█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬ Jackie █OCCUPATION ▬ Jeweler: Specialty is flower jeweler (crowns, necklaces, earrings, rings, and bracelets. Deals with real flowers, artificial flowers, and maybe stones). She is a vendor in the streets of Vale.
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 5 ft. 7 in. █WEIGHT ▬ 130 lbs.
█HAIR ▬ Red █CLOTHING ▬ Mostly kimonos █ACCESSORIES ▬ █EYES ▬ milk chocolate brown █BUILD ▬ Jacqueline standing at a medium height, had olive tan skin. Against her olive tan skin, her long layered red hair with bangs stands out as her most unique feature. With big brown eyes and a v shaped chin, she didn't one to have a full blown smile. Maybe get a little smirk. Her breast large and soft like marshmallows, a small waist, and a nice round backside. Jacqueline is full figured and what they called shaped like a coca bottle. Though not an amazon. she has a short torso, but really long legs that makes up her 5'7 frame complete. █TATTOOS ▬ █SCARS ▬ Stretch marks █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Making her accessories █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ interior decorating █Other Talents ▬ building things out of wood (woodworking). █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Archery █Weakest Skill ▬ Swordsmanship █Other Skills ▬ teamwork (when she trust the person) and survival
█LIKES █ ▬ Flowers █ ▬ Alone Time █ ▬ Naps █ ▬ Wide open space █ ▬ █DISLIKES █ ▬ cold hearted people █ ▬ assholes █ ▬ being betrayed █ ▬ getting close to people █ ▬ losing people she get close to █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Jackie can be a hot head. There is a no bullshit attitude about her, but she has deep emotional issues. You may hear her talking, but no one be there during one of her mental blacks out. Never a good idea to tell her no one is there because when she is having one of her mental black outs, she sees nothing but her twins girls that she has imaged growing up even though she miscarried. Once she is done having her mental black out, she will seemed depressed because she knew they weren't there. It's just her way of cooping with the lost. █Personality ▬ Jacqueline is not as bad as she seems. At first, she is going to come off as aggressive, stand offish, and a loner. The one thing that isn't going to change about Jacqueline is that she is aggressive. Jacqueline doesn't mind a good fight regardless if she loses. Quick with her tongue. Don't try to insult her or come to her with some stupidity. She is not afraid to call anyone out on their bullshit. Jacqueline is hard headed and stubborn. She is doing to want to do what she wants to do. Sometimes not caring about her well-being (For example: If there is a mission that needs to be done, Jacqueline is going to want to do that mission regardless of if she is injured or not). After that, once she is comfortable with her environment and start to trust the people around her, she is like a rose blossoming. Her social skills improve and she is mostly easy to get along with.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Jackie is from Atlas. Being as good of a fighter as she was, Jackie was admitted in Atlas Academy early. She was the Leader of Team HEAT (Jacqueline, Ethan, Alice, and Tyler). She has lived there her whole life with her parents and two older siblings. Jackie was the youngest and was spoiled. They never had to worry about anything because their dad always had a job and made really good money. They had a mom at home at all times taking care of them. It all started to fall apart after her first year at Atlas. That is when she fell in love with Ethan. Jacqueline was going to have an arranged marriage to a noblemen to better her parent’s reputation and get them inside the upper-class. Jacqueline falling in love was not what they needed to happen because they knew she was going to rebel the arranged marriage. The boy was well off like Jacqueline’s family as well, but to them, that was not enough. It only got worse once at 18 Jacqueline became pregnant with the boy’s child, and he had disclosed to her parents that he wished to marry her.
