█HEIGHT ▬ 5’11 (180cm) █WEIGHT ▬ 163 lbs (73.4 kg)
█HAIR ▬ Messy, flat mint colored. █CLOTHING ▬ Main, Casual Alternate, Formal Attire █ACCESSORIES ▬ Pictured Above: a few simple bangles, simple band, and watch. █EYES ▬ Deep red. █BUILD ▬ Toned but on the skinnier side. █TATTOOS ▬ None. █SCARS ▬ None. █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Blue-Green scales on his forearms & shins.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Sprinting (20 kph or 2x as fast as the average human) in short bursts. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Like a Komodo Dragon, he can produce bacterial mouth secretions [every 5 posts] that are corrosive that reduces blood pressure [causing dizziness] and stops blood clotting [must enter through an orifice or deep wound]. █Other Talents ▬ Can see things in clear detail twice as far as the average person when in sunlight, Strength. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Tenacity during combat. █Weakest Skill ▬ Night Vision is non-existent, Subpar Hearing, Navigation Ability is weak. █Other Skills ▬ Hand-to-Hand Combat, Survival Skills, Can sleep anywhere.
█LIKES █ ▬ (Hobbies) Cooking. █ ▬ (People) Literally Everyone. █ ▬ (Food) Mostly Everything. █ ▬ (Objects) Music, Games, Comics. █ ▬ (Animals) Anything fuzzy and cute. █DISLIKES █ ▬ (People)Anyone mean-spirited. █ ▬ (Food) Fishy foods. █ ▬ (Object) Slimey substances. █ ▬ (Animal) Anything creepy. █ ▬ (Fear) The dark. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Despite his difficult upbringing, Damien is quite the boy next door. He is friendly and accepting of all differences, as long as they don’t hurt other people. He has trouble with respecting personal space boundaries and is well known for his surprise hugs. Damien works well in a team and has never needed to be in the spotlight. He is a confident, brave fighter despite being exceptionally lazy otherwise. He is easily bored and craves human interaction. He can be quite silly and amusing. Damien enjoys seeing others smile. █Vernacular ▬ Higher-pitched voice, very relaxed and inviting. He tends to talk to everyone like they are his next best friend until they prove themselves to be unworthy. █Positive Traits ▬ Friendly, Accepting, Easily Adaptable, Loyal. █Negative Traits ▬ Self-Conscious, Gullible, Lackadaisical.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Damien does not remember his early childhood whatsoever. It wasn’t until he was about 7/8 that he began to retain memories, most of which were living like a rat on the street. Still ever the optimist, he usually did not steal for food but had friends who looked out for him. Out of necessity, he participated in a job which was on a well-known family with money and a questionable background when he was 13. Unfortunately his lack of experience was what allowed him to get caught by the elder sister who ran the household; they worked out a deal where he would be able to work to pay off his debts to the family. He took care of the household and began to learn to cook for the family while they spent most of their time handling the gambling ring business. He was too soft to be able to participate or help with the business, so he ended up getting a job as a server to have an upstanding, stable income as well as to learn from the cooks as he found the hobby to be something he quite enjoyed after being forced to work for the Shimizu household. Deciding he wanted to leave this questionable life behind him, he took the time to hone his natural fighting abilities. Damien was looking to have a steady source of basic necessities, such as housing and food. Deciding to pursue the lifestyle of a hunter at Beacon was the best option; this would satisfy his desire for a balanced life of stability and adventure all at once. Watching Yumeko train was a bit of inspiration for the idea, though their objectives were not at all similar. It would be nice to have a familiar face around as through the years, he was less of a maid and more like a part of the family (albeit weird part of the family).
