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 Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2006 3:47 am
Done under test conditions i wrote this my teacher and bestfriend spent a whole period discussing it because they have no taste in stories (joke) I will type the rest when i get over my cold or wake up whichever comes first. EDIT: Ive Added some more but not much cause im rabbit sitting xd EDIT 2: Ive added more im about 3/4 of the way through the first page now
The Shadows played, dancing alongside the small mouse-like girl as she strode as quietly as humanly possible through the dark and eerie cemetery. She stopped at a glistening puddle of clear water that had seeped its way from the tap that stood barely a foot away, glancing at the reflection of the stars twinkling behind her pale face and brown eyes that stared back at her. Dark eyes haunting and mocking her.
As she continued her way through the graves she listened to the sounds of the night that stirred around her. She stopped at the smallest tombstone on the furtherest edge of the graveyard. It was old and worn; only the name that had been so deeply engraved could be read. The name read ' Maria-Rose Thorn '. She sat down in front of it and just stared for a long time, feeling a sense of peace overcome her despite the chaos. Remembering all the things of the past, she even recalled her Father telling her the story of her name, of how her Mother amidst the story told her that all in her family forever had taken living names. Rosethorn was hers, named for the very gravestone that she sat before now.
Tears prickling at her eyes she let go of the flowers that she clutched tightly. She stared now at them, a mixture of pale roses and lilies that almost glowed in the moonlight. As she picked herself up she carefully made her way back through the cemetery and up the small incline that served as a border between the forest and the cemetery. Made of small boulders and large stones that were dull even in the day-light it was a fence-line of a natural, yet somewhat un-natural purpose.
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 4:51 pm
Sounds good so far.
(Sorry, I had more to say, but I just noticed a guy in the computer lab I'm in that looks like that guy that plays Snape in the Harry Potter movies, and that threw the rest of my comment out the window.)
Ok, *tries to get back on track* You've got good discription, but there's not a whole lot to go by. You mentioned you were going to write more? I'll probably say more when you have it up...
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Posted: Sun Jun 18, 2006 4:32 am
Silriel Sounds good so far. (Sorry, I had more to say, but I just noticed a guy in the computer lab I'm in that looks like that guy that plays Snape in the Harry Potter movies, and that threw the rest of my comment out the window.) Ok, *tries to get back on track* You've got good discription, but there's not a whole lot to go by. You mentioned you were going to write more? I'll probably say more when you have it up... Thanks for your comment so far. You should (or if its too late: should've) go(ne) over and say "Hi"
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Posted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 3:05 pm
The Faerie Of Death Silriel Sounds good so far. (Sorry, I had more to say, but I just noticed a guy in the computer lab I'm in that looks like that guy that plays Snape in the Harry Potter movies, and that threw the rest of my comment out the window.) Ok, *tries to get back on track* You've got good discription, but there's not a whole lot to go by. You mentioned you were going to write more? I'll probably say more when you have it up... Thanks for your comment so far. You should (or if its too late: should've) go(ne) over and say "Hi" Should have... but oh well. I work there so if he's a regular, chances are I'll see him again before long.
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Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 3:22 am
Silriel The Faerie Of Death Silriel Sounds good so far. (Sorry, I had more to say, but I just noticed a guy in the computer lab I'm in that looks like that guy that plays Snape in the Harry Potter movies, and that threw the rest of my comment out the window.) Ok, *tries to get back on track* You've got good discription, but there's not a whole lot to go by. You mentioned you were going to write more? I'll probably say more when you have it up... Thanks for your comment so far. You should (or if its too late: should've) go(ne) over and say "Hi" Should have... but oh well. I work there so if he's a regular, chances are I'll see him again before long. Lol. That would be so funny. Even if he isnt the actor you should get his autograph mrgreen
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Posted: Wed Jun 28, 2006 3:47 pm
I like it, but nothing has happened so far it's hard to say. Good beginning though.
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Posted: Sun Sep 17, 2006 8:20 pm
Its very nice. I like the discriptions.
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Posted: Tue Dec 05, 2006 3:28 am
Huge thanks to you both for your comments! blaugh I would put the rest but SOMEONE 'accidentaly' threw it out........ evil
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