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 Posted: Fri Sep 08, 2006 4:39 pm
would anyone mind if I used you all for guinea pigs for my Cyberpunk story I'm writing?? and where would be the best place to post it?
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Posted: Fri Sep 15, 2006 5:20 pm
Sure you can use me as long as you don't make me talk like an idiot or anything xd I guess you could post it here in the CB or the main forum.
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Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2006 4:09 pm
some random rivethead... Sure you can use me as long as you don't make me talk like an idiot or anything xd I guess you could post it here in the CB or the main forum. I have no intention of using you as a puppet, merely a guinea Pig...
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Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2006 4:14 pm
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Posted: Fri Oct 13, 2006 12:22 pm
Or don't... that's cool, too...
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Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 7:48 pm
Chylde_Orchid Or don't... that's cool, too... I put up chapter 2 as well...
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Posted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 1:50 am
Not bad so far, can't wait to read more.
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Posted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 12:14 pm
It's Good so far, you can put me in if you'd like.
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Posted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 1:15 am
Tinfoiler
Not bad so far, can't wait to read more.Thanks, I'm trying to find time to write more... Marx_Zenuko It's Good so far, you can put me in if you'd like. I might do that... Leadstorm is looking for bigger guns.... Oh, s**t. I just realised what I did... the first chapter is form the viewpoint of an entireley different character... I'm sorry if it seemed a bit confusing, switching between a cop and a Hired Gun... Off I go to fix it...
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Posted: Sat Dec 16, 2006 2:42 pm
Chylde_Orchid Tinfoiler
Not bad so far, can't wait to read more.Thanks, I'm trying to find time to write more... Marx_Zenuko It's Good so far, you can put me in if you'd like. I might do that... Leadstorm is looking for bigger guns.... Oh, s**t. I just realised what I did... the first chapter is form the viewpoint of an entireley different character... I'm sorry if it seemed a bit confusing, switching between a cop and a Hired Gun... Off I go to fix it... Okay, it's fixed.
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2006 3:04 am
Chylde_Orchid Chylde_Orchid Tinfoiler
Not bad so far, can't wait to read more.Thanks, I'm trying to find time to write more... Marx_Zenuko It's Good so far, you can put me in if you'd like. I might do that... Leadstorm is looking for bigger guns.... Oh, s**t. I just realised what I did... the first chapter is form the viewpoint of an entireley different character... I'm sorry if it seemed a bit confusing, switching between a cop and a Hired Gun... Off I go to fix it... Okay, it's fixed. Huzzah!
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Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 6:12 pm
Tinfoiler Chylde_Orchid Chylde_Orchid Tinfoiler
Not bad so far, can't wait to read more.Thanks, I'm trying to find time to write more... Marx_Zenuko It's Good so far, you can put me in if you'd like. I might do that... Leadstorm is looking for bigger guns.... Oh, s**t. I just realised what I did... the first chapter is form the viewpoint of an entireley different character... I'm sorry if it seemed a bit confusing, switching between a cop and a Hired Gun... Off I go to fix it... Okay, it's fixed. Huzzah! easier to follow? less confusing?
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Posted: Sat Dec 23, 2006 11:42 pm
Chapter 3 is up, and yet another character in first person. I promise I'll pull them all together as the story progresses.
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Posted: Tue Jan 09, 2007 9:23 pm
I really like the story, and the reader can really get a feel of CP2020. I'm glad you'll bring them together (it has been said that if a writer places a gun on the mantle in the first act, it sure as hell better be fired by the last act), but may I suggest working with a little more introduction for each character so you know that there is a PoV shift? Really it isn't totally necessary...you do figure out they are different characters...but it was a little more problematic shifting from chpt. 1 to chpt. 2.
Keep up the good work, though...you have some really rich descriptions going on, and I like that.
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Posted: Thu Jan 11, 2007 6:23 pm
you just like picturing carcases that look like they got hit with a pneumatic ram....
sorry about the pm, i clicked wrong...
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