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 Posted: Sun Jul 02, 2006 1:44 pm
'Tainted Tears'
Tainted tears
Rolling across my face
As I lay still
With a cold embrace
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Chilling ice falls upon me
I lay in the snow freezing
A crimson puddle starting from my head
As you are watching over what they have seen
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Snow starts to cover
Covers me all
I try to scream out
But you only see a heated ball
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A woman sits there screaming
I bet it's my mom
There's a man there dialing
Dialing the numbers 9-1-1
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A sinister grin
From the man in front
The one who stands there
With a gun
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He shoots at me
After nearly beating me to death
But this time that he shoots
He shoots me in my head
~*~
Tainted tears
Rolling across my face
They have just sealed
My tainted fate
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Posted: Mon Jul 03, 2006 10:38 am
i like your poem you did a nice job on it and you should keep writing and ill keep reading...ok
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Posted: Mon Jul 03, 2006 2:41 pm
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Posted: Thu Jul 06, 2006 12:11 am
that's really quite beautiful, very touching...it kind of reminds me of Delerium for some odd reason emo
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Posted: Thu Jul 06, 2006 12:20 am
razz danke.... -ish tired-
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 7:22 am
'Tis not bad, in fact, I kind of like it. I just think that the middle could use a little work. Keep it up! ^^
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