█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb dermal piercing on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of a Jerboa, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick with parrying or diverting most direct attacks. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed/heard approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █ ▬Quiet and peaceful places. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely sour foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Felines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ Loud noises, crowded places. █ ▬ Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Honest but somewhat shy, to be around people can get overwhelming sometimes. Pure intentions and rather sweet. Seems reserved but she is just intimidated by people outside of a combat standpoint █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced. Pretty soft spoken but not quite whispering. Has a bit or a british/hindu accent █Positive Traits ▬ Honest, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Very prone to hiding which can be confused with cowardice, self conscious of her height, hates confrontation.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>]. █Melee Form ▬ Dagger [10 inches] █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff [60 inches] █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet that also is a detachable pommel as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots. Without aura it will be a pretty weak weapon.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracota █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to corrode inorganic matter not protected by aura hence making it easier to break/go through. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can corrode down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and bigger the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to corrode through it. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to corrode through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the corrosion of weaker materials [if user touched a surface, she can activate the corrosion process in the following post] █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Corrosion of thicker materials takes less effort. User can time the corrosion for a longer interval [can activate 2 posts later instead of 1 like in the previous stage]. For every low corrosion (brick, wood and other non-resisting materials) there is a mandatory 1 post cool down. For stronger materials (reinforced matter, or heavy metal) it will vary from 4-5 posts. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. The sensation of burn injuries will occur if overused [depending on the level]. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be corroded, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state [automatic 1 post wait time]. 2 whole posts in contact before its fully corroded for heavy materials, 1 post for lesser matter (ex. wood, weakened concrete etc.). If corroding more than 1 material without a 2 post cooldown, then the burn injuries start █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of corroding being quicker, user now cannot exceed affecting more than 2 materials without a 3 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the corrosion within the post limit, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the process. User now cannot exceed affecting more than 3 materials without a 4 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. If corrosion does not occur within the post span given, user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface. User now cannot exceed affecting more than 4 materials without a 5 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 3rd degree burn on themselves.
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Posted: Sun Nov 24, 2019 9:22 am
Ivory de Mors
Ivory de Mors | Nur Kalene
█ █ ╫ C O R E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of most mammals, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick in closing gaps. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely spicy foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Canines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ To end up in a trap she cannot escape from. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Composed and often carrying a relaxed posture, but do not be fooled as her guard is always up. Sassy at times and will flirt only if she is extremely comfortable with her surroundings █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced █Positive Traits ▬ Does things by the book, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Sarcastic and cynical. She will literally follow the rules by the book, this causing unwanted chaos.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>] █Melee Form ▬ Dagger █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracota █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to rust inorganic matter hence making it easier to break/go through. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can rust down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and size the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to consume through it. It is ineffective against organic life and has a range of 10ft radius. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to consume through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. Semblance can now inflict up to a 1st degree burn on organic life. Range has increased to 12.5ft radius. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the disintegration of weaker materials with intervals of 10 seconds before activating. Can now inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on organic life. Range remains the same. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Consumption of thicker materials takes little effort (the same effort as weaker materials). User can time the disintegration for up to 30 seconds maximum. Semblance can now inflict up to a 3rd degree burn on organic life and range is increased to 15ft radius. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. For inorganic matter it has to be with her hands or feet. Burn injuries will occur if overused. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be consumed, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state. █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of rusting being quicker, user now needs to stop touching surface at the right time, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the disintegration within those 10 seconds, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the rusting process. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. It disintegration does not occur within the 30 second span user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface.
Good evening/morning/afternoon, I am Aeval Silvertongue, but you may call me Silver. I am going to be your judge today. ^^
*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• This is more a curiosity more than anything, but what type of food shop do your parents run? • And how did Nur figure out what type of faunus she was? • Is the jewel on her forehead removable and is it a cultural accessory or is it just fashionable? • Term for her fear: Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped.
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
- So is Nur's Primary Talent defense or speed? Because her description says she can close the gap quickly. - Primary Weapon: - This is more to gauge or understand how weak it is but, how does it transform between weapons? - How it works must follow this rule, located in General Profile Rules under Weapon Rules:
Quote:
(2.) 20% Sizeshift - Please don't have your weapon or character size shifting more than 20%. It is just unrealistic. Your cellphone cannot shift into a battleaxe. Sorry.
