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[Acquired] Liel Mórdha - Lieutenant Libethenite (WIP)

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endejester

PostPosted: Wed Oct 10, 2018 10:08 am


Name: Liel Mórdha (He/They/She depending)

Nickname: N/A at this time.

Age: 23

Birthday: December 17th

Sign: Sagittarius

Gemstone: Turquoise

Blood Type: O-

Fav. Food: Roast Beef sandwiches – and best of all, mashed potatos with “”good”” gravy ( a subjective topic)

Hated Food: Brussels Sprouts, Mushrooms. Quinoa – the last on moral principals.

School: Graduate

Hobbies:

Hopak - a slavic form of dancing. It's not perhaps a terribly normal hobby, but he seems to enjoy it. While it's a very serious effort that goes into this kind of dance he tends to refer his own skills at it as though they are silly. Plus he enjoys the fact that some of the dance moves look like you're trying to dislocate something. He will occasionally refer to it as "Being able to dance like a pixie got into the vodka."

Bathbombs: Leil enjoys making bath bombs, it seconds as a means to make spare funds because while he enjoys mixing the colors, the scents, and pressing them into molds, there really isn’t enough time for him to take that many baths.
He sells the ones he thinks turned out well on an home-crafted goods web page to moderate success. It does mean that he will often be found coated in powder, and smelling of curious perfumes.


Knitting: there are few things that are more relaxing, than knitting; At least in his opinion. Unlike the bath bombs there is no attempt to sell the things he knits. Normally its oversized sweaters that are stuffed into donation bins, the patterns frequently being unusual, the colors frequently random but the purpose as much being to create the sweater and to be able to identify it if it turns up.

Virtues:

Perspicacity – aka astute, he’s able to assess a situation, or a circumstance and draw conclusions that will aid him even in the heat of the moment.
Being able to assess the situation doesn’t necessarily mean his assessment will provide a successful outcome. But ultimately it means he’s good at thinking on his feet.

Reliable – if he says he’ll do a thing he’ll go out of his way to make sure he gets that thing done. Sometimes, to be fair, he’s just trying to undo some trouble he caused. (That ugly sweater that turned up at your Significant Other’s house with your name on it, in just the colors she hated.)- Helping you get out of the doghouse, probably without admitting it was them all along to be fair. But he’ll help you undo what he did, if you ask.


Flaws:

Cocky: Leil can be rather full of himself. While he does enter like a proverbial lamb, he is prone to deciding that he's got things well in hand.
Once he has decided are comfortable’ in a situation,He tends to assume he's got a handle on things.
This does include situations like picking fights with people bigger and stronger than them, and needing to beat a hasty retreat is of course something he meant to do all along. Worse, he won’t always have the sense to retreat, because he’s sure he can turn the tables.
In his lifetime he's ended up with more than a few black eyes, and sometimes more severe injuries because he was were too sure he had a handle on the trouble he got himself into.


Erratic: his personality, not unlike his temper can be all over. One moment he’ll he happy and playful, the next he can swing as far as to be malicious and, or furious. Often such mood swings can be clearly seen as being triggered by being caught, which often promotes a sulk, or when things don’t go as he hoped or planned.



PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Green, - leaning towards almond shape and cunning.

Hair: Long – Auburn. Tends to include braids and beads at random places because of some suspicion of his heritage, or at least simply because of they enjoying a certain TV series.

Face: A sharp face, but also leaning towards androgynous. They could be handsome or pretty depending on how they choose to dress for that day.

Clothes: Flannels with sleeves rolled up, v-neck t-shirts. Too many necklaces, enough bracelets in leather and stones that is probably an impediment to reaching into close spaces Rings on multiple fingers, thumb and index especially.


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Negaverse Alias: Lieutenant Libethenite ; Libethenite

Challenge: “Wicked fun”

Uniform:
Top – Thigh length coat, Black or dark with green trim drawn from his mineral. A sort of … Norse meets Final Fantasy ascetic would be perfect Let’s have ridiculous fun with belts boots and fur.
Bottoms Pants, loose but tucked into boots.
Gloves - Fingerless gloves
Belt – Maybe – up to the artist/artists we can see how they look.
Shoes – Boots, always tall boots
Shoulders – Nothing particular, maybe fur cause it’s fun.
Accessories Nothing immediately comes to mind.
Weapon Lieutenant Weapon: A Blue otter pop. The Otter pop can not be eaten or opened, it is simply a melted otter pop that can be used to slap people with to no great effect.
Captain Weapon: Dagger.
General Weapon: Paired Daggers – a chilling effect on impact causing frost to coat the wound or cut temporarily (lasting a period of perhaps 20 seconds, potentially increasing pain.)
PostPosted: Wed Oct 10, 2018 6:36 pm


I do have a back up mineral name if needed!

endejester


Ghouliboo

PostPosted: Thu Oct 11, 2018 11:14 am


endejester



Hi Ende!!!

I'm here to help you get Liel all stamped up!

Both Mórdha and Libethenite are available names, so we're good to go there!

Hopak and Knitting are perfectly acceptable hobbies but you made a mention of "unlike the bath bombs, there is no attempt to sell the things that he knits". Do they also make bath bombs too? That could be a unique hobby to add to their arsenal - I was just curious, since the comment stood out at me.

Being reliable and insightful are both good virtues but I'd like a little more elaboration on the tricky flaw. Having a passion for finding loopholes/alternative meanings in promises and playing pranks/tricks leans more towards an impish hobby than a character flaw but it's an easy fix with a little more description. What are some negative things that may impact Liel when they're behaving deviously or crafty? I like that they do it just to see if they can get away with it - do they act before thinking and it sometimes blows up in their face/has reverse or adverse effects? Do they ever get caught or potentially lose or hurt friendships/acquaintances when they figure out what Liel's done? I just need a teensy bit more elaboration to ensure it falls under a flaw instead of a pranking hobby!

As far as the weapon transition goes, everything looks good to me. If you could squeeze in the word "temporarily" in front of "coat the wound or cut", it would help clarify that the chilling effect/frost would be limited, time wise, instead of lingering.


If you have any questions at all or would like to talk about anything, please feel free to shoot me a message on DMs or through PMs!

Otherwise, simply quote me back when you're ready for me to swing back around for another review.

Thank you!! <3
PostPosted: Fri Oct 12, 2018 8:09 am


TY so much for the crit! I've swapped tricky out for one that I think might describe what I'm trying for in my head better? Once I started writing 'tricky' seemed like a poor fit so I retitled it and just kept redrafting.

I added in that the otter pop can't in fact be eaten, and that it's thawed.

Andddd I added back in the bath bomb hobby! I'd removed it worrying I had him doing too much!
I'm sure I missed something though so please let me know!

Ghouliboo

endejester


Ghouliboo

PostPosted: Fri Oct 12, 2018 11:04 am


endejester


Everything looks lovely, thank you so much for the updates and congratulations on obtaining Liel!

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PostPosted: Wed Oct 17, 2018 8:27 pm


Hey Ende! Liel looks like a really fun character but that dancing looks so very painful! Have fun playing him and enjoy your Stamp!

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