Jackie was a 18 year old 5 months pregnant with twins girls. Her parents did not approve and she had a boyfriend/soon to be husband (she just didn’t know Ethan was about to propose) that she thought loved her. Approaching 6 months, Jacqueline had a miscarriage of her twin girls. After her miscarriage life changed for her. Her parents not only disowning her, but her boyfriend no longer wanting to marry her because she was no longer going to be the mother for his children. 3 months before her 19th birthday, Atlas became under attack. Most of her village was kill off by the grim, but Jackie manages to make it to Vale. After that, for the next 7 years, she would have hallucinations of her twins girls growing up. It was her only way of cooping with the last of them and her home. Not having anyone, she became a loner selling jewelry on the streets of Vale to make an honest living.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Twin Phoenix
█ ▬ They are two identical twin swords that Jackie carries at all times. █Melee Form ▬ twin swords █Ranged Form ▬ bow and arrow █Other Form(s) ▬ █Ammo Type ▬ Aura █ ▬ Draw back is that she is not really good with her swordsmanship. She is slower than normal making her moves because she has to think about them. Her knowledge is limited and she needs more training.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Leather bag with all of her clothing █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ XIUHTECUHTLI: Through the death of virulent, the dramatic situation has changed Jackie's semblance. It is believed that the two souls merged and became one (not actually the case but just like strong love bond) Through this her semblance has evolved beyond fire. █*AURA COLOR ▬ Red █*DESCRIPTION Jackie's semblance requires her to place both her blades into the ground, starting the ceremony which activates her Semblance. Once this is done, a dome of fire surrounds her and protects her during the Semblance's duration and can do up to 3rd degree damage. . Of course, it can still be fight through to attack Jackie. If Jackie loses focus or is damaged during duration then the Semblance ends early. The semblance summons a projection of a huntress above Jackie that acts like an Avatar while she is locked into place. The summoned projection is 10x10x10ft in dimensions and hovers above Jackie similar to that of a summoned yugioh card. Once finished, Jackie's aura is broken and she is extremely tired. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Jackie places her blades Into the ground and summons an Huntress made out of Aura. This huntress lasts for 3 turns and stays above Jackie, unable move around the battlefield. While out, the Huntress is able to whip the battlefield with a flaming link of chain that extends 30ft away from Jackie. When she whips the battle field, a a violent eruption occurs underneath the ground in flames and vibrations similar to that of a volcano going off. The area of affect is 30ft long and 5ft wide and those caught in it end up receiving up to 2nd degree burns from flames and possible bruises from the concussive damage. The huntress has the ability to do 1 whip attack per turn up to duration of the semblance.
█*LEVEL 1▬ The huntress that is summoned now has another option for attack during the duration of the semblance. The huntress now gain the ability to send out a rain storm of flaming arrows. Choosing a location within 50ft, the huntress will rain down a shower of arrows on the chosen location for one post. After that post, the shower of arrows stop unless the huntress shoots there again. After used, Jackie can have the huntress use the ability again or switch to the chain attack.
█*LEVEL 2▬ At level 2 the Huntress gains a new ability. The huntress is able to do a new ability. Holding out her hand, the huntress will command a pack of wolves onto the battlefield. Each turn she is able to summon a wolf. When the wolf gets near it target it has an option to either explode or bite the target first then explode. If the wolves are hit first they will explode but they are not easy targets do to their agility. When they bite onto a person they do not do any piecing damage but are able cause 2nd degree burns. Those caught in the explosion received 2-3rd degree burns and possible bruises from concussive impact. The wolves are able to go up to 50ft away from jackie.
█*LEVEL 3 ▬ At this level the Huntress gains it final ability in which it can turn itself into the embodiment of pure rage within Jackie's soul Becoming from human into that of a Phoenix like monster , the Huntress is now able to move around the battlefield up to 50ft away from jackie. This flying beast is able to do 1 of three attacks but can only do 1 attack per turn. It can either shoot a blast of fire that engulfs a 20ft diameter whether circle area or straight line. that can do 2nd to 3rd degree burns. It can shoot 10 scatter shot fire balls that are 1 ft diameter each that encompasses a 20ft area whether circle area or straight line. That Or, can shoot out a flurry of fire feathers like a rain storm at a location similar to that of the Nevermore that encompasses a 20ft whether circle area or straight line.
█*DRAWBACKS ▬ As stated in her description, there are several drawbacks to this semblance.
~If she is attacked and her protection dome is broken, her semblance is ended early.
~Once she is done with her semblance, her aura is broken and she is extremely tried meaning she can't use this semblance in rapid succession unless she wants to completely pass out.
~Once she had used it for the full three post count, she had to wait double (6 post count) the amount of time before she can reactivate her semblance.
~This semblance doesn't work unless she had both of her swords stuck into the ground.
Posted: Thu Nov 07, 2019 4:47 pm
QueenBAD_KittyKat
Good evening/morning/afternoon, I am Aeval Silvertongue, but you may call me Silver. I am going to be your judge today. ^^
*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• Occupation: Flower Crafter or Flower Accouter • Carving things from wood, use the term Woodcarving, Carpentry or Woodworking. • As for markings/scars, might I suggest stretch marks? • This is more a curiosity than anything else but, how did she get in to crafting flower accessories? And if this is her occupation of choice, does she work in a shop in the Vale streets or is it from her own home?