- Semblance: - Well, I would first have to say, that as it stands, you should mention in your semblance that it can only effect "inorganic materials" not protected by aura. - I have concerns with it possibly effecting Organic matter such as people when in the description says it only effects "inorganic matter". Please explain how this works and why the change? - It seems a bit confusing that you give it a range of radius when one of the drawbacks is that you or your weapon must be touching. Could you please explain or change it to be the range in which your staff can reach? - As for how long it takes into effect, please change time into number of posts to make it clearer. - Please clarify its effects, b/c neither disintegration and burning are in the general description you only mention rusting of inorganic matter. So, you might want to replace disintegrate with rust? - Lvl 0's drawback, how long does it take to effect? - And how many posts would you say would it take to cool-down before she could use this semblance again? As it's currently worded, it makes it sound like she can use it as many times as she likes without burning her aura.
*Reminder*
► She is allowed to have those faunus physical features (big ears, hind legs, tail) so long as it doesn't give her an advantage over a person (i.e, better hearing, speed, etc) unless its part of the faunus ability. So where hers is fast reflexes, her ears don't give better hearing, tail not better balance, hind legs not faster than average faunus.
█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of most mammals, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick in closing gaps. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely spicy foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Canines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ To end up in a trap she cannot escape from. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Composed and often carrying a relaxed posture, but do not be fooled as her guard is always up. Sassy at times and will flirt only if she is extremely comfortable with her surroundings █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced █Positive Traits ▬ Does things by the book, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Sarcastic and cynical. She will literally follow the rules by the book, this causing unwanted chaos.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>] █Melee Form ▬ Dagger █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracota █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to rust inorganic matter hence making it easier to break/go through. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can rust down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and size the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to consume through it. It is ineffective against organic life and has a range of 10ft radius. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to consume through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. Semblance can now inflict up to a 1st degree burn on organic life. Range has increased to 12.5ft radius. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the disintegration of weaker materials with intervals of 10 seconds before activating. Can now inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on organic life. Range remains the same. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Consumption of thicker materials takes little effort (the same effort as weaker materials). User can time the disintegration for up to 30 seconds maximum. Semblance can now inflict up to a 3rd degree burn on organic life and range is increased to 15ft radius. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. For inorganic matter it has to be with her hands or feet. Burn injuries will occur if overused. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be consumed, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state. █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of rusting being quicker, user now needs to stop touching surface at the right time, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the disintegration within those 10 seconds, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the rusting process. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. It disintegration does not occur within the 30 second span user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface.
Good evening/morning/afternoon, I am Aeval Silvertongue, but you may call me Silver. I am going to be your judge today. ^^
*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• This is more a curiosity more than anything, but what type of food shop do your parents run? I am picturing a very hindu-esque shop so spices, fruits and maybe some finger foods like Rotti. • And how did Nur figure out what type of faunus she was? I am thinking most likely a doctor or someone that knew what a jerboa looked like. A hilarious realization for the young parents • Is the jewel on her forehead removable and is it a cultural accessory or is it just fashionable? Cultural accessory, you will never catch her without it. Thinking of maybe making it a dermal piercing but not sure if thats too big of a piercing • Term for her fear: Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped. Updated it to this term, thank you!
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
- So is Nur's Primary Talent defense or speed? Because her description says she can close the gap quickly. When i wrote closing gaps quickly, i was referring to holes in the defense line. Whether it was parrying or shielding, I just went ahead and reworded it. Hopefully its better now.
- Primary Weapon: - This is more to gauge or understand how weak it is but, how does it transform between weapons? - How it works must follow this rule, located in General Profile Rules under Weapon Rules:
Quote:
(2.) 20% Sizeshift - Please don't have your weapon or character size shifting more than 20%. It is just unrealistic. Your cellphone cannot shift into a battleaxe. Sorry.
The dagger is 10 inches and is drawn out similar to the assassins creed hidden knife, and the staff form is 60 inches/5ft. since the average staff ranges from 4ft-9ft and anything abouve 5ft might make the weapon too thin in my opinion. Attached as images/videos of how i am picturing this weapon perfomring, hopefully they help.
