you should slow it down and write a long novel because it's good work!!!!I rate it a 8 out of 10. mrgreen
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Posted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 1:24 am
Thanks you guys
Once I hand it in, I'll consider writing a slowed down version
We'll see xD
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Posted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 3:49 am
If you do write a longer version, I'd love to read it also.
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Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 7:27 am
dorkifiedchick If you do write a longer version, I'd love to read it also. I have already started a longer version =3
I hope it isn't too long, because it is very detailed
I hope you are patient with reading on a computer xPP
I'll post it when I'm finished
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