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 Posted: Thu Jul 06, 2006 12:00 pm
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The pure white snow coats the ground,
Taking away the wonderful birds sound.
The children are all yelling in joy,
Wanting to turn the snow into a toy.
The teacher tries to teach English,
But to be outside is all the kids wish.
Snow for us is joyous, we all scream and shout,
I wonder if for you it's the same, all the running about.
I hope the snow is still as pure as a newborn child.
Are you all still trying to break all the rules, being wild?
Today I am the starving poet trying to make it,
Maybe you are a poet who is actually making it.
Just remember life isn't all bad,
And one day you'll miss all you had.
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Posted: Thu Jul 06, 2006 12:00 pm
To the Freshmen, to Make Much of Time
Cast away your fears today and smile
Give it a chance, just relax and try
For it only lasts a little while.
Forget all your sins and try not to cry.
Look up to your elders, they know best.
Try not to complain, fuss or fight.
This is your life, a never ending test,
But if you try real hard you'll do just right.
You may feel diagonally parked in a parallel universe,
But I promise everything will be alright.
The world isnt mean, just really diverse.
All you have to do is hold on tight.
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Posted: Tue Aug 15, 2006 10:03 pm
i would really like some critics to help me.. please.. lol.
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 9:59 am
hey there...
well... your poems are good, but it lacks a little bit of depth... maybe you should use more poetic words, poetic devices (metaphor, paradox, onomatopoeia) if you know what i mean... but if that's your style as a poet, then keep it... you have the right to do your own style of writing...
well i hope you wont be offended... till here... smile
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