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OK... I don`t say it`s something great... but it`s fun... or at least my whole class loved it... It`s short... but... Well... it was one of my last homeworks last school-year... But i wrote it the break before the class... We had to write a short story describing some creature... don`t ask why, my english teacher is just weird! So here it is!!!

A Memory
by Iva S. Andreeva

I had never seen or heard anything like these. I couldn`t move, nor breathe, nor think - I was petrified. I felt their cool presence all around me. I wanted to scream, but my voice didn`t come out. My eyes were full with freezing tears - I knew if they had flowed down my face, they would have turned into icy streams... I was finished - this was going to be the very end of my existence...

Drakness had fallen and everything had disappeared - I had closed my eyes...I couldn`t see them any more, but I still was able to feel them...

I gave a look in - a lightning flashed and for a single moment I saw them one more time... I closed my eyes again - darkness was better than light! But this didn`t save me from them - their image was stamped into my mind. The picture of them was going to chase me to the very end...

I still remember them as if this what happened to me occured yesterday. Their blue-green bodies, white and cool limds. The strange minty odour around them, their silver-like weapons... Awful! But the most terrifying thing was the sound they made: "Z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z-z..."

God, I hate my dentist! ><'

You are good at description and getting your emotions out. But it's hard to tell what you are truly describing. You are describing what you are feeling more than what you are seeing. I had to read it twice even after I knew it was your dentist to understand it. I wasn't sure if you were describing your dentist or if you were describing one of his tools or what. I would just pare down on how you feel and describe your dentist more. But otherwise it was good.