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 Posted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 2:07 am
I did a few pages of a graphic novel last year when I was still studying and I was wondering what you guys will think of it. The colouring isn't too hot because I was rushed to get it completed in time.   
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Posted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 4:34 am
hehehe... now that I have another look at them (after about half a year) I can see that I still have a lot of work to do... :-/
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Posted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 10:55 pm
I cant beleave no-one has said anything yet! If I dont get any comments then I'm leaving this f***ing guild scream Rogue Dragon You've been censored because I don't like vulgar language. Plus, you need to wait a little while before people log on and see your thread.
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Posted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 10:57 pm
Tis not asking for much ppl...
if you hate the pics then tell me (and why please) if you like them then a little "that's nice" will suffice
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Posted: Thu Apr 13, 2006 11:39 am
The art is good, but the naration is in serious need of help. Here are my tips:
1)NEVER have the narator refer to themself, UNLESS the narater is a character.
2)Graphic novel = Comic book, so everything in each frame must be considered just like making a comic book. Instead of wasting time telling that you are going to tell about some characters, tell about the setting. Then when you get to the characters, tell about them.
3)You might want to think about shifting the view angle from streight-on shots some more. About half of your frames are streight-on shots.
4)Last of all, you should try to make each frame absolutly necissary, and work as a whole instead of parts. The naration, dialog, and image should all work together to further the plot, or shape the readers experience. Once each frame works like that, each frame will either be needed or slow you down. This is what makes a good comic great.
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Posted: Thu Apr 13, 2006 2:03 pm
I like the lackadaisical drawing approach you have here. I like your use of color to make your illustrations more distinct. I don't know if this should be a major concern or not, considering the drawing style, but on that third page panel 1, the perspective for the buildings is all over the place, vs. the last panel on the previous page. It's kind of jarring and noticeable. I do think you can mess around withe perspective, but maybe not so drastically (for instance the way the street is curving up on the far upper right is very obvious.
And I agree with Rogue Dragon on the pacing and storytelling aspect. Don't have much to add to that.
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 11:30 pm
thanks for the commentry guys... I agree that the perspectives on the city shot were all whack and the narrative just wasn't worth the read.
This was my first attempt at anything like this, I'll post here again if/when I do anything esle.
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Posted: Wed May 17, 2006 1:06 pm
Your art is amazing but you might want to change the anlges a bit more. Do a couple of close ups and a angles looking up wuold really add some drama. Also unless changing the font serves some purpose to the story, character, or tone or mood I would keep it similar unless you're trying to show a character or volume to his voice. keep up the good work exclaim
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Posted: Mon May 29, 2006 7:28 am
With the fonts I was working on a concept of everyone speaks in a different voice and therefore has a different font.
I thought that as long as I keep them legible from a distance, it would be an interesting approach.
^_^ but thanks for the criticisms guys. I'm going to start working on a new comic/graphic novel soon... so I'll keep you posted blaugh
that graphic novel was done last year
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Posted: Tue Jun 13, 2006 7:05 pm
After all that has been said, I'd like to see more breaking of the frames. Maybe have a character or something of importance not have a frame and overlay the rest of the frames.
sweatdrop Not sure if I described that well, but I hope you get a the picture.
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