Here are a few of my poems plz comment on them!
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#1-Betrayed by friends,
she wandered aimlessly.
Hurt and in need of help,
she felt like death was upon her
at last.
Lies, betrayal, murder,
she needed help,
she knew they would never
gain back her trust.
She wandered in darkness,
finally collapsing against a tree,
the full moon shining,
a presence was felt nearby.
Glowing red eyes,
long black hair,
a trenchcoat flowing on the
ground.
She stood, he grasped her tightly
in his arms.
"I'm scared, I missed you."
He looked deep into her eyes,
penetrating her soul, a passionate
kiss they shared.
He carried her off, the moon still
shining bright, the light bouncing off
the gun in his hand, blood was
to be shed that night.
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#2-My last breath,
I draw it alone,
my body growing cold,
a bloody pool lie next to me,
I cry silently,
my one and only love,
where is he?
My lungs gasp for just a little
more, just a little more.
I use what strength I have
left to call out his name,
I need him desperately,
one scream was all I could
muster,
only one scream,
my mind is fading,
my eyes drawing to a close,
my body going limp,
finally the warmth of another,
my true love has found me,
the warmth of his embrace
on my deathly cold figure
is wonderful.
He holds me tight,
my blood dripping onto him,
I use my last breath,
"I love you."
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#3-My mind, so clouded with images
of death, betrayal...
I don't want to live among this
world of hurt,
I want it to all end,
to disappear.
I find my only friend to be a knife,
the one that lounges in my kitchen,
the one oh so sharp,
it longs for me.
I sit on the floor in my bathroom,
that large, shiny knife next to me,
I grasp it, the handle cold like
that of a lifeless corpse.
I place it next to me, to my arm,
I press it in,
the blood drips down and off the blade,
my mind grows faint,
I do it over and over,
slice after slice,
the blood makes a puddle around
my lifeless body,
the knife covered in blood,
the world, fading away.
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#4-I run, slamming the door behind
me,
the lock clicks.
I slump to the floor,
the shiny silver knife next
to me,
it stares at me,
my skin hurts,
my heart aches,
I hate my life,
my life sucks,
I hate the world.
I grasp the knife,
at first unsure of how to do it,
then I take the plunge.
The skin slices open,
blood drips from the knife,
onto the floor,
the pain is almost gone,
almost.
Once more,
I plunge the knife in,
a scream of pain,
the dripping blood,
my blood, what beauty,
the dark color, a pool,
a puddle, the pain, gone.
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Please tell me what u think of them! heart
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