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Crappy breakup=Crappy poem

KT fawkin NanA

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Posted: Mon Jul 26, 2004 12:35 am

Ah yes, nothing like a breakup to inspire me to write some poop-a-rific poetry. I guess I wouldn't to know what you guys think, sweatdrop

The Downfall
I know your lying
Its in your voice
Your words speak louder than your actions
Please, just tell me how you feel

Im so sorry
I know I messed up
The relality is set
Please dont leave

I dont deserve this
I dont deserve you
Someone who was so great
Let down so hard

Look at me
I never ment to hurt you
It wasnt supposed to happen
Not like this

It ment nothing
I dont remember anything
I had no choice
What can I say so that you'll stay?

Posted: Mon Jul 26, 2004 2:17 am

Quote:

The Downfall
I know you're lying
It's in your voice
Your words speak louder than your actions
Please, just tell me how you feel

I'm so sorry
I know I messed up
The reality is set
Please don't leave

I don't deserve this
I don't deserve you
Someone who was so great
Let down so hard

Look at me
I never meant to hurt you
It wasn't supposed to happen
Not like this

It meant nothing
I don't remember anything
I had no choice
What can I say so that you'll stay?

I did some minor adjustments to your poem. I hope you don't mind. 3nodding
It's a pretty nice poem. Not too good, not too bad. A decent poem.

Sorry to hear about your breakup. Hopefully, things will get better soon. Good luck!

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KT fawkin NanA

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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2004 12:25 am

Heh, gah, I always seem to make those silly lil typo's that don't catch my eye until it's too late...BLAST. Thanks for the input though, always appriciated ^.~

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