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 Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 2:41 pm
Okay I wrote part of this song yesterday tell me if it is good or bad please.And by the way its my first song I have wrote so dont laugh.And Im bot done with it yet either.
Title:I'll marry you in heaven
Intro
One day you asked me to marry you,
I said no because I dont care for you,
You started crying because you were rejected,
You were only rejected because you stood good and erected.
Verse
You asked me why,
I said because you wouldnt just stop and fly away,
just fly,
But dont throw your life away because then you will surely die.
Chorus
You stood there crying and kept asking why,
I said because you stand good and erected and just wont fly,
But Ive loved you forever and just cant given,
Maybe one day Ill marry you in heaven.
Well thats all I have so far.The moral is he doesnt love her because she is a goody good and just wont fly as in be free.
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 2:50 pm
Im part way through the next verse. sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 2:53 pm
I'm not the most poetic/musical person ever, but I like it. I had a little tune in my head while reading it, but it's probably nothing how you sounded it. Its a thumb's-up from me.
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 2:57 pm
thaxul I'm not the most poetic/musical person ever, but I like it. I had a little tune in my head while reading it, but it's probably nothing how you sounded it. Its a thumb's-up from me. Thanks smile
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 3:25 pm
Almost donwe with the second verse.
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 5:17 pm
Do you write the music or sing these songs or just write lyrics?
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 5:20 pm
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 5:33 pm
antonio_baka_guy Do you write the music or sing these songs or just write lyrics? This is my first song Ive wrote.And Im not quite threw being done with the lyrics. adaptable Mike:Thanks!
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 5:38 pm
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 5:38 pm
Hlao-roo antonio_baka_guy Do you write the music or sing these songs or just write lyrics? This is my first song Ive wrote.And Im not quite threw being done with the lyrics.
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Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2005 6:10 pm
antonio_baka_guy Hlao-roo antonio_baka_guy Do you write the music or sing these songs or just write lyrics? This is my first song Ive wrote.And Im not quite threw being done with the lyrics. Yes I play the e-gutair and the Mandelin.And I like to sing. Shenryu:thanks smile
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Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2005 1:57 am
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Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2005 3:21 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 6:37 am
I would have to hear the music and style.
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Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 9:03 pm
for some reason i can only read song lyrics with a rap/hip hop beat for some reason. and i HATE rap. Id give it a 4/5
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