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 Posted: Mon Sep 11, 2006 8:02 pm
Your eyes,
The consecration,
Of my temptation,
In this tempest of change,
Forever shall you stay,
Near and dear to my heart,
But in the physical way,
Must forever we now part,
For our lips sealed,
With candor and bliss,
Pain like skin – newly pealed,
A feeling I will miss,
I want to hold you in my arms,
And keep you from this fray,
But that kiss we shared…alarms,
Sounded out today,
Up to the skies I soared,
With you upon my lips,
But too soon pain so adored,
And back to darkness slips,
You see my dear, I love,
With unabated strife,
And pray to the heavens above,
That you’ll always lead a happy life.
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Posted: Sat Sep 16, 2006 5:44 am
This is pretty good, not bad.. I like Its very emotional? I dunno the word... but its kinda sad.. agh I am dont trying to explain. I like it, thats what matters haha
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Posted: Mon Sep 18, 2006 3:50 pm
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 8:09 pm
It sounds like he died.
Even if he didn't,it makes me feel bad for the guy.
That is beautifully written.
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Posted: Sat Mar 17, 2007 8:38 pm
The wording was simple but extravagant at the same time...
Most poets tend to use words you have to look up in the thesaurus, simply to understand them! However, your poem was beautiful without any impossible words....which is actually quite hard to achieve. Lol.
Simply put: Awwwww, it was so kawaii!!! Lol. heart heart
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Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2007 3:55 pm
A very beautiful piece of work witha solumn tone.
I enjyed it.
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Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2007 5:41 pm
Good poem, lots of emotion.
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