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 Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 5:05 pm
And if I spoke to you, let the words spill out
like a raging storm to end this drought
this land has been marked with blood
but my blood was never enough
If I saw you cry just one single tear
releasing my forgotten hidden fears
I will come running until I can run no more
you should know better, you're what I live for
don't cry my dear
we will regain what once was ours
don't cry my dear
we will be rulers of the universe
if this is what you really need
a dream, these lies I'll feed you
my sweet darling close your eyes
holding tight to suffocate your cries
Dazed and uncertain I sit alone in my chair
drowning in this intoxication
and let the glass slip, shatter on the floor
like the life I lost, I can't take it anymore
Tell me dear, what is it that you need
a dream, these lies I'll feed to you
When I stand before you with pleading eyes
To see right through me when I scream your lines
don't cry my dear
we will regain what once was ours
don't cry my dear
we will be rulers of the universe
if this is what you really need
a dream, these lies I'll feed you
my sweet darling close your eyes
holding tight to suffocate your cries
How is this possible
being able to feel something so real
from someone so fake
We'll live in our world on illusions
and I'll stand by you in oblivion
until I fall with the fatal wound
the bullet that I took for you
don't cry my dear
we will regain what once was ours
don't cry my dear
we will be rulers of the universe
if this is what you really need
a dream, these lies I'll feed you
my sweet darling close your eyes
holding tight to suffocate your cries
Feedback please. <3
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Posted: Tue Apr 18, 2006 1:09 pm
Not too bad. Not too god, either. Out of plain curiosity, why does the first line of the poem start with "And?"
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Posted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 3:36 pm
Yoder Not too bad. Not too god, either. Out of plain curiosity, why does the first line of the poem start with "And?"
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Posted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 7:00 pm
Umm... "and" has to do with connecting a thought before it and after it. And well... There isn;t anything before it. I was just saying is all.
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Posted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 8:35 pm
I'd like to claim poetic license for that one. It's just a word people don't normally start with because of what you said, but it works to me in my twisted head ^^
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Posted: Thu Apr 20, 2006 7:36 am
Meh, whatever floats your boat.
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