- Semblance: - Well, I would first have to say, that as it stands, you should mention in your semblance that it can only effect "inorganic materials" not protected by aura. - I have concerns with it possibly effecting Organic matter such as people when in the description says it only effects "inorganic matter". Please explain how this works and why the change? - It seems a bit confusing that you give it a range of radius when one of the drawbacks is that you or your weapon must be touching. Could you please explain or change it to be the range in which your staff can reach? - As for how long it takes into effect, please change time into number of posts to make it clearer. - Please clarify its effects, b/c neither disintegration and burning are in the general description you only mention rusting of inorganic matter. So, you might want to replace disintegrate with rust? - Lvl 0's drawback, how long does it take to effect? - And how many posts would you say would it take to cool-down before she could use this semblance again? As it's currently worded, it makes it sound like she can use it as many times as she likes without burning her aura.
- It now states it will affect inorganic matter without protected aura -The change from inorganic to organic was making reference to some of the early signs of a rust infection in a cut. It has been updated to being able to affect organic life in the later stages. - Completely agree, its now the range of the staff can reach, so based on the previous changes it would be 5ft range. - Done and done! 10 seconds = 1 post/same post and 30 seconds = has to wait 1-2 posts to activate terrain. Like a landmine almost if it makes sense? - As previously discussed, it turns out the word i was looking for was corrosion. So it has been fixed! - Updated the drawback for level 0, as well as levels 1, 2, 3!! - Added cooldown posts. Please lemme know if they are correct, not quite sure myself. -Also this link shows how i am picturing this semblance working both during action and during its cooldown hopefully it helps? ]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hft3Dj9NJnA
*Reminder*
► She is allowed to have those faunus physical features (big ears, hind legs, tail) so long as it doesn't give her an advantage over a person (i.e, better hearing, speed, etc) unless its part of the faunus ability. So where hers is fast reflexes, her ears don't give better hearing, tail not better balance, hind legs not faster than average faunus.
Well aware of it, if anything it is a disadvantage since she gets hurt by loud noises rather than gaining extra hearing.
Posted: Sun Dec 08, 2019 6:43 pm
Ivory de Mors
Ivory de Mors | Nur Kalene
█ █ ╫ C O R E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb dermal piercing on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of a Jerboa, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick with parrying or diverting most direct attacks. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed/heard approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely sour foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Felines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Composed and often carrying a relaxed posture that sometimes comes off as lazy, but do not be fooled as her guard is always up. Sassy at times and will flirt only if she is extremely comfortable with her surroundings █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced. Pretty soft spoken but not quite whispering. █Positive Traits ▬ Does things by the book, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Sarcastic and cynical. She will literally follow the rules by the book, this causing unwanted chaos.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>] █Melee Form ▬ Dagger [10 inches] █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff [60 inches] █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracotta █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to corrode inorganic matter not protected by aura hence making it easier to break/go through. Later on progressing to affect organic matter █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can corrode down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and size the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to corrode through it. It is ineffective against organic life in this stage. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to corrode through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. Semblance can now inflict the sensation of up to a 1st degree burn on organic life. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the corrosion of weaker materials with intervals of 10 seconds before activating [1 post active]. Can now inflict the sensation of up to a 2nd degree burn on organic life. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Corrosion of thicker materials takes little effort (the same effort as weaker materials). User can time the corrosion for up to 30 seconds maximum [2 posts active]. Semblance can now inflict sensation of up to a 3rd degree burn on organic life. For every low corrosion (brick, wood and other non-resisting materials) there is a mandatory 1 post cool down. For stronger materials (reinforced matter, or heavy metal) it will vary from 2-3 posts. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. For inorganic matter it has to be with her hands or feet. The sensation of burn injuries will occur if overused. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be consumed, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state. [2 whole posts in contact before its fully corroded for heavy materials, 1 post for lesser matter (ex. wood, weakened concrete etc.)] █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of rusting being quicker, user now needs to stop touching surface at the right time, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. [1-2 posts to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a hot stove type of deal) █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the disintegration within those 10 seconds, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the rusting process. [2 posts to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a hot stove type of deal) █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. It disintegration does not occur within the 30 second span user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface.[1 post to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a kiln type of deal)]
narxfang
xLulie
Deadly_Tiger
Youroka Kage
1234boo75
Apathetic Writer
Okay, we are almost there. First off, I appreciate the swiftness of your edits asked of you. ^^
*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• Mighty want to put knitting kit under Items.