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
- The most concerning thing I have noticed is with her background, in re-reading when Atlas fell, which was 5 years ago, and she is currently listed as 23 y.o., she would've been around 18 1/2-19 y.o. when it did fall, meaning she would be in Vale by then. - The 7 years' time-skip would have to be from when she would've already been in Vale and about 24 1/2-25 y.o. years old if calculations are correct, so her age would need to be bumped up and maybe clarify a bit as to where this festival took place for it to make sense. - Just curious, you describe when the orbs are formed that it feels like a weight is lifted off her shoulders, does that feeling return after her semblance is at rest? - As for the smaller orbs, do they all stick together in the same place, move the same way? Or can she control their movements in order to move them in different directions? - And if she can move separately in different directions, for how long can she control them? - Regarding Twin Phoenix's Drawback, I would say it would be better to maybe place that in the Semblance's drawback instead. - Concerning Archetype: Though it is not necessary, it is highly encouraged that you choose 1 more Skill and 1 more Talent - As a replacement drawback for the weapon I would just suggest that you might add that she's not as skilled with her swordsmanship and make her movements slower? - Something I suggest for your Dislikes List: Adding at least one fear in the list.
*Reminder*
• Just remember to add effects to your semblance as you level up.
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬ Jackie █OCCUPATION ▬ Jeweler: Specialty is flower jeweler (crowns, necklaces, earrings, rings, and bracelets. Deals with real flowers, artificial flowers, and maybe stones). She is a vendor in the streets of Vale.
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 5 ft. 7 in. █WEIGHT ▬ 130 lbs.
█HAIR ▬ Red █CLOTHING ▬ Mostly kimonos █ACCESSORIES ▬ █EYES ▬ milk chocolate brown █BUILD ▬ Jacqueline standing at a medium height, had olive tan skin. Against her olive tan skin, her long layered red hair with bangs stands out as her most unique feature. With big brown eyes and a v shaped chin, she didn't one to have a full blown smile. Maybe get a little smirk. Her breast large and soft like marshmallows, a small waist, and a nice round backside. Jacqueline is full figured and what they called shaped like a coca bottle. Though not an amazon. she has a short torso, but really long legs that makes up her 5'7 frame complete. █TATTOOS ▬ █SCARS ▬ Stretch marks █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Making her accessories █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ interior decorating █Other Talents ▬ building things out of wood (woodworking). █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Archery █Weakest Skill ▬ Swordsmanship █Other Skills ▬ teamwork (when she trust the person) and survival
█LIKES █ ▬ Flowers █ ▬ Alone Time █ ▬ Naps █ ▬ Wide open space █ ▬ █DISLIKES █ ▬ cold hearted people █ ▬ assholes █ ▬ being betrayed █ ▬ getting close to people █ ▬ losing people she get close to █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Jackie can be a hot head. There is a no bullshit attitude about her, but she has deep emotional issues. You may hear her talking, but no one be there during one of her mental blacks out. Never a good idea to tell her no one is there because when she is having one of her mental black outs, she sees nothing but her twins girls that she has imaged growing up even though she miscarried. Once she is done having her mental black out, she will seemed depressed because she knew they weren't there. It's just her way of cooping with the lost. █Personality ▬ Jacqueline is not as bad as she seems. At first, she is going to come off as aggressive, stand offish, and a loner. The one thing that isn't going to change about Jacqueline is that she is aggressive. Jacqueline doesn't mind a good fight regardless if she loses. Quick with her tongue. Don't try to insult her or come to her with some stupidity. She is not afraid to call anyone out on their bullshit. Jacqueline is hard headed and stubborn. She is doing to want to do what she wants to do. Sometimes not caring about her well-being (For example: If there is a mission that needs to be done, Jacqueline is going to want to do that mission regardless of if she is injured or not). After that, once she is comfortable with her environment and start to trust the people around her, she is like a rose blossoming. Her social skills improve and she is mostly easy to get along with.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Jackie is from Atlas. She has lived there her whole life with her parents and two older siblings. Jackie was the youngest and was spoiled. They never had to worry about anything because their dad always had a job and made really good money. They had a mom at home at all times taking care of them. It all started to fall apart when she met this boy in school at 15. Jacqueline was going to have an arranged marriage to a noblemen to better her parent’s reputation and get them inside the upper-class. Jacqueline falling in love was not what they needed to happen because they knew she was going to rebel the arranged marriage. The boy was well off like Jacqueline’s family as well, but to them, that was not enough. It only got worse once at 18 Jacqueline became pregnant with the boy’s child, and he had disclosed to her parents that he wished to marry her.
