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 Posted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 9:11 am
sometime
i just want to fly
fly to a place
that up in the sky
it's a beautiful place
with no problem or worry
but then i open my eyes
and put the end to the story
there is no such place as this
not in the ground or in the sky
there is no such place as this
no matter how long i will try
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Posted: Sun May 07, 2006 1:53 pm
Well if you will permit me, it's a beautiful poem, but I'd clean up small things.
problum=problem
there is no such this place=there is none such as this place
OR
=there is no such place as this
How's that? 3nodding heart
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Posted: Thu Jun 01, 2006 12:14 pm
I enjoyed your poem, and don't let anyone tell you what to do to it, a poem comes from your sould and its YOUR writings, no one elses lol smile heart
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Posted: Fri Jun 02, 2006 1:14 am
Krissymandy4286 I enjoyed your poem, and don't let anyone tell you what to do to it, a poem comes from your sould and its YOUR writings, no one elses lol smile heart You don't have to correct the errors if you don't want to, and if you want you can even do the errors on purpose.
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Posted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 8:14 am
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Posted: Fri Oct 27, 2006 3:27 pm
You should go and see "Pippen" the title reminds me of it......it's a VERY good Musical, the music is written by the same guy who wrote the music for "Wicked"
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2006 1:26 pm
that came from your heart. i think it is beautiful no matter what anyone tells you. it depends on what you think about it. smile
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