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
- Primary Weapon: - Concerning the transformation from the bracelet-to-dagger/staff transformation, as it is currently worded if not imbued with aura, it would be an extremely weak weapon at this time. - The dagger-to-staff and vice versa forms are fine to kaleidoscope and lock or collapse into form. - My suggestion would be that the bracelet be a detachable pommel for your primary weapon where you are able to place a dust crystal. - Either that or: To get to fit the rule, you might change the bracelet to a Bracer. - Possible Drawback to previously stated option: to getting to staff form, you must first go from Bracer --> Dagger form, then from Dagger form --> Staff form - Semblance: - It should stay with inorganic matter, rather than moving on to organic matter. - Lvl 0: Might want to switch the word Size for "bigger".
█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb dermal piercing on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of a Jerboa, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick with parrying or diverting most direct attacks. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed/heard approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely sour foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Felines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Composed and often carrying a relaxed posture that sometimes comes off as lazy, but do not be fooled as her guard is always up. Sassy at times and will flirt only if she is extremely comfortable with her surroundings █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced. Pretty soft spoken but not quite whispering. █Positive Traits ▬ Does things by the book, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Sarcastic and cynical. She will literally follow the rules by the book, this causing unwanted chaos.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>] █Melee Form ▬ Dagger [10 inches] █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff [60 inches] █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracotta █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to corrode inorganic matter not protected by aura hence making it easier to break/go through. Later on progressing to affect organic matter █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can corrode down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and size the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to corrode through it. It is ineffective against organic life in this stage. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to corrode through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. Semblance can now inflict the sensation of up to a 1st degree burn on organic life. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the corrosion of weaker materials with intervals of 10 seconds before activating [1 post active]. Can now inflict the sensation of up to a 2nd degree burn on organic life. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Corrosion of thicker materials takes little effort (the same effort as weaker materials). User can time the corrosion for up to 30 seconds maximum [2 posts active]. Semblance can now inflict sensation of up to a 3rd degree burn on organic life. For every low corrosion (brick, wood and other non-resisting materials) there is a mandatory 1 post cool down. For stronger materials (reinforced matter, or heavy metal) it will vary from 2-3 posts. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. For inorganic matter it has to be with her hands or feet. The sensation of burn injuries will occur if overused. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be consumed, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state. [2 whole posts in contact before its fully corroded for heavy materials, 1 post for lesser matter (ex. wood, weakened concrete etc.)] █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of rusting being quicker, user now needs to stop touching surface at the right time, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. [1-2 posts to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a hot stove type of deal) █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the disintegration within those 10 seconds, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the rusting process. [2 posts to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a hot stove type of deal) █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. It disintegration does not occur within the 30 second span user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface.[1 post to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a kiln type of deal)]
narxfang
xLulie
Deadly_Tiger
Youroka Kage
1234boo75
Apathetic Writer
Okay, we are almost there. First off, I appreciate the swiftness of your edits asked of you. ^^
*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• Mighty want to put knitting kit under Items.
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
- Primary Weapon: - Concerning the transformation from the bracelet-to-dagger/staff transformation, as it is currently worded if not imbued with aura, it would be an extremely weak weapon at this time. - The dagger-to-staff and vice versa forms are fine to kaleidoscope and lock or collapse into form. - My suggestion would be that the bracelet be a detachable pommel for your primary weapon where you are able to place a dust crystal. - Either that or: To get to fit the rule, you might change the bracelet to a Bracer. - Possible Drawback to previously stated option: to getting to staff form, you must first go from Bracer --> Dagger form, then from Dagger form --> Staff form - Semblance: - It should stay with inorganic matter, rather than moving on to organic matter. - Lvl 0: Might want to switch the word Size for "bigger".
*Reminder*
► N/A
All of these requirements have been changed/updated!