Jackie was a 18 year old 5 months pregnant with twins girls. Her parents did not approve and she had a boyfriend/soon to be husband (she just didn’t know he was about to propose) that she thought loved her. Approaching 6 months, Jacqueline had a miscarriage of her twin girls. Her whole life changed. Her parents not wanting to keep her when she had got pregnant still didn’t want her now. The man she thought loved her no longer wanted her because she was not going to be the mother of his children. Her miscarriage left her alone with no one to take care of or look after her. From there, she began into a downward spiral depression. Her children were gone, the love of her life was gone, and she had no family. For 7 years, she imaged her twins (Aya and Ava) growing up. They were the only things that kept her alive even though her health was slowly deteriorating. One day in the village, they were having a festival in Atlas. Her girls begged their mother to go out with them. Jacqueline not feeling all that great agreed for her girls. While the festival was going on, the village was invaded. Women, men, and children where all dying. Looking actively for her girls, Jacqueline found them, but it was too late. They were decapitated right before her eyes by grim. From that day on, she was on a mission to get revenge for the death of her girls even though they had been died.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Twin Phoenix
█ ▬ They are two identical twin swords that Jackie carries at all times. █Melee Form ▬ twin swords █Ranged Form ▬ bow and arrow █Other Form(s) ▬ █Ammo Type ▬ Aura █ ▬ Draw back is that she is not really good with her swordsmanship. She is slower than normal making her moves because she has to think about them. Her knowledge is limited and she needs more training.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Leather bag with all of her clothing █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Twin Phoenix █*AURA COLOR ▬ Red █*DESCRIPTION Jackie semblance is a revenge fire, but it cleanses her. To put it simpler. Anytime that Jackie uses her semblance, it releases all of the pinned up anger that she has been harboring about losing her twins. Afterwards there is a surreal calmness or relief to her demeanor. It feel as though a weight has been lifted off her shoulders. Sadly, the weight is only lifted temporarily.The way she does this release is through a fireball aura. They are red balls of fire that are created from her aura. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Explosive fire balls- She is able to shot fireballs stemming from her aura. The fireballs can stay as a whole fireball which is the size of a basketball and when it lands, it explodes into flames covering a 10 foot radius. It can also expand into a mini fireballs which are the size of tennis balls once they land, there is a 2 foot radius they cover each. For each whole fireball, there is only four mini fire balls. The fireballs do not stick together, they are separate fireballs. They do, however, all go in the same direction. If she used the whole exploding fireball, it is a cool down for one post. If she uses the mini fireballs, it is a cool down for 2 post. █*LEVEL 1▬ (100-199 posts) █*LEVEL 2▬ (200-299 posts) █*LEVEL 3 ▬ (300-399 posts) █*DRAWBACKS ▬ The draw back is that she has to have both of her swords or her semblance will not work. If one is knocked away or is damaged, she can no longer use her semblance. There is also over usage of Aura and there are cool down periods.
Thank you for making the necessary changes, we are almost through. ^^
*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• Nothing really to mark here.
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
- The most concerning thing I still noticed is with her background. There is no way she could still be in Atlas after her 19th year of life. As stated in The World of Remnant Atlas section:
Quote:
"Atlas in this guild has fallen to the Grimm. Not much remains other than frozen remnants of the once prosperous city. It has been 5 long years since the attack, and Vale goes there to find technology, still frozen in the ground."
Meaning she would be in Vale by the time the festival was going on. So if you could please make those edits to fit, all is done ^^.
*Reminder*
• Just remember to add effects to your semblance as you level up.
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬ Jackie █OCCUPATION ▬ Jeweler: Specialty is flower jeweler (crowns, necklaces, earrings, rings, and bracelets. Deals with real flowers, artificial flowers, and maybe stones). She is a vendor in the streets of Vale.
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 5 ft. 7 in. █WEIGHT ▬ 130 lbs.
