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i didnt read it but a good tip for any writer is a catchy first sentence. im bad for not reading but hey its 2 in the morn for me...i like books with catchy first sentences because then if followed by the rest , hook line and sinker ....my own bit , '"Im so cold",says a pale blonde boy . "i know but soon you wont", the tall lanky black-haired man replies.he pulls a knife out and .....'see that kind of stuff is catchy...

really cool- any more on the way? *hopeful expression*

I finally took the opportunity to read through a few chapters. I've been meaning to for a while, but really haven't had the time. Though I'm not really into the whole anime scene, I do have a few pieces of constructive criticism. I know they're already finished, but maybe it'd help you in future writing. I thought I'd ask you before I started critiquing, because some people can get kind of defensive. I understand completely if you don't want me to say anything, but I know I want people to critique my stuff whenever possible.

Damn, well, I only read the first two chapters of the first "Anime Schooled". Oh well, I'll check out the other one.

I'm still seeing one problem that stands out the most. Your dialogue punctuation is a little off. Take the beginning of the third paragraph in the prologue, for example. You have:
“Ha ha ha, you weak fool.” Cervantese taunted. “I will kill you and have Soul Edge absorb your power.”

Grammatically, it should be:
“Ha ha ha, you weak fool,” Cervantese taunted. “I will kill you and have Soul Edge absorb your power.”

Or, if you were to interrupt a statement, you'd say something like...
"I think," said Vain, "that you are a coward."
Forgive my poor example. But yeah, that's pretty minor, but for some reason, it was annoying me. (Also, the character from "Soul Calibur" is named "Cervantes" without the extra "e" there.) You also have a few comma splices, and a few other unnecessary commas in there.

Another problem I found was with, Currently, the teen was facing in the opposite direction... If it's "current", or in the present, then the entire piece should be in the present tense.

But as for your writing style, it's a bit...basic. The sentence structure is similar in almost every sentence. Let's say you wrote something like...
He sighed heavily. "But I don't want to go to the mall."
You might want to try something like...
With a heavy sigh, he said, "But..."
Or...
Sighing heavily, he said, "But..."
Do you see? It kind of adds depth to your writing. Right now, it's a good story line so far, it's just your writing skills need a little developing. You've got creativity, and the muse to write, so you're already halfway there. Keep up it up.

Yeah, well, you've definetly got the base skill. You've still got a few years left in high school, I assume, so your talent should develop a lot before college. Take a lot of creative writing classes in college, and, if you can, in high school. Yeah, you may never have the genius of Stephen King, but you can come damn close if you put your mind to it. Just remember to use emotions in your writing. If you're trying to convey pain, use strong words that, to you, mean pain. Make it emotional and personal. That's the best kind of writing.