Posted: Fri Dec 20, 2019 8:01 am
Ivory de Mors
Ivory de Mors | Nur Kalene
█ █ ╫ C O R E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb dermal piercing on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of a Jerboa, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick with parrying or diverting most direct attacks. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed/heard approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely sour foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Felines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Composed and often carrying a relaxed posture that sometimes comes off as lazy, but do not be fooled as her guard is always up. Sassy at times and will flirt only if she is extremely comfortable with her surroundings █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced. Pretty soft spoken but not quite whispering. █Positive Traits ▬ Does things by the book, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Sarcastic and cynical. She will literally follow the rules by the book, this causing unwanted chaos.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>]. █Melee Form ▬ Dagger [10 inches] █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff [60 inches] █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet that also is a detachable pommel as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots. Without aura it will be a pretty weak weapon.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracota █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to corrode inorganic matter not protected by aura hence making it easier to break/go through. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can corrode down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and bigger the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to corrode through it. It is ineffective against organic life in this stage. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to corrode through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the corrosion of weaker materials with intervals of 10 seconds before activating [1 post active]. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Corrosion of thicker materials takes little effort (the same effort as weaker materials). User can time the corrosion for up to 30 seconds maximum [2 posts active]. For every low corrosion (brick, wood and other non-resisting materials) there is a mandatory 1 post cool down. For stronger materials (reinforced matter, or heavy metal) it will vary from 2-3 posts. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. The sensation of burn injuries will occur if overused. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be consumed, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state. [2 whole posts in contact before its fully corroded for heavy materials, 1 post for lesser matter (ex. wood, weakened concrete etc.)] █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of rusting being quicker, user now needs to stop touching surface at the right time, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. [1-2 posts to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a hot stove type of deal) █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the disintegration within those 10 seconds, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the rusting process. [2 posts to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a hot stove type of deal) █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. It disintegration does not occur within the 30 second span user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface.[1 post to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a kiln type of deal)]
Okay, we are so close, just a few more edits to go. ^^
*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• N/A
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
- Semblance: - It should stay with inorganic matter, rather than moving on to organic matter. - It might be easier to understand by taking away Seconds description altogether and just use the term: Post Counts. - So just a question in regards in terms of the Timed Intervals: does it mean after she has touched her target/the inorganic matter, that she can activate corrosion within 1 Post of her last contact, in example? • Personally, I would suggest if she loses contact might want to make it 1 post before she can continue. Cool-down might wanna be 4-5 posts. - Also, please remove words like rusting and disintegration, and put corrosion instead since that's what's in the general description. - I am curious: how much (activation-wise) is considered "over-using"? - If you had it worded like: "She can try to corrode one or a few objects multiple times, but any attempt past 2 objects without cool-down will inflict burns on herself" then should be fine without mandatory one.
█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb dermal piercing on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of a Jerboa, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick with parrying or diverting most direct attacks. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed/heard approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely sour foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Felines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Composed and often carrying a relaxed posture that sometimes comes off as lazy, but do not be fooled as her guard is always up. Sassy at times and will flirt only if she is extremely comfortable with her surroundings █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced. Pretty soft spoken but not quite whispering. █Positive Traits ▬ Does things by the book, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Sarcastic and cynical. She will literally follow the rules by the book, this causing unwanted chaos.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>]. █Melee Form ▬ Dagger [10 inches] █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff [60 inches] █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet that also is a detachable pommel as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots. Without aura it will be a pretty weak weapon.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracota █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to corrode inorganic matter not protected by aura hence making it easier to break/go through. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can corrode down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and bigger the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to corrode through it. It is ineffective against organic life in this stage. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to corrode through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the corrosion of weaker materials with intervals of 10 seconds before activating [1 post active]. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Corrosion of thicker materials takes little effort (the same effort as weaker materials). User can time the corrosion for up to 30 seconds maximum [2 posts active]. For every low corrosion (brick, wood and other non-resisting materials) there is a mandatory 1 post cool down. For stronger materials (reinforced matter, or heavy metal) it will vary from 2-3 posts. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. The sensation of burn injuries will occur if overused. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be consumed, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state. [2 whole posts in contact before its fully corroded for heavy materials, 1 post for lesser matter (ex. wood, weakened concrete etc.)] █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of rusting being quicker, user now needs to stop touching surface at the right time, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. [1-2 posts to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a hot stove type of deal) █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the disintegration within those 10 seconds, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the rusting process. [2 posts to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a hot stove type of deal) █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. It disintegration does not occur within the 30 second span user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface.[1 post to fully corrode, sensation of burn injury is immediately. (like touching a kiln type of deal)]
Okay, we are so close, just a few more edits to go. ^^
*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• N/A
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
- Semblance: - It should stay with inorganic matter, rather than moving on to organic matter. - It might be easier to understand by taking away Seconds description altogether and just use the term: Post Counts. - So just a question in regards in terms of the Timed Intervals: does it mean after she has touched her target/the inorganic matter, that she can activate corrosion within 1 Post of her last contact, in example? • Personally, I would suggest if she loses contact might want to make it 1 post before she can continue. Cool-down might wanna be 4-5 posts. - Also, please remove words like rusting and disintegration, and put corrosion instead since that's what's in the general description. - I am curious: how much (activation-wise) is considered "over-using"? - If you had it worded like: "She can try to corrode one or a few objects multiple times, but any attempt past 2 objects without cool-down will inflict burns on herself" then should be fine without mandatory one.