█HAIR ▬ Red █CLOTHING ▬ Mostly kimonos █ACCESSORIES ▬ █EYES ▬ milk chocolate brown █BUILD ▬ Jacqueline standing at a medium height, had olive tan skin. Against her olive tan skin, her long layered red hair with bangs stands out as her most unique feature. With big brown eyes and a v shaped chin, she didn't one to have a full blown smile. Maybe get a little smirk. Her breast large and soft like marshmallows, a small waist, and a nice round backside. Jacqueline is full figured and what they called shaped like a coca bottle. Though not an amazon. she has a short torso, but really long legs that makes up her 5'7 frame complete. █TATTOOS ▬ █SCARS ▬ Stretch marks █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Making her accessories █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ interior decorating █Other Talents ▬ building things out of wood (woodworking). █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Archery █Weakest Skill ▬ Swordsmanship █Other Skills ▬ teamwork (when she trust the person) and survival
█LIKES █ ▬ Flowers █ ▬ Alone Time █ ▬ Naps █ ▬ Wide open space █ ▬ █DISLIKES █ ▬ cold hearted people █ ▬ assholes █ ▬ being betrayed █ ▬ getting close to people █ ▬ losing people she get close to █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Jackie can be a hot head. There is a no bullshit attitude about her, but she has deep emotional issues. You may hear her talking, but no one be there during one of her mental blacks out. Never a good idea to tell her no one is there because when she is having one of her mental black outs, she sees nothing but her twins girls that she has imaged growing up even though she miscarried. Once she is done having her mental black out, she will seemed depressed because she knew they weren't there. It's just her way of cooping with the lost. █Personality ▬ Jacqueline is not as bad as she seems. At first, she is going to come off as aggressive, stand offish, and a loner. The one thing that isn't going to change about Jacqueline is that she is aggressive. Jacqueline doesn't mind a good fight regardless if she loses. Quick with her tongue. Don't try to insult her or come to her with some stupidity. She is not afraid to call anyone out on their bullshit. Jacqueline is hard headed and stubborn. She is doing to want to do what she wants to do. Sometimes not caring about her well-being (For example: If there is a mission that needs to be done, Jacqueline is going to want to do that mission regardless of if she is injured or not). After that, once she is comfortable with her environment and start to trust the people around her, she is like a rose blossoming. Her social skills improve and she is mostly easy to get along with.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Jackie is from Atlas. She has lived there her whole life with her parents and two older siblings. Jackie was the youngest and was spoiled. They never had to worry about anything because their dad always had a job and made really good money. They had a mom at home at all times taking care of them. It all started to fall apart when she met this boy in school at 15. Jacqueline was going to have an arranged marriage to a noblemen to better her parent’s reputation and get them inside the upper-class. Jacqueline falling in love was not what they needed to happen because they knew she was going to rebel the arranged marriage. The boy was well off like Jacqueline’s family as well, but to them, that was not enough. It only got worse once at 18 Jacqueline became pregnant with the boy’s child, and he had disclosed to her parents that he wished to marry her.
Jackie was a 18 year old 5 months pregnant with twins girls. Her parents did not approve and she had a boyfriend/soon to be husband (she just didn’t know he was about to propose) that she thought loved her. Approaching 6 months, Jacqueline had a miscarriage of her twin girls. After her miscarriage life changed for her. Her parents not only disowning her, but her boyfriend no longer wanting to marry her because she was no longer going to be the mother for his children. 3 months before her 19th birthday, Atlas became under attack. Most of her village was kill off by the grim, but Jackie manages to make it to Vale. After that, for the next 7 years, she would have hallucinations of her twins girls growing up. It was her only way of cooping with the last of them and her home. Not having anyone, she became a loner selling jewelry on the streets of Vale to make an honest living.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Twin Phoenix
█ ▬ They are two identical twin swords that Jackie carries at all times. █Melee Form ▬ twin swords █Ranged Form ▬ bow and arrow █Other Form(s) ▬ █Ammo Type ▬ Aura █ ▬ Draw back is that she is not really good with her swordsmanship. She is slower than normal making her moves because she has to think about them. Her knowledge is limited and she needs more training.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Leather bag with all of her clothing █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ Twin Phoenix █*AURA COLOR ▬ Red █*DESCRIPTION Jackie semblance is a revenge fire, but it cleanses her. To put it simpler. Anytime that Jackie uses her semblance, it releases all of the pinned up anger that she has been harboring about losing her twins. Afterwards there is a surreal calmness or relief to her demeanor. It feel as though a weight has been lifted off her shoulders. Sadly, the weight is only lifted temporarily.The way she does this release is through a fireball aura. They are red balls of fire that are created from her aura. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Explosive fire balls- She is able to shot fireballs stemming from her aura. The fireballs can stay as a whole fireball which is the size of a basketball and when it lands, it explodes into flames covering a 10 foot radius. It can also expand into a mini fireballs which are the size of tennis balls once they land, there is a 2 foot radius they cover each. For each whole fireball, there is only four mini fire balls. The fireballs do not stick together, they are separate fireballs. They do, however, all go in the same direction. If she used the whole exploding fireball, it is a cool down for one post. If she uses the mini fireballs, it is a cool down for 2 post. █*LEVEL 1▬ (100-199 posts) █*LEVEL 2▬ (200-299 posts) █*LEVEL 3 ▬ (300-399 posts) █*DRAWBACKS ▬ The draw back is that she has to have both of her swords or her semblance will not work. If one is knocked away or is damaged, she can no longer use her semblance. There is also over usage of Aura and there are cool down periods.
