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Vernhal

PostPosted: Fri Jul 28, 2006 9:41 am


I would like some real tough critiquing here! this is for my latest commision Im working on... its the sketch... Im gonna begin coloring now!

What Im having toruble with the most is the arm on OUR left.. it would be his right arm I guess... it just doesnt look right to me!

OH if you want to red line this (going over the mistakes and correcting them using a red pen or pencil or using some other digital operation) That would be awesome! Just post them up here for me to see if you do!

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 28, 2006 7:39 pm


help me please!! crying

Vernhal


K-lakie

PostPosted: Fri Jul 28, 2006 7:52 pm


Maybe you should define the lines of the neck becuse I can't really see any lines coming down from the head.
with the shoulders, maybe you just need to round them out?

Maybe at the bottom where the shirt ends and the pants begin, there could be some nice detail on the part of the pants we see.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 28, 2006 8:06 pm


Klakie93
Maybe you should define the lines of the neck becuse I can't really see any lines coming down from the head.
with the shoulders, maybe you just need to round them out?

Maybe at the bottom where the shirt ends and the pants begin, there could be some nice detail on the part of the pants we see.

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hey... your right!!! rounding the shoulders makes it look alot better!!! sweatdrop

thanks!

I would go into detail on the pants... except in the picture he gave me this charcter... well there arent any details on the pants to add... except clothing folds... oH welll 3nodding

Thanks for the comment!

Vernhal


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PostPosted: Fri Jul 28, 2006 8:16 pm


Klakie pretty much has it. Though the neck shouldn't be that thin. Then it looks like nothing is really supporting his head. And also, the crotch lines should be placed further left.

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PostPosted: Sat Jul 29, 2006 1:48 pm


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Klakie pretty much has it. Though the neck shouldn't be that thin. Then it looks like nothing is really supporting his head. And also, the crotch lines should be placed further left.

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Thanks! that helps alot!

Vernhal

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