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Afterglow █ ▬ Weapon - Sleek Glock 19 style dual pistols that have blades on the opposite ends of the weapon. █Melee Form ▬ The dual pistols each have a 15 in (38 cm) length blade attached to is that can be used for stabbing / slashing. Obviously, more focus on close quarters combat. █Ranged Form ▬ A pair of pistols that can fire up to 25 yd (22.8 m) Fires with accuracy. A fair amount of distance, though not sniper level. █Other Form(s) ▬ Not Applicable. █Ammo Type ▬ 10 Physical per magazine, 4 Dust per weapon. █ ▬ The weapon can jam if the blade portion is hit too hard. Also, there is the concern that an enemy could take advantage of the blade or trigger within close quarters range which is Damien's specialty.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Coin acquired from the Shimizu gambling ring █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Duality. █*AURA COLOR ▬ Deep Medium Aquamarine █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Damien’s aura inherently connected to his lizard scales. While leveling up, it gradually scales his defense. His opponents also take scaling damage from the sharp edges of the scales. Eventually once he is moderately able to control his semblance, he can build up the damage he receives in the form of a shock wave which knocks back and disorients his opponent momentarily. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ It makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife. He can maintain this aspect for 2 posts or 3 hits in succession, whichever occurs first. (5 Post CD). █*LEVEL 1▬ It makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife. He can maintain this aspect for 4 posts or 6 hits in succession, Whichever occurs first. (5 Post CD). █*LEVEL 2▬ It makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife. He can maintain this aspect for 8 posts or 9 hits in succession; whichever occurs first. (5 Post CD) There is an additional shock wave after 6 hits which knocks back (5 ft / 1.5 m) and disorients his opponent momentarily. It can be used once per semblance. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ It makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife. He can maintain this aspect for 10 posts or 12 hits in succession; whichever occurs first. (5 Post CD) There is an additional shock wave after 6 hits which knocks back (8 ft / 2.4 m) and disorients his opponent momentarily. It can be used once per semblance. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ Damien will still be accumulating damage while his aura is active and experiences recoil after the shock wave is applied.
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ (Teammates, if you have any) █NICKNAME(S) ▬ █OCCUPATION ▬ Server.
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 5’11 (180cm) █WEIGHT ▬ 163 lbs (73.4 kg)
█HAIR ▬ Messy, flat mint colored. █CLOTHING ▬ Main, Casual Alternate, Formal Attire █ACCESSORIES ▬ Pictured Above: a few simple bangles, simple band, and watch. █EYES ▬ Deep red. █BUILD ▬ Toned but on the skinnier side. █TATTOOS ▬ None. █SCARS ▬ None. █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Blue-Green scales on his forearms & shins.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Sprinting (20 kph) in short bursts. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Like a Komodo Dragon, he can produce mouth secretions that are corrosive. █Other Talents ▬ Exceptional Sun Vision (150 m), Strength. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Tenacity during combat. █Weakest Skill ▬ Night Vision is non-existent, Subpar Hearing, Navigation Ability is weak. █Other Skills ▬ Hand-to-Hand Combat, Survival Skills, Can sleep anywhere.