█*CURRENT TEAM ▬ █*PARTNER(S) ▬ █NICKNAME(S) ▬ Jackie █OCCUPATION ▬ Jeweler: Specialty is flower jeweler (crowns, necklaces, earrings, rings, and bracelets. Deals with real flowers, artificial flowers, and maybe stones). She is a vendor in the streets of Vale.
█ █ ╫ A F F E C T A T I O N ╫
█HEIGHT ▬ 5 ft. 7 in. █WEIGHT ▬ 130 lbs.
█HAIR ▬ Red █CLOTHING ▬ Mostly kimonos █ACCESSORIES ▬ █EYES ▬ milk chocolate brown █BUILD ▬ Jacqueline standing at a medium height, had olive tan skin. Against her olive tan skin, her long layered red hair with bangs stands out as her most unique feature. With big brown eyes and a v shaped chin, she didn't one to have a full blown smile. Maybe get a little smirk. Her breast large and soft like marshmallows, a small waist, and a nice round backside. Jacqueline is full figured and what they called shaped like a coca bottle. Though not an amazon. she has a short torso, but really long legs that makes up her 5'7 frame complete. █TATTOOS ▬ █SCARS ▬ Stretch marks █MARKINGS/FAUNUS FEATURES ▬
█ █ ╫ A R C H E T Y P E ╫
█NATURAL ABILITIES █Primary Talent ▬ Making her accessories █Faunus Trait/Bonus Talent ▬ interior decorating █Other Talents ▬ building things out of wood (woodworking). █LEARNT ABILITIES █Strongest Skill ▬ Archery █Weakest Skill ▬ Swordsmanship █Other Skills ▬ teamwork (when she trust the person) and survival
█LIKES █ ▬ Flowers █ ▬ Alone Time █ ▬ Naps █ ▬ Wide open space █ ▬ █DISLIKES █ ▬ cold hearted people █ ▬ assholes █ ▬ being betrayed █ ▬ getting close to people █ ▬ losing people she get close to █PERSONALITY TRAITS █Nature ▬ Jackie can be a hot head. There is a no bullshit attitude about her, but she has deep emotional issues. You may hear her talking, but no one be there during one of her mental blacks out. Never a good idea to tell her no one is there because when she is having one of her mental black outs, she sees nothing but her twins girls that she has imaged growing up even though she miscarried. Once she is done having her mental black out, she will seemed depressed because she knew they weren't there. It's just her way of cooping with the lost. █Personality ▬ Jacqueline is not as bad as she seems. At first, she is going to come off as aggressive, stand offish, and a loner. The one thing that isn't going to change about Jacqueline is that she is aggressive. Jacqueline doesn't mind a good fight regardless if she loses. Quick with her tongue. Don't try to insult her or come to her with some stupidity. She is not afraid to call anyone out on their bullshit. Jacqueline is hard headed and stubborn. She is doing to want to do what she wants to do. Sometimes not caring about her well-being (For example: If there is a mission that needs to be done, Jacqueline is going to want to do that mission regardless of if she is injured or not). After that, once she is comfortable with her environment and start to trust the people around her, she is like a rose blossoming. Her social skills improve and she is mostly easy to get along with.
