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 Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:15 am
for commenting on my story
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:16 am
star_baby alright, elf! i really like the story line, but it needs polishing (grammar, spelling, generic writing rules, etc..)--you know, minor editing. other than that, the only thing i have to say is it's a bit too condensed; there's too much information in too little time. but i really like it otherwise and i'll be waiting for your next post! 4laugh *moved*
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:18 am
RangerKnight
The 2nd half has been rewriten and the pace slowed down considerbly. Sara was taken out and personal information was added.
*moved*
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:19 am
star_baby wonderful, i love it!!! 4laugh *moved*
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:20 am
khyberdiao You already know my opinion on this. So simply put, finish the second chapter gosh darnit! Yeah...now. This is me demanding. *moved*
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:24 am
chapter two is up, and before you hate to much for this chapter, just so you know in the Ranger's culture it's ok for the elders to smack the yonger ones. (in this case sheathling), Zerron and Sheathling are considered as children, they are very talented so they are concidered gifted childeren
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:31 am
khyberdiao Yay you posted the second chapter! About damn time. Any who...I like Stragner's character. It also explains why you refused to allow Sheathling and Zerron be cuddly. It all makes sense! Obviously there were grammar and spelling errors, but I plan on editing this chapter for you later. Heh. All in all, I'm so glad you posted this. I loved the fight between the rangers and Cragnath getting hit by the dirt. I'm excited to learn more about Kerexar and why he wanted all three of them there. And the emblem for the Arcane Ranger is cool. Yeah...this is long and I'm done. But I really liked this chapter. Here's hoping it won't take another year or so for you to write the third chapter. rolleyes biggrin *moved*
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:33 am
yay you liked it that makes me happy, it's good to know. oh and don't worry I'll write the next one soon
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 12:41 am
So you say...and woopsie. I was supposed to comment here. redface My bad. Yeah, duh of course I liked it. Psha.
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Posted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 12:03 am
wow.. your story's like... very long o_o only if weren't so lazy, i would read it >_< i'm sorry!
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