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 Posted: Mon Mar 07, 2005 1:36 pm
ok, just write any nature/cosmo Haiuku u want here (remember, the sylables are 5,7,5!)
*clears throat*
A Red Rose Blooming,
in the yellow morning sun,
can this be true love?
Starlight is dancing,
on the quiet pond ripples,
Is that peaceful, now?
The leaves are swaying,
upon the afternoon wind,
can't we be like that?
*bows* thanks, I know it sucks.. redface
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Posted: Wed Mar 09, 2005 2:16 pm
It's better then any of the ones I've tried to make.
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Posted: Sun Mar 13, 2005 11:28 am
better than mine, heres an example:
Deep purple rising
behind the midnight dark sky
dancing stars bright white
How bad is that?
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Posted: Tue Mar 15, 2005 6:48 pm
That's pretty cool. I like it. Can I put these poems in another guild giving credit to you guys?
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Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 6:53 pm
I don't get it. I don't do poetry, my gf does, so I'll leave it to her. heart
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Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 7:23 pm
I've never been good at poetry but if there's a good poem I'll usually like it.
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Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 7:26 pm
I don't share my poetry, unless it's something that doesn't mean that much to me. So it's probably something I would throw out anyways. twisted
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Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 7:27 pm
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Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 7:34 pm
Another reason is, people may not undestand what I am talking about or mean in my poetry, since it's personal in a way. I don't want someone trying to say stuff about my poetry, like I had this one person try to correct my poetry(which seriously that's just not right) on a word I spelt the way it's not suppose to be. The way I wrote it made a certain point though, that's why I wrote it that way. So for one I say someone else can not tell you your peotry is wrong or correct it for you. They can give suggestions maybe, that you might consider, but they can't flat out tell you you need to change something. twisted sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Mar 17, 2005 3:31 pm
Never correct poetry. Suggestions yes but not corrections. It's usually person in a way so if a word is splet wrong or different then ask if it's supposed to be that way and if not then you can vollenteer to spell it right but flat out "This is wrong" kinda thing. Poetry is the way the user wants it so it's never wrong.
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Posted: Thu Mar 17, 2005 4:54 pm
I love my GF's poetry, I'm not suppose to look at it, but I've found some. She's kind of touchy about some things. xp Don't get mad at me hun. I love you. heart heart
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Posted: Fri Mar 18, 2005 9:16 am
Why don't you tell her you love it then?
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Posted: Fri Mar 18, 2005 3:25 pm
Lucky_Tiger Why don't you tell her you love it then?
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Posted: Fri Mar 18, 2005 3:27 pm
I can understand that. I hate it when people read my work.
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Posted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 2:16 am
Lucky_Tiger That's pretty cool. I like it. Can I put these poems in another guild giving credit to you guys? if you mean mine, sure
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