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 Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2004 11:51 pm
ORACLE
I can see her now
Smoke- wreathed and stunned
she sees forwrd and forward
Knowing like a tide.
Frail and wracked
their hope assaults her.
Rattles brittle bones
blinded eyes run with tears.
She gives them truths
seeing forward and forward
knowing like a tide
That the whole surpasses her.
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2004 8:33 pm
Oooo, I really liked this. Especially liked the line "their hope assaults her". Nice. 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2004 9:40 pm
Thanks! redface I'm blushing heeheee
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2004 12:32 pm
it is pretty cool eek
mrgreen everything is just so random
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Posted: Mon Sep 13, 2004 10:02 am
I like your poem. It's quite good. The only thing I didn't really like was the forward and forward bit. I'm not sure why. It just didn't sit right with me. I mean, it goes really well in the poem, I just wasn't feeling it. But the poem is very nice. I like how you end it. I just get a picture in my head of an old lady who can almost see into the future and knows these truths but really knows nothing. yeah, I don't know. I make up little stories in my head. But it's well written. Very nice.
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Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2004 7:02 am
Thanks!
I wrote it when I was reading about the Oracle at Delphi- they would get intoxicated off the fumes from these plants they burned, and tell futuretell.
The most famous story is the Oracle told a King (of Troy? maybe?) that if he went to war against a rival country, a great nation would fall. So he went to war, and a nation did fall- his.
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