█LIKES █ ▬ (Hobbies) Cooking. █ ▬ (People) Literally Everyone. █ ▬ (Food) Mostly Everything. █ ▬ (Objects) Music, Games, Comics. █ ▬ (Animals) Anything fuzzy and cute. █DISLIKES █ ▬ (People)Anyone mean-spirited. █ ▬ (Food) Fishy foods. █ ▬ (Object) Slimey substances. █ ▬ (Animal) Anything creepy. █ ▬ (Fear) The dark. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Despite his difficult upbringing, Damien is quite the boy next door. He is friendly and accepting of all differences, as long as they don’t hurt other people. He has trouble with respecting personal space boundaries and is well known for his surprise hugs. Damien works well in a team and has never needed to be in the spotlight. He is a confident, brave fighter despite being exceptionally lazy otherwise. He is easily bored and craves human interaction. He can be quite silly and amusing. Damien enjoys seeing others smile. █Vernacular ▬ Higher-pitched voice, very relaxed and inviting. He tends to talk to everyone like they are his next best friend until they prove themselves to be unworthy. █Positive Traits ▬ Friendly, Accepting, Easily Adaptable, Loyal. █Negative Traits ▬ Self-Conscious, Gullible, Lackadaisical.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Damien does not remember his early childhood whatsoever. It wasn’t until he was about 7/8 that he began to retain memories, most of which were living like a rat on the street. Still ever the optimist, he usually did not steal for food but had friends who looked out for him. Out of necessity, he participated in a job which was on a well-known family with money and a questionable background when he was 13. Unfortunately his lack of experience was what allowed him to get caught by the elder sister who ran the household; they worked out a deal where he would be able to work to pay off his debts to the family. He took care of the household and began to learn to cook for the family while they spent most of their time handling the gambling ring business. He was too soft to be able to participate or help with the business, so he ended up getting a job as a server to have an upstanding, stable income as well as to learn from the cooks as he found the hobby to be something he quite enjoyed after being forced to work for the Shimizu household. Deciding he wanted to leave this questionable life behind him, he took the time to hone his natural fighting abilities. Damien was looking to have a steady source of basic necessities, such as housing and food. Deciding to pursue the lifestyle of a hunter at Beacon was the best option; this would satisfy his desire for a balanced life of stability and adventure all at once. Watching Yumeko train was a bit of inspiration for the idea, though their objectives were not at all similar. It would be nice to have a familiar face around as through the years, he was less of a maid and more like a part of the family (albeit weird part of the family).
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Afterglow █ ▬ Weapon █Melee Form ▬ 15 in (38 cm) Length. █Ranged Form ▬ 25 yd (22.8 m) Fires with Accuracy. █Other Form(s) ▬ Not Applicable. █Ammo Type ▬ 10 Physical per magazine, 4 Dust per weapon. █ ▬ The weapon can jam if the blade portion is hit too hard.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Coin acquired from the Shimizu gambling ring █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Duality. █*AURA COLOR ▬ Deep Medium Aquamarine █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Damien’s aura inherently connected to his lizard scales. While leveling up, it gradually scales his defense. His opponents also take scaling damage from the sharp edges of the scales. Eventually once he is moderately able to control his semblance, he can build up the damage he receives in the form of a shock wave which knocks back and disorients his opponent momentarily. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ He can maintain his aura for 2 posts or 3 hits in succession, whichever occurs first. It can be used once per day (15 Post CD). █*LEVEL 1▬ He can maintain his aura for 4 posts or 6 hits in succession, Whichever occurs first. I can be used twice per day (12 Post CD). █*LEVEL 2▬ He can maintain his aura for 8 posts or 9 hits in succession; whichever occurs first. There is an additional shock wave after 6 hits which knocks back (5 ft / 1.5 m) and disorients his opponent momentarily. It can be used three times per day (8 Post CD). █*LEVEL 3 ▬ He can maintain his aura for 10 posts or 12 hits in succession; whichever occurs first. There is an additional shock wave after 6 hits which knocks back (8 ft / 2.4 m) and disorients his opponent momentarily. It can be used 3 times per day (6 Post CD). █*DRAWBACKS ▬ Damien will still be accumulating damage while his aura is active and experiences recoil after the shock wave is applied.
✘ Judge, Jury, and Executioner ▄ ▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄ ▄ Greetings, I shall be your judge this evening. Whether that bodes good or ill for you is something we will see in our time together. While I usually have a knack for flair, i'll keep this much simple. I'll list any questions or concerns I have below on what needs to be done before we can get you approved, but i'll be free to contact on less... visible areas.
Judgement:
Archetype:
- Primary talent: I would change the wording to be more comparative/ descriptive. Like he can run as fast as a beowolf (or more so) or even twice as fast as the average person. Mostly because its easier for people to imagine/ incorporate for the rp since we don't really even specify exact speeds grimm run.
- Faunus trait: How often can be produce mouth secretions, and how corrosive is it? (can be that he has the corrosive secretion for X posts before X cool down or even X posts per day. As for corrosiveness, can it go through skin, wood, etc?)
