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Name: Lee Fischer

Nickname: L is as short as it gets, sorry. Her little sisters call her 'Captain'

Age: 28

Birthday: March 30th

Sign: Aries

Gemstone: Bloodstone

Blood Type: 0

Fav. Food: Most seafood is pretty high up on Lee's list. Except for well....

Hated Food: Calamari, Octopus - if it's chewy and crunchy at the same time, it's a no go. Ew.

School: N/A - Professional Cage Fighter. She's not so recognizable that someone not a hardcore fan would recognize her, however. Not that she doesn't stick out of a crowd on her own...

Hobbies:
These Muscles Don't Come Cheap - Part work, part sheer enjoyment, part extra protective older sister, Lee loves training and working out. She's more often found in the gym that sponsors her career than most anywhere else.

Sister-Mother - Lee's parents died in a car accident when she was 16 and her sisters were barely 2. While some familial support fell into place for the next few years, Lee's long tenure in raising the two practically by herself began in full throttle at 18. She is their legal guardian and has signed every permission slip, gone to every bring-your-parent-to-work-day, and some of her life revolves around the two.

I Bet I'm Stronger - Lee likes nerdy male power fantasy characters - mostly in that she likes to compare herself to them. So yes, she is familiar with all of ya'll DC-Marvel crap, but only out of some vanity.

Virtues:
They are mine and you will not touch them (Protective) - Those who find themselves in Lee's fold need never worry about their safety - physical or emotional - as Lee will always keep you out of harm's way and loan a listening ear. She almost immediately attaches to any teenager (or younger) in her presence and has no problem standing up to people and circumstances that try to throw themselves at them. Older people may not trigger her immediate maternal instinct, but they still have a tendency to be adopted too.

It's Like Second Nature (Responsible) - Raising 2 little girls means that Lee knows when every deadline is, where the girls need to be for what appointment, what they need for school - and that's just for them! She holds herself to the same standards, and every task started is followed through. Her word is her vow and she's so consistent with it that for most people, that's all that's needed.

Not Just For Show (Confident) - Lee doesn't talk the talk, she walks the walk and has the physical girth needed to back herself up. She doesn't throw her weight around needlessly, but when it comes to physical tasks, there's obviously not much holding her back from her goals. There are some obvious setbacks to being a large, intimidating, woman, but the positives seem to outweigh them all.



Flaws:
They are absolutely mine and you will not even look at them (Sister-Obsessive) Lee puts only two things before her career and her happiness and they are Radiata and Raena, her little sisters. You want to be their friend and she doesn't like you? Tough. She will absolutely lay down the law and if she finds out you've overstepped that law? Then you will suffer her consequences. In front of them, she is nothing but sweet and caring, but when it comes to troublemakers, or even those who may not have had ill intentions may find themselves drawing her ill temper. She is doing right by them. On top of this, the girls will be put before anything else in her life - including her own well-being. She will neglect her health, she will neglect her mental well-being, and she will neglect her job - all for them.

Yes, I'm Very Proud of It (Vain) Lee is very proud to flaunt her muscles if put into a position for it. Her career and her intimidating height make her cut quite the figure. While comments about a certain lack of femininity may go past her unnoted, any actual jabs about what she does as a living, or what she's 'done to herself' will upset her - and Lee gets mad, not teary. Her vanity also extends to her job at raising her baby sisters and any upset in the direction of that is a lot less glossed over.

Are....are you mute? (Solemn) Lee doesn't talk much. She's quiet, and serious faced, and has spent quite a bit of time looming menacingly behind people who have needed her to threaten ex-boyfriends into leaving them alone. She's not the first to go out and socialize or to strike up a conversation. As a general impression, she's just a little....scary.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Narrow, Dark brown

Hair: Short, choppy, and so bright orange it's almost firey.

Face: Pale fleshed and freckled. She has a square face that is slightly narrow.

Clothes: Minimal and practical. Jeans, boots, simple shirts - often sleeveless. It's hard to dress a body as tall as hers.

Extra: Lee is 7'2" and very well muscled. She doesn't have anything too fancy in terms of bust/waist. Has a tattoo of a Blue Ringed Octopus

NOTE: I have gotten permission to use the last name 'Fischer'. This permission has been granted out to Lee's future sisters as well.

Good evening, Pach! Let's get you stamped!

Civilian

From her name down to the School, She looks great! Thank you for clarifying that her name was given the O.K.!

For her Hobbies, all read well except for her The Best Big Sister and Sister-Mother. Both of those can be merged together, I think, and in a way, Being their mother isn't so much a hobby as it is a full time job. Hobbies are something they can put a hold on if they need to, but come back to it later, and something that a person does for fun. Once you become a parent, you need be there for you kids and can't exactly set them aside (Which risks CPS coming!).

That being said, perhaps her hobbies could be re-directed towards something she does with the kids. The first idea that came to mind was being that "Go To Mom", who always signs up as a Chaperone for filled trips, or tries to outbake the other moms at bake sales.

The first Two Virtues read just well! However, Physically Powerful cannot work because that is a physical trait, rather than a personality one. It will work, however, if you changed it to Confident, which is backed by the fact she is ripped! It shifts that over from being actually about her muscles to being about how she feels and acts because of her muscles.

Flaw-wise, For Sister-obsessive, can you add a bit of explanation of how this affects people other than her sisters? As it reads now, it reads as mainly having a negative influence on Lee's Sisters, and not herself. Does she see herself as doing anything wrong, or have any guilt about it? Does her obsessive nature end up overlapping in any other parts of her life? And does it strain her relationships besides that with her sisters?

The other two are just fