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 Posted: Wed Aug 30, 2006 5:46 pm
This is something that I randomly wrote during Japanese. Feedback will be most appreciated.
Individuality
We all wear masks, conceiling our identity
We all dance the dangerous dance of war
Our dance partner is Death.
We all are branches of one great tree
Society as we know it falls.
We all wear masks that steal our face
We are stripped of our freedom, our identity
Our soothing aura disapating.
We are not ourselves
We are stripped
We dance in a deadly game
Yet we know the world falls
Masks cover masks.
We all have been raped of our personality
We are all individuals, with no individuality.
Hope you guys liked my randomness! ^_^
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Posted: Wed Aug 30, 2006 10:31 pm
That was very good! I'm generally not fond of poems that have no visible rhythm or rhyme, but this one flows quite nicely. As an aesthete, I'll read a poem about anything so long as it flows well. And this one flows very, very well. Consider yourself applauded Crow Czraina.
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 7:40 am
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Posted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 4:30 pm
SilverMystic13 That was very good! I'm generally not fond of poems that have no visible rhythm or rhyme, but this one flows quite nicely. As an aesthete, I'll read a poem about anything so long as it flows well. And this one flows very, very well. Consider yourself applauded Crow Czraina. i do like the flow on this as well.
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Posted: Tue Sep 12, 2006 5:15 pm
Thank you, it was something random that kind of took root from my friend always saying "We are individuals with no individuality".
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