- Sun vision: More of a clarification, but this pretty much just means you can see 150m in daylight? Or is it more that within 150m in sunlight he can see things very detailed? Like how was mentioned for primary talent, usually simpler things like twice as far as normal in sunlight or something works best.
Primary weapon:
- For the weapon, while image does provide a good idea of it, you should add a small (can be one line) description in each of its used forms. Like melee being that both guns has the 15 in blade attached to it that can be used for stabbing/ slashing, and ranged is it being a pair of pistol can can fire up to 25yd with good accuracy. And description pretty much just saying its a pair of pistols that have blades that can be used on the opposite ends.
- Also i'm going to assume the gun has a safety but...a drawback you can also have is if used in melee...someone could pull the trigger on damien? Or even if he using gun form and they get close, could push the blade towards him if they struggling for control of it. Just from how the image looks where if he using it for melee that seems like a possibility. But this part completely optional.
Semblance:
- When you say he can keep his aura up for X posts, do you mean in terms of making the scales stronger and sharper like in description or his actual aura will run out after those posts? As if its more the former, I would change the wording to say it makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife/ can cut through wood and can last X posts if you wanted to go example route. Or you could go the route of his scales can take X hits/ last X posts (whichever is shorter), and are as sharp as a knife/ can cut through wood. While showing how the sharpness scales per level. But this is just an example if it is the former.
- I would also remove the per day thing and drastically reduce the cool-downs in general. A 5 post cool-down seems most fitting for the scales and maybe changing the shock-wave cool-down so that is is say once per semblance use instead since that is essentially how the math adds up. But it is up to you if you want to here.
∰-Conclusion
This is all I currently see the need to change/ be clarified for now. This does not mean it shall be the end of it, as more questions may arise as we progress and I may have missed something. I am willing to be flexible on some thing if given good reason to, and i'll be open for any discussion you have or if you need any help with this. Thank you for your taking the time to go through this, and I will post another judgement if necessary once we've gone through all this. Hopefully this will be the only judgement needed, and you can fully begin your adventure in beacon...whether pleasant or otherwise. Feel free to contact me at any point... just send a message with the crows. ✘ Status: Inquiring ▄ ▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄▄ ▄
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ (Teammates, if you have any) █NICKNAME(S) ▬ █OCCUPATION ▬ Server.
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 5’11 (180cm) █WEIGHT ▬ 163 lbs (73.4 kg)
█HAIR ▬ Messy, flat mint colored. █CLOTHING ▬ Main, Casual Alternate, Formal Attire █ACCESSORIES ▬ Pictured Above: a few simple bangles, simple band, and watch. █EYES ▬ Deep red. █BUILD ▬ Toned but on the skinnier side. █TATTOOS ▬ None. █SCARS ▬ None. █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Blue-Green scales on his forearms & shins.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Sprinting (20 kph or 2x as fast as the average human) in short bursts. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Like a Komodo Dragon, he can produce bacterial mouth secretions [every 5 posts] that are corrosive that reduces blood pressure [causing dizziness] and stops blood clotting [must enter through an orifice or deep wound]. █Other Talents ▬ Can see things in clear detail twice as far as the average person when in sunlight, Strength. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Tenacity during combat. █Weakest Skill ▬ Night Vision is non-existent, Subpar Hearing, Navigation Ability is weak. █Other Skills ▬ Hand-to-Hand Combat, Survival Skills, Can sleep anywhere.