█ █ ╫ H I S T O R Y ╫
█BACKGROUND ▬ Jackie is from Atlas. Being as good of a fighter as she was, Jackie was admitted in Atlas Academy early. She was the Leader of Team HEAT (Jacqueline, Ethan, Alice, and Tyler). She has lived there her whole life with her parents and two older siblings. Jackie was the youngest and was spoiled. They never had to worry about anything because their dad always had a job and made really good money. They had a mom at home at all times taking care of them. It all started to fall apart after her first year at Atlas. That is when she fell in love with Ethan. Jacqueline was going to have an arranged marriage to a noblemen to better her parent’s reputation and get them inside the upper-class. Jacqueline falling in love was not what they needed to happen because they knew she was going to rebel the arranged marriage. The boy was well off like Jacqueline’s family as well, but to them, that was not enough. It only got worse once at 18 Jacqueline became pregnant with the boy’s child, and he had disclosed to her parents that he wished to marry her.
Jackie was a 18 year old 5 months pregnant with twins girls. Her parents did not approve and she had a boyfriend/soon to be husband (she just didn’t know Ethan was about to propose) that she thought loved her. Approaching 6 months, Jacqueline had a miscarriage of her twin girls. After her miscarriage life changed for her. Her parents not only disowning her, but her boyfriend no longer wanting to marry her because she was no longer going to be the mother for his children. 3 months before her 19th birthday, Atlas became under attack. Most of her village was kill off by the grim, but Jackie manages to make it to Vale. After that, for the next 7 years, she would have hallucinations of her twins girls growing up. It was her only way of cooping with the last of them and her home. Not having anyone, she became a loner selling jewelry on the streets of Vale to make an honest living.
█ █ ╫ I N V E N T O R Y ╫
█PRIMARY WEAPON █ ▬ Twin Phoenix
█ ▬ They are two identical twin swords that Jackie carries at all times. █Melee Form ▬ twin swords █Ranged Form ▬ bow and arrow █Other Form(s) ▬ █Ammo Type ▬ Aura █ ▬ Draw back is that she is not really good with her swordsmanship. She is slower than normal making her moves because she has to think about them. Her knowledge is limited and she needs more training.
█OTHER WEAPONS █ ▬ █ ▬ █ ▬ █ITEMS █ ▬ Scroll █ ▬ Leather bag with all of her clothing █ ▬
█ █ ╫ S E M B L A N C E ╫
█*NAME ▬ XIUHTECUHTLI: Through the death of virulent, the dramatic situation has changed Jackie's semblance. It is believed that the two souls merged and became one (not actually the case but just like strong love bond) Through this her semblance has evolved beyond fire. █*AURA COLOR ▬ Red █*DESCRIPTION Jackie's semblance requires her to place both her blades into the ground, starting the ceremony which activates her Semblance. Once this is done, a dome of fire surrounds her and protects her during the Semblance's duration and can do up to 3rd degree damage. . Of course, it can still be fight through to attack Jackie. If Jackie loses focus or is damaged during duration then the Semblance ends early. The semblance summons a projection of a huntress above Jackie that acts like an Avatar while she is locked into place. The summoned projection is 10x10x10ft in dimensions and hovers above Jackie similar to that of a summoned yugioh card. Once finished, Jackie's aura is broken and she is extremely tired. █*LEVEL 0 ▬ Jackie places her blades Into the ground and summons an Huntress made out of Aura. This huntress lasts for 3 turns and stays above Jackie, unable move around the battlefield. While out, the Huntress is able to whip the battlefield with a flaming link of chain that extends 30ft away from Jackie. When she whips the battle field, a a violent eruption occurs underneath the ground in flames and vibrations similar to that of a volcano going off. The area of affect is 30ft long and 5ft wide and those caught in it end up receiving up to 2nd degree burns from flames and possible bruises from the concussive damage. The huntress has the ability to do 1 whip attack per turn up to duration of the semblance.
█*LEVEL 1▬ The huntress that is summoned now has another option for attack during the duration of the semblance. The huntress now gain the ability to send out a rain storm of flaming arrows. Choosing a location within 50ft, the huntress will rain down a shower of arrows on the chosen location for one post. After that post, the shower of arrows stop unless the huntress shoots there again. After used, Jackie can have the huntress use the ability again or switch to the chain attack.
