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 Posted: Fri Oct 06, 2006 9:48 pm
Want to know if anyone likes it. It was just the other day...
I made a great mistake...
But it would take me months to realize.
I was letting go...
Of the one thing that was hanging on...
I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore
Remember all the days we spent
Dreaming about life
Together as husband and wife
I suppose they don't mean a thing now
And don't you worry girl
I know you'll find someone better than me
Its not hard...
I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore
And if I had to choose
Between life or you
I'd be lying at your feet
My last breathes for your forgiveness
I'll hope you don't hate me
And maybe
We'll be just fine...
I know you thought it was me!
I made you so damn happy!
But look at me now!
I've been reduced to nothing!
Without you...
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Posted: Fri Oct 06, 2006 10:50 pm
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Posted: Sat Oct 07, 2006 12:52 am
Ky-Kaisuke Want to know if anyone likes it. It was just the other day...
I made a great mistake...
But it would take me months to realize.
I was letting go...
Of the one thing that was hanging on...
I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore
Remember all the days we spent
Dreaming about life
Together as husband and wife
I suppose they don't mean a thing now
And don't you worry girl
I know you'll find someone better than me
Its not hard...
I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore
And if I had to choose
Between life or you
I'd be lying at your feet
My last breathes for your forgiveness
I'll hope you don't hate me
And maybe
We'll be just fine...
I know you thought it was me!
I made you so damn happy!
But look at me now!
I've been reduced to nothing!
Without you... Hmm.. it's a good song. but it needs a little bit more work. like the part that goes
"I know you thought it was me
I made you so happy
But look at me now
Im reduced to nothing
Without you anymore"
because i don't rly get the top 2 lines of that part. it's quite confusing.
and if that's the chorus of the song then i would suggest to make it a lil bit longer or repeat it
and maybe try to add extra stuff here and there to make the point you want outmore clear.
Listen or not. it's your song.not mine.
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Posted: Sat Oct 07, 2006 4:26 am
The lyrics are good but i had a har time trying to find a good tune to go with it lol.
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Posted: Sat Oct 07, 2006 2:29 pm
I could put that to music, actually. I like it, but it doesn't sound like something I'd particularly be interested in. Ain't my style.
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Posted: Mon Oct 09, 2006 6:02 pm
i like it lots wish i could write like that
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Posted: Mon Oct 09, 2006 8:37 pm
I actually liked it...i thought it sounded good. Good job. 3nodding heart
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Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 9:34 pm
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Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2006 1:18 pm
Thankies for all the input.
3nodding
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 10:42 am
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 1:55 pm
Didn't Silverstein write that?
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 2:52 pm
I don't think so.
But if they did then me and them think exactly alike.
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 3:10 pm
Ky-Kaisuke I don't think so.
But if they did then me and them think exactly alike. Which isn't something to be proud of.
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 6:41 pm
::gasp:: jealousy pulses through veins.....
I LOVED IT!!!!! (I would love it even better if I could hear it w/ a tune or instruments or somethin'
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 9:47 pm
Rellik San Ky-Kaisuke I don't think so.
But if they did then me and them think exactly alike. Which isn't something to be proud of. I dunno, I'd be proud of being a whiny, melodramatic teen in my late 20's.
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