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 Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 10:54 am
This fanfiction is sorta about the character I made, Autumn or Sugar. In this all the mews find out there is one more mew, but she doesn't want to fight. Will the mew mews get Autumn to join or will she take a new path, find out in my next post!
I know it sounds something like a cartoon, but any way I'm going to use the toyko mew mew names, k. Also when I start writing and if anyone wants to make a comment please email me, k. I'm going to start writing tommorrow.
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 7:12 pm
No offense, but this plot is over-used. sweatdrop
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fine engineering Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 6:33 am
It /is/ overused...
But then, my alien mews are kind of the same thing... except they're farther into the future... and they're double agents...
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 8:35 am
I haven't written a story about Leichi or Shiru, and I don't plan to.
But Fruit Salad isn't over used! XDDD
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fine engineering Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 9:18 am
i agree it is over used.That's what happened to zakuro.When they tried to get her on the team.
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 10:09 am
Its diffrent you'll see. Also big plot twist!
Also I'm going to use songs I've picked up from both mew mew shows. I only made up one song and I think I'll use it in my next fanfiction.
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This story is of adventure, betral, and tradgedy. This is my story. My name is Autumn, my friends call me sugar. I have brown hair and blue eyes. I live in a abanded house, by my self. I don't know where I come from or what happened to me after a year ago on this very day, Dec. 3rd, the day I became a freack.
"THERE IT IS! GET IT!"
I have been granted the power to turn into a tiger in certain stressful times, but...
I CAN'T CHANGE BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!
I don't know what's going on with me all I know is it started in the park.
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sorry but I got another fan fiction to write so I'll have the next chapter today or tomorrow one, kay.
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 11:32 am
"sigh. I guess since this Is the only day I remember. I guess its my birthday. So whats on my todo list" Autumn starts to stare off into space thinking "Oh Yay! Do a show for extra cash. And that's it. sigh. I wish I do something nice today. I may not know my real birthday but still today is specal to me. Maybe Pudding and me can do something if I get enough money!" while Autumn was walking to the park where she usually performs she passed a store that had a beautiful blue and teal dress (I'll have a picture later, k). When she walked on all she could think about that dress. All she had was a teal sleveless shirt, dark blue jeans, and a blue bandana she had tied around her arm ever since she had gotten a scare there. When she finally got there she took her guitar and began to play while she sang a song.
I tie a ribbon in my hair
...and then I tried to smile
I got the feelling that
...I had changed who I was
A litle bit of courage
...becomes confidence
I had forgotten that fact
...until I met you
any girl can become fearless
...by knowing a special kind of magic
IT'S SHOWTIME
make my heart beat faster and faster
I always want these exciting feelings
I will show you a different me so please
I become more and more open
...as I overflow with this feeling
I'd like to send it all to you
please accept it,MY SWEATHEART
As soon as she was done money started to fill up her bag. Saddnly she only made $10.00.
"WHAT AM I GOING TO DO TO GET SOME MONEY. JUMP OFF A BUILDING!!!!!!!! Wait I got it!" Autumn then started to climb up to one of the trees and played one of her best songs.
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Sorry but my sister is bugging me to get off so I'll have the next part later today. Also that song was the theme song of toyko mew mew.
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 3:51 pm
Ok I have maybe 30 min to write the next chapter before my sister comes so here it goes. Oh one last thing the tree is a cherry blossam tree.
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Autumn breathe in slowly and started.
Boy meets girl
You were my dream,my world
But i was blind
You cheated on me from behind
So on my own
I feel so all alone
Though I know it's true
I'm still in love with you
I need a miracle
I wanna be your girl
Give me a chance to see
That you are made for me
I need a miracle
Please let me be your girl
One day you'll see it can happen to me
I need a miracle
I wanna be your girl
Give me a chance to see
That you are made for me
I need a miracle
Please let me be your girl
One day you'll see it can happen to me
It can happen to me
As Autumn was playing she relized that her guitar was louder as if it was being connected to a speaker.
Day and night
I'm always by your side
Cause I know for sure
My love is real my feelings pure
So take a try
No need to ask me why
Cause I know it's true
I'm still in love with you
I need a miracle...
At the end of her song a loud boom came from her guitar that shook the tree and the cherry blossams started to fall. the crowd started to cheer at her performance, but the tree had been shoken to much and she started to fall to the ground, but in a miracles feat she landed on her feet. The crowd only thought this was part of the show and gave more money. When Autumn finally counted up the money she started to jump up and down. She had collected 50.01 that was the most she had ever gotten in her whole life. After that she decied to go find pudding and tell her.
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this was miracle
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 6:03 pm
You have just earned number one, the ignored mistake, claw12532. I have two reasons.
Reason 1: I stated in the rules that for multiple chapters you need to have separate threads. One for chapter 1, one for chapter 2, etc. Then again, it was should before. So this isn't the main reason.
Reason 2: This board is EXTREMELY literate. Absolutely no chatspeak is allowed (read the rules, please). Checking one of your posts (actually, multiple), you used 'k' instead of 'kay' or 'okay'. That's not allowed, you know. I forgot about that when I first replied... I'm getting so used to seeing it that I normally ignore it.
So, I'm telling you now that I'm ignoring this mistake. Please take this opportunity to correct it. This is one pretty big mistake that I'm ignoring. Either make the story one long chapter, or create different threads for your chapters. Also, fix the 'k's. Because they are getting on my nerves.
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Posted: Mon Jul 24, 2006 5:18 am
I'm sorry. I'm just use to having one page to do it and I didn't have enough time to read I work a lot with my dad.
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Posted: Mon Jul 24, 2006 7:57 am
I looked over the rules again an I will put my story in my journal. Can I also put the link on this forum that way I won't take up so much space.
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Posted: Mon Jul 24, 2006 8:58 am
If you read the 3ed part and don't like that she feel on her feet, well i'm sorry but I'm haveing writers block and this is my second fan fiction. The other thing is 1. she is a tiger, and a cat techniclly 2. there had to be something that shows her powers a bit. But I hope you all like my future entries whitch will be in my journal now. http://www.gaiaonline.com/journal/?mode=view&p=4444569
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fine engineering Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 24, 2006 2:36 pm
*Sigh* No offense, but I don't think I'm going to read this fanfiction unless it gets really un-Mary Sue-ish really fast.
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Posted: Mon Jul 24, 2006 6:36 pm
the thing is that I like to write fanfictions like stories. I don't know why. I just like to feel like I'm in the story smile . But it will be really good. I made oneother fanfiction called the elemental shen gong wu.
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Posted: Mon Jul 24, 2006 7:30 pm
Also no offence to you Marshiemallows sweatdrop . But if you don't want to read my fanfiction,ok. But don't tell me that, please. I'm only 13 (I act like 8 ) and this is only my second fanfic. So please can you lighten up a bit on the critisim sweatdrop .
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