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 Posted: Fri Jul 14, 2006 8:29 pm
Well, this is a poem I wrote long ago, it's called "Beware of what You Write" and I recited it for my school's Talent Show. Everyone loved it for reasons unknown, maybe because I was crying lightly while I recited it (I acted out my voice cracking up, and it really sounded like I was crying out for help) so I hope the people in this Guild will like to read it and comment as well! Please tell me what you think, give me your worst, I'm ready! I was just going for a casual look,
In my lover’s writing book.
But I wish I hadn’t laid my eyes,
On the entry that gave me cold surprise.
The words that laid upon that page,
Filled me with confusion, terror, and rage.
I never thought I’d be the same,
This was no child’s game.
I wanted to scream, I wanted to shout,
I wanted these horrible feelings out!
I wanted to feel his warm embrace,
I wanted to dry the tears upon my face.
I wanted to know why it had come to this,
I wanted to get out of this horrid abyss.
But I knew, we’d never be the same,
This was no child’s game.
Love and life are such a pain,
But I want it to go on all the same.
I don’t know what I feel anymore,
My mind and heart are in a terrible war.
Someone may read you, they just might,
So beware of what you write.
Emotions confuse me all the same,
But this is no child’s game. Comments are loved, and constuctive critisism is loved more! Flamming will not be taken kindly!
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Posted: Sat Jul 15, 2006 9:39 am
I liked it. I got a bit of feeling just by reading it. People probobly loved it for many could relate to it themselves. Including me. Its something that happends to many lovers.
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Posted: Sat Jul 15, 2006 10:45 am
Yes, actually, I thought of this poem when my ex. lover (he was my lover at the time) had written a poem called "Why?" I his journal, it was about cutting himself, and it scared the crud outta me... so, instead of going into a mess of tears and begging him for answers, I wrote this poem, weird, I know, but no matter...
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Posted: Wed Jul 19, 2006 2:40 pm
I am a fan of poetry, and this one... was one of the best I've read in a long time. I really liked it. I hope that you continue to write poetry, so that I can continue to be amazed.
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Posted: Wed Jul 19, 2006 8:08 pm
redface Why, thank you greatly, yes, I love to write poetry, most of them are about the contrasts of Darkness and Light, but there are others, I'll keep posting them up when I write!
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Posted: Tue Jul 25, 2006 1:58 pm
I remember that. for onlooking readers...I went to her school. I was in the talent show also, and I am one of Harra's fans! whee so anyways, my comments:
very good. I didn't realize how short it was...it seemed longer in the talent show, but you obviously took more dramatic pauses...
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Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 8:26 am
*Laughing insanely* Yes, I take many dramatic pauses when I recite it, did you also notice my voice cracking a bit? I tried to sound like I was about to cry just thinking about it, but yes, Jax here is a fan of my poems, and so far, she hasn't had a bad thing to say about a single one!
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Posted: Tue Aug 08, 2006 4:52 pm
It's not weird. You just seeked other ways to deal with the pain, and writing was the excape. Its a good poem too! You've really got a nack for poems...I'd love to read more of your writings ^.^
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Posted: Wed Aug 09, 2006 9:52 am
Ah, thank you, well, I shall show you my other poems and stories!
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 10:55 am
Harra_Wizen *Laughing insanely* Yes, I take many dramatic pauses when I recite it, did you also notice my voice cracking a bit? I tried to sound like I was about to cry just thinking about it, but yes, Jax here is a fan of my poems, and so far, she hasn't had a bad thing to say about a single one! no, I like your poems. I'm glad you like mine too. I did notice your voice cracking. makes me think you would be good at drama. You are taking it next year, right???
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 11:13 am
[~.Miss.Jax.~] Harra_Wizen *Laughing insanely* Yes, I take many dramatic pauses when I recite it, did you also notice my voice cracking a bit? I tried to sound like I was about to cry just thinking about it, but yes, Jax here is a fan of my poems, and so far, she hasn't had a bad thing to say about a single one! no, I like your poems. I'm glad you like mine too. I did notice your voice cracking. makes me think you would be good at drama. You are taking it next year, right??? That I am! Heh, I thought the sounding like I was crying would make a nice effect, no idea if anyone else knew I was pretending to cry, but...
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Posted: Sat Sep 16, 2006 7:39 am
Harra_Wizen [~.Miss.Jax.~] Harra_Wizen *Laughing insanely* Yes, I take many dramatic pauses when I recite it, did you also notice my voice cracking a bit? I tried to sound like I was about to cry just thinking about it, but yes, Jax here is a fan of my poems, and so far, she hasn't had a bad thing to say about a single one! no, I like your poems. I'm glad you like mine too. I did notice your voice cracking. makes me think you would be good at drama. You are taking it next year, right??? That I am! Heh, I thought the sounding like I was crying would make a nice effect, no idea if anyone else knew I was pretending to cry, but... well, I believe everyone could sorta tell...you definitely gave emotion to the crowd.
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Posted: Sun Sep 17, 2006 12:19 pm
[~.Miss.Jax.~] Harra_Wizen [~.Miss.Jax.~] Harra_Wizen *Laughing insanely* Yes, I take many dramatic pauses when I recite it, did you also notice my voice cracking a bit? I tried to sound like I was about to cry just thinking about it, but yes, Jax here is a fan of my poems, and so far, she hasn't had a bad thing to say about a single one! no, I like your poems. I'm glad you like mine too. I did notice your voice cracking. makes me think you would be good at drama. You are taking it next year, right??? That I am! Heh, I thought the sounding like I was crying would make a nice effect, no idea if anyone else knew I was pretending to cry, but... well, I believe everyone could sorta tell...you definitely gave emotion to the crowd. *Curtsi* Why thank you! Yeah, it was fun to preform, I'll give you that... it's going to be published in our schools newspaper, actually, the poem!
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Posted: Sun Sep 17, 2006 2:16 pm
Really??? I want a copy. I'll have to steal one off my sister..
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Posted: Thu Sep 21, 2006 5:38 pm
Haha, sure thing, hey, I might be able to smuggle a copy for ya! Also, I am following in your footsteps and running an Advice Column!
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