█*LEVEL 2▬ At level 2 the Huntress gains a new ability. The huntress is able to do a new ability. Holding out her hand, the huntress will command a pack of wolves onto the battlefield. Each turn she is able to summon a wolf. When the wolf gets near it target it has an option to either explode or bite the target first then explode. If the wolves are hit first they will explode but they are not easy targets do to their agility. When they bite onto a person they do not do any piecing damage but are able cause 2nd degree burns. Those caught in the explosion received 2-3rd degree burns and possible bruises from concussive impact. The wolves are able to go up to 50ft away from jackie.
█*LEVEL 3 ▬ At this level the Huntress gains it final ability in which it can turn itself into the embodiment of pure rage within Jackie's soul Becoming from human into that of a Phoenix like monster , the Huntress is now able to move around the battlefield up to 50ft away from jackie. This flying beast is able to do 1 of three attacks but can only do 1 attack per turn. It can either shoot a blast of fire that engulfs a 20ft diameter whether circle area or straight line. that can do 2nd to 3rd degree burns. It can shoot 10 scatter shot fire balls that are 1 ft diameter each that encompasses a 20ft area whether circle area or straight line. That Or, can shoot out a flurry of fire feathers like a rain storm at a location similar to that of the Nevermore that encompasses a 20ft whether circle area or straight line.
█*DRAWBACKS ▬ As stated in her description, there are several drawbacks to this semblance.
~If she is attacked and her protection dome is broken, her semblance is ended early.
~Once she is done with her semblance, her aura is broken and she is extremely tried meaning she can't use this semblance in rapid succession unless she wants to completely pass out.
~Once she had used it for the full three post count, she had to wait double (6 post count) the amount of time before she can reactivate her semblance.
~This semblance doesn't work unless she had both of her swords stuck into the ground.
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*Optional edits/Curiosities*
• Curiosity for TATTOOS ▬ Do Nightstalker's have a mark/tattoo once they are initiated?
*Must Edits/Clarifications*
• Change the title to A/A until reapproved, please. • Add "▬" to other places where it's missing. • Please separate Other Skills so that they may be more neatly organized. • A R C H E T Y P E Abilities: All need at least a sentence explaining them, please. • Primary Weapon ○ N/A • Semblance: ○ Does this go through aura? ○ "Once this is done, a dome of fire surrounds her and protects her during the Semblance's duration…" As it's currently written, it's a bit difficult to determine if it is purely fire, or does it have some sort of barrier aspect to it? The way it can be read is anyone with a gun could shoot Jackie. Though if the intent is for it to be more of an overall protective barrier, that needs to be clarified. ○ █ *LEVEL 0 ▬ No volcano level eruption, as that's too powerful for lvl 0. ○ █ *LEVEL 1 ▬ What's the range? What's the AOE? How many arrows are being shot in one post? ○ █ *LEVEL 2 ▬ "The huntress is able to do a new ability. Holding out her hand, the huntress will command a pack of wolves onto the battlefield. Each turn she is able to summon a wolf." I am guessing you mean she's summoning a wolf one at a time with her aura, b/c actual wolves are too smart to be controlled by humans. Please clarify. ○ █ *LEVEL 2 ▬ "…but they are not easy targets due to their agility." I would have to say that due to them being suicide aura wolves, and not actual wolves that they would as agile due to the fact that Jackie is sending them to simply explode at their target. ○ █ *LEVEL 2 ▬ It has also been discussed that summoning a pack of wolves should be replaced with the line, "She summons one wolf per post." ○ █ *LEVEL 3 ▬ Feels weaker than Lvl 2 honestly. ○ █ *LEVEL 3 ▬ At this level, the Huntress gains their final ability, the ability to instead be summoned as a larger wolf as the pure embodiment of Jackie's rage. In this state, she is able to move 50 ft away from Jackie and loses access to her previous abilities, except for the ability to summon fire wolves to her side. These wolves now can move along with the Large Wolf and have their reach limit changed to instead go 50ft away from the 'Pack Leader' wolf. The Huntress Wolf gains a new ability to compensate for losing most of their abilities, in which they now can perform an explosive bite that is twice as strong as TNT with a blast radius of 30ft. (edited) ○ █ *DRAWBACKS ▬ State how strong/what can go through the flame dome?