*Reminder*
- N/A
I believe all of these have been fixed now? including an automatic cooldown for when contact is interrupted and removing seconds and adding the post counts. Let me know if there is anything else.
Posted: Sun Feb 02, 2020 10:38 am
Ivory de Mors
Ivory de Mors | Nur Kalene
█ █ ╫ C O R E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb dermal piercing on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of a Jerboa, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick with parrying or diverting most direct attacks. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed/heard approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely sour foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Felines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Composed and often carrying a relaxed posture that sometimes comes off as lazy, but do not be fooled as her guard is always up. Sassy at times and will flirt only if she is extremely comfortable with her surroundings █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced. Pretty soft spoken but not quite whispering. █Positive Traits ▬ Does things by the book, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Sarcastic and cynical. She will literally follow the rules by the book, this causing unwanted chaos.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>]. █Melee Form ▬ Dagger [10 inches] █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff [60 inches] █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet that also is a detachable pommel as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots. Without aura it will be a pretty weak weapon.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracota █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to corrode inorganic matter not protected by aura hence making it easier to break/go through. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can corrode down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and bigger the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to corrode through it. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to corrode through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the corrosion of weaker materials [if user touched a surface, she can activate the corrosion process in the following post] █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Corrosion of thicker materials takes less effort. User can time the corrosion for a longer interval [can activate 2 posts later instead of 1 like in the previous stage]. For every low corrosion (brick, wood and other non-resisting materials) there is a mandatory 1 post cool down. For stronger materials (reinforced matter, or heavy metal) it will vary from 4-5 posts. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. The sensation of burn injuries will occur if overused [depending on the level]. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be corroded, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state [automatic 1 post wait time]. 2 whole posts in contact before its fully corroded for heavy materials, 1 post for lesser matter (ex. wood, weakened concrete etc.). If corroding more than 1 material without a 2 post cooldown, then the burn injuries start █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of corroding being quicker, user now cannot exceed affecting more than 2 materials without a 3 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the corrosion within the post limit, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the process. User now cannot exceed affecting more than 3 materials without a 4 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. If corrosion does not occur within the post span given, user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface. User now cannot exceed affecting more than 4 materials without a 5 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 3rd degree burn on themselves.
█*NAME ▬ Nur Kalene █*AGE ▬ 18 █*FACTION ▬ ℣ale █*ROLE ▬ Student █*SEX ▬ Female █*SPECIES ▬ Faunus (Long Eared Jerboa) | Should be noted most people cannot figure out exactly what she is
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬Nur, Nuri, Nur Nur, Kale (please don't) █OCCUPATION ▬ Student
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 6'0 █WEIGHT ▬ 200
█HAIR ▬ Olive Green █CLOTHING ▬ Varies on the task and event █ACCESSORIES ▬ Piercings on her ears and a red orb dermal piercing on her forehead █EYES ▬ Red █BUILD ▬ Slim, legs are more built █TATTOOS ▬ n/a █SCARS ▬ Whatever little thing she gets from practice █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬ Long jerboa ears, a thin tail that fluffs up at the end, her legs slowly turn into the hind legs of a Jerboa, and spots on her cheek bones/nose.
