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 Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 7:50 am
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Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 8:27 am
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Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 9:10 am
Thanks mortsanglant for your ideas I will take your ideas and use them thanks =D
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Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 10:02 am
No problem. Just let me know if you need help.
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Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 11:28 am
The flow is a little lacking. I get the overall feeling but it's hard for me to follow all the way. I know when I work on my poetry I sometimes have a broken flow on purpose, but i'm still clear with the lines. I was thinking perhaps if you added some lines for clarity and unity it could work better instead of taking them away. I personally always write what I feel and simply that. So mostly I say trust your instincts and let it come easily if you can.
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Posted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 2:42 am
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