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 Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2005 10:32 pm
I know there's mistakes in it, but I like it how it is:
"And here we are ladies and gents, Las Vegas Nevada. Final 2 for the Semi-Finals. Welcome to The Golden Nugget's Poker Challenge. I'm Tim Burtliyn and we're all fired up for this battle." -Cried the host, all fired up for the card-playing duel
"In the right corner of the table, we have Don Barton, Grey-haired man coming from San Fransisco. Please, give a round of applause." The few audience actually having spare time to kill clapped a few and died.
"And our returning champ, 26 year-old young lad, Johnathan Smithens. Or I like to call him, Johnny-boy. How are you doin' John?" The crowd now rolling in from the word of 'Champ' Roars with an applaude.
"Now, too shabby if I may say. I'm just here to grab me some gold and head off to France with my wife, Yessir"
And the game began, The two players pissing off a few coins to start the game. Don gathering a pair of sixes, lays back and tosses in a few thousands dollars. Jon, amazed by how low his attention is to the game checks him with the same amount.
Don scratched the top of his nose already knowing the outcome of this turn. The dealer slapped the first 3 cards and flips another 2 to prove Don's assumption correctly.
Not exactly joyious of not being able to obtain a little more thousands in this round he builds another tower with the few coins he won.
Another turn of cards and the crowd begins to spread to collect it's own chance of winnings and losings.
The game prolonged another few hours, empty water bottles impatient sat at the edge of the table, Don... having nothing but a village compared to the Metropolis of towers of coins surrounding like an emperor.
The cards are passed down to what seems like it's all over...
Jon, collecting a Jack of Spades and a Queen of Clovers. He smirked and waited for the expression Don got when he gets his cards. Don snagged a peak before the cameras could grab a clear view of the cards. His expression remained dead-wise.
Nobody dares to make a bet or less of a move. Twitching to see the flip, Jon mumbles a few strategy techniques he's been brushing up on. And the turn-over: King and a Ace complimented with a 2, all clovers but the ace which is a heart. A stunning and unbelievable turn of events. This gives Jon the upper hand of what has been estimated of 85% chance of winning. Even if the stastics are piled against Don, added with the difference of cash, he twitched and loosened the collar of his shirt in eagerness to continue onward.
Jon annoyed by the silence treatement he's getting decided to put on a little show for the audience. He betted half his pot. Don Obeyed and folowed up.
"I reckon' this round is mine, Donny-boy"
Don replied with a few words of hatred: "I rather bite my tougne and drown in my own blood then let you take this win" He rearranged his glasses while Jonathan stayed baffled and silenced.
Another two cards was slapped on to the table by the dealer... A 3 of hearts and a 5 of hearts. No last bets were made.
This turn was over and the lights dimmer as the grunted players showed their cards.
Jon with a sraight made up of a Jack Queen King Ace and a 2, seemed like it was impossible to win.
Don gave a cheesy smile and rubbed the top of his lip with the tip of his thumb and revealed his winning combination. A straight of Ace, 2, 3, 4,5 of Hearts! A straight Flush! jon amazed of the sudden change of everything accused: "You cheat what are the chances that you get a Straight Flush?!"
Don quickly leaned forward of the table and curved his back and replied in a monotone: "Slim to none."
Jon reseated keeping his calm and tighetning his championship belt. "Let's make this a grand finale of a game for the audience, Hm? With whatever cards we get, we dealt with them and put in all our cash we scavaged from the other losing players we beaten badly."
"So be it" He said nodding simply once.
And the spotlight was shot at Mr. Barton and Jonathan. The cards swirled to each sides of the table, the cameraman trying to give a little suspense doesn't view the cards, forgetting all about estimations of winning and about the viewers over live television.
The already agreed bets were made: All-in, winner takes all.
The dealer nervous for the players as each of them glared into each other's eyes, maybe secretly growling, but nothing can be confirmed.
The flip... a pair of sixes and an 8, 2 clovers and a diamond. Johnny-boy laughed manically for a moment and flipped Don in a childish way. 2 more cards slipped out of the pack. another 8 and a 7.
It was time to show their cards. "It's all over" chuckled Johnny.
"Don't make me squeeze the Alchohol out of my liver just to prove you wrong" grumbled and mumbled Don.
Jonathan: a 8 and a 5.
Don: a 6 and a 7
Don, one by one, collects his coin flashing it in the center of the table as Jon jawed-open, watches his coins fly away. The Announcer went to congratulate him, but Don ran off. He had won.
That was the last day we ever saw Jon on this Earth, He dissapeared with nothing. That day, he didn't lose everything: His wife, his children, his money, his ideas, his money. He lost more than that, he lost what was most important to a man these days.
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He lost his pride.
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Posted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 11:42 am
I didn't read it in your Quest Thread, and I ain't reading it now. xd
I'll get around to reading it sometime. ninja I'm busy with Tem-Tems working on the OMNI List. 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 1:50 pm
DualBlader I didn't read it in your Quest Thread, and I ain't reading it now. xd I'll get around to reading it sometime. ninja I'm busy with Tem-Tems working on the OMNI List. 3nodding Meanie xp We need to get you a new hairstyle 3nodding Guys Flatty White Yeah!
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Posted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 7:45 pm
Nice story.
And you had Dan's hairstyle once as I recall.
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Posted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 8:24 pm
umaeril Nice story. And you had Dan's hairstyle once as I recall. Never that color, toots wink xd Had it in blue and purple
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Posted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 9:24 pm
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 3:48 am
Xeroxer DualBlader I didn't read it in your Quest Thread, and I ain't reading it now. xd I'll get around to reading it sometime. ninja I'm busy with Tem-Tems working on the OMNI List. 3nodding Meanie xp We need to get you a new hairstyle 3nodding Guys Flatty White Yeah! Hands off the dew! evil This is the famed Dual-Hairstyle. whee
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 4:24 am
Nice little story, M3. I especially liked the ending. cool
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 5:34 am
Vahrley Nice little story, M3. I especially liked the ending. cool I'm pretty good with the endings 4laugh Danny-Boy: Let's make another hairstyle famous
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 5:54 am
Xeroxer Vahrley Nice little story, M3. I especially liked the ending. cool I'm pretty good with the endings 4laugh Danny-Boy: Let's make another hairstyle famous
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 6:18 am
Yes, there were a lot of typos. "Toots"? haha!
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 11:30 am
Vahrley Xeroxer Vahrley Nice little story, M3. I especially liked the ending. cool I'm pretty good with the endings 4laugh Danny-Boy: Let's make another hairstyle famous I know, the changing of tense, the change of narration and other stuff. I'd have to revise it, besides it's just for fun. Yes, Toots Umaeril xp
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