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Defense: Whether it is defending herself or her ally, Nur is quick with parrying or diverting most direct attacks. █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ Fast Reflexes: Just like any average animal in the wild, Nur has a reaction above average to her surroundings. Whether it is something she sensed/heard approaching or any sudden movement she can catch onto. █Other Talents ▬ Sense of direction: It is very odd for Nur to get lost. Sneaking: She is dangerously quiet when she needs to be. █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Escape artist: despite her height, there is no crook or hole that for some reason Nur can't use to hide her presence with or use to escape safely. The fact that she is quiet does not make it better for her opponent. █Weakest Skill ▬ Loud noises: Due to the size of her ears, loud noises at short range affect her balance and/or reactions greatly. Even with earbuds certain frequencies will still manage to affect her, causing her to either freeze or take the muffling of the noise as a priority. █Other Skills ▬ Leg Strength, Flexibility, and Acrobatics
█LIKES █ ▬ Knitting █ ▬ Calm yet social people, sweethearts, overall happy folk. █ ▬ Organic foods, mostly fruits █ ▬ Shiny items/trinkets █ ▬ Birds, she has the tendency to try and catch them. █ ▬Quiet and peaceful places. █DISLIKES █ ▬ Anti-faunus people, rude and harmful people. █ ▬ Bitter and extremely sour foods █ ▬ Anything that stinks █ ▬ Felines tend to make her anxious yet curious █ ▬ Loud noises, crowded places. █ ▬ Cleithrophobia, the fear of being trapped. █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Honest but somewhat shy, to be around people can get overwhelming sometimes. Pure intentions and rather sweet. Seems reserved but she is just intimidated by people outside of a combat standpoint █Vernacular ▬ Proper speech, nothing too advanced. Pretty soft spoken but not quite whispering. Has a bit or a british/hindu accent █Positive Traits ▬ Honest, optimistic, friendly. █Negative Traits ▬ Very prone to hiding which can be confused with cowardice, self conscious of her height, hates confrontation.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ • Born in the city of Vale, child of a mechanic and a food shop keeper. • Because her father was a Kangaroo faunus and her mother a Fox faunus, it took a while to figure out what type faunus she was until later on. • Nur always loved shiny items, she would often wander off in order to collect them just like her mother had the tendency to do the same with metal scraps. • She grew up admiring the hunters and huntresses that would risk their lives to keep the rest of the population safe. • The discrimination against of faunus never truly affected her, for her parents always carried themselves with pride and that was all she saw. • When becoming old enough, Nur suggested studying to become a huntress. Something that was received with good graces. • After acquiring a weapon with the help of her father and following the right connections with her mother, Nur managed to enroll in order to start her own journey.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Kaala Sona █ ▬ [See Right ===>]. █Melee Form ▬ Dagger [10 inches] █Ranged Form ▬ (technically mid-range) Staff [60 inches] █Other Form(s) ▬ Bracelet that also is a detachable pommel as concealed form █Ammo Type ▬ The glowing red center can harness dust to be used as an enhanced attack. It usually alternates between ice, fire, and electric dust. █ ▬ Due to being mostly a close and mid range attack weapon, it is rendered useless in long range combat. Also due to the small space in her staff, instead of 8 it carries 6 slots. Without aura it will be a pretty weak weapon.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Trinkets she collects during her journeys █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Jang █*AURA COLOR ▬ Terracota █*DESCRIPTION █ ▬ Jang is an active semblance that gives the user the ability to corrode inorganic matter not protected by aura hence making it easier to break/go through. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ User can corrode down inorganic materials hence making them easier to break through. The thicker and bigger the material is, the longer it takes for the semblance to corrode through it. █*LEVEL 1▬ It becomes easier for user to corrode through materials, becoming instant on weaker forms like ground/sand/lesser concretes. █*LEVEL 2▬ Semblance can now time the corrosion of weaker materials [if user touched a surface, she can activate the corrosion process in the following post] █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Corrosion of thicker materials takes less effort. User can time the corrosion for a longer interval [can activate 2 posts later instead of 1 like in the previous stage]. For every low corrosion (brick, wood and other non-resisting materials) there is a mandatory 1 post cool down. For stronger materials (reinforced matter, or heavy metal) it will vary from 4-5 posts. █*DRAWBACKS ▬ User must have some form of contact with the surface it is affecting, whether it is via weapon or physical touch with any of their limbs. The sensation of burn injuries will occur if overused [depending on the level]. Level of further drawbacks listed based on the level of the semblance. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Must remain contact with the material that is wished to be corroded, if the process is broken the consistency will revert to its original state [automatic 1 post wait time]. 2 whole posts in contact before its fully corroded for heavy materials, 1 post for lesser matter (ex. wood, weakened concrete etc.). If corroding more than 1 material without a 2 post cooldown, then the burn injuries start █*LEVEL 1▬ Due to the process of corroding being quicker, user now cannot exceed affecting more than 2 materials without a 3 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. █*LEVEL 2▬ If user does not activate the corrosion within the post limit, they would need to make contact with the surface once more to start the process. User now cannot exceed affecting more than 3 materials without a 4 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 2nd degree burn on themselves. █*LEVEL 3 ▬ Over exertion of the semblance will cause severe burn injuries. If corrosion does not occur within the post span given, user will need to engage in contact once more to reactivate that surface. User now cannot exceed affecting more than 4 materials without a 5 post cooldown, otherwise they can inflict up to a 3rd degree burn on themselves.
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