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 Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 12:08 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 12:10 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 12:19 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 12:32 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 12:39 pm
Looking good so far... shall have a more in depth look at this later, though from the first post onwards it was quite gripping. The only criticism I have so far would be to perhaps refine the speech a little to reflect the age of the story. But really good so far! xd
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 1:29 pm
I agree with the speech thing...and also there is a bit too much to describe in one chapter...the language becomes somewhat repetitive
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 1:41 pm
I agree, it is a very good piece of work, even with the repetition. I am curious though, is the character Auron named after the well known Auron from Final Fantasy X?
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 1:41 pm
Fair enough! I am not very worldy with speaking techniques so stayed away from attempted an older style language base.... Didn't wanna screw it up!
And as for all the detail, that is because i started the story with an idea, and needed something to fill in the gap between that idea ((Didn't start till she is about 40ish! confused )) and her childhood... Chapter one is kind of like a prologue, but not. If that makes sense... confused *Kicks imagination for going Over The Top all the time...*
Thankies for your comments! I'll try and post chapter three tomorrow. The rest of it isn't editted yet (Proof read on paper and gave to a mate tpo proof read as well) so that can't go up just yet!
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 1:46 pm
Flames_Of_Fury I agree, it is a very good piece of work, even with the repetition. I am curious though, is the character Auron named after the well known Auron from Final Fantasy X?
But Auron in FFX rawks my socks!
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 1:52 pm
Yes, Auron DOES rule!! Such a cool sword! xd
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 1:56 pm
Not just a kewl sword.... That guy was AMAZING! Why, oh why did he have to die....
crying
And why wasn't he allowed to come back in X-2 like Shujin, lenne and Tidus...
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 2:31 pm
Well technically he was already dead at the time of the storyline, however yes he does kick some serious *cough* and is very serious which makes him cooler still.
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 2:53 pm
Technically yes, but he could of come back again in X-2...
His voice was! During the easiest last fight EVER! XP
I couldn't believe it... Lots and lots of REALLY easy fights because i had levelled up my party really high whilst completing all the side quests... XP
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Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2005 3:03 am
Well...It's not like Necron or Kuja in FFIX were difficult
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Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2005 4:21 am
Yeah well isn't that going a bit off subject...?
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