█LIKES █ ▬ (Hobbies) Cooking. █ ▬ (People) Literally Everyone. █ ▬ (Food) Mostly Everything. █ ▬ (Objects) Music, Games, Comics. █ ▬ (Animals) Anything fuzzy and cute. █DISLIKES █ ▬ (People)Anyone mean-spirited. █ ▬ (Food) Fishy foods. █ ▬ (Object) Slimey substances. █ ▬ (Animal) Anything creepy. █ ▬ (Fear) The dark. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Despite his difficult upbringing, Damien is quite the boy next door. He is friendly and accepting of all differences, as long as they don’t hurt other people. He has trouble with respecting personal space boundaries and is well known for his surprise hugs. Damien works well in a team and has never needed to be in the spotlight. He is a confident, brave fighter despite being exceptionally lazy otherwise. He is easily bored and craves human interaction. He can be quite silly and amusing. Damien enjoys seeing others smile. █Vernacular ▬ Higher-pitched voice, very relaxed and inviting. He tends to talk to everyone like they are his next best friend until they prove themselves to be unworthy. █Positive Traits ▬ Friendly, Accepting, Easily Adaptable, Loyal. █Negative Traits ▬ Self-Conscious, Gullible, Lackadaisical.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Damien does not remember his early childhood whatsoever. It wasn’t until he was about 7/8 that he began to retain memories, most of which were living like a rat on the street. Still ever the optimist, he usually did not steal for food but had friends who looked out for him. Out of necessity, he participated in a job which was on a well-known family with money and a questionable background when he was 13. Unfortunately his lack of experience was what allowed him to get caught by the elder sister who ran the household; they worked out a deal where he would be able to work to pay off his debts to the family. He took care of the household and began to learn to cook for the family while they spent most of their time handling the gambling ring business. He was too soft to be able to participate or help with the business, so he ended up getting a job as a server to have an upstanding, stable income as well as to learn from the cooks as he found the hobby to be something he quite enjoyed after being forced to work for the Shimizu household. Deciding he wanted to leave this questionable life behind him, he took the time to hone his natural fighting abilities. Damien was looking to have a steady source of basic necessities, such as housing and food. Deciding to pursue the lifestyle of a hunter at Beacon was the best option; this would satisfy his desire for a balanced life of stability and adventure all at once. Watching Yumeko train was a bit of inspiration for the idea, though their objectives were not at all similar. It would be nice to have a familiar face around as through the years, he was less of a maid and more like a part of the family (albeit weird part of the family).
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Afterglow █ ▬ Weapon - Sleek Glock 19 style dual pistols that have blades on the opposite ends of the weapon. █Melee Form ▬ The dual pistols each have a 15 in (38 cm) length blade attached to is that can be used for stabbing / slashing. Obviously, more focus on close quarters combat. █Ranged Form ▬ A pair of pistols that can fire up to 25 yd (22.8 m) Fires with accuracy. A fair amount of distance, though not sniper level. █Other Form(s) ▬ Not Applicable. █Ammo Type ▬ 10 Physical per magazine, 4 Dust per weapon. █ ▬ The weapon can jam if the blade portion is hit too hard. Also, there is the concern that an enemy could take advantage of the blade or trigger within close quarters range which is Damien's specialty.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Coin acquired from the Shimizu gambling ring █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Duality. █*AURA COLOR ▬ Deep Medium Aquamarine █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Damien’s aura inherently connected to his lizard scales. While leveling up, it gradually scales his defense. His opponents also take scaling damage from the sharp edges of the scales. Eventually once he is moderately able to control his semblance, he can build up the damage he receives in the form of a shock wave which knocks back and disorients his opponent momentarily. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ It makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife. He can maintain this aspect for 2 posts or 3 hits in succession, whichever occurs first. (5 Post CD). █*LEVEL 1▬ It makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife. He can maintain this aspect for 4 posts or 6 hits in succession, Whichever occurs first. (5 Post CD). █*LEVEL 2▬ It makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife. He can maintain this aspect for 8 posts or 9 hits in succession; whichever occurs first. (5 Post CD) There is an additional shock wave after 6 hits which knocks back (5 ft / 1.5 m) and disorients his opponent momentarily. It can be used once per semblance. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ It makes his scales as strong as steel and sharp as a knife. He can maintain this aspect for 10 posts or 12 hits in succession; whichever occurs first. (5 Post CD) There is an additional shock wave after 6 hits which knocks back (8 ft / 2.4 m) and disorients his opponent momentarily. It can be used once per semblance. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ Damien will still be accumulating damage while his aura is active and experiences recoil after the shock wave is applied.
