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 Posted: Tue May 30, 2006 5:24 am
To fly away,
To escape,
The thought too great,
To contemplate!
The taste of the air,
The feel of the wind,
Relieved from life,
A new one begins!
Stretch out wide,
Feel the pain subside,
Almost like you've died,
But then you open your eyes!
The sky is still grey,
And to your dismay,
You're stuck in your old life,
For yet another day!
By me...xxx
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Posted: Sun Aug 13, 2006 7:57 am
This is very good. It flows nicley. It's crisp and clean (probably doesn't make sense!). You can really relate to it!
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Posted: Tue Sep 05, 2006 3:40 am
Simple,Straight Forward With a clear,direct flow!
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Posted: Mon Sep 25, 2006 7:02 pm
I loved your poem! It reminds me of something that I cannot put my finger on. I think it flowed nicely and even though I don't usually like ryming poems this one had a good beat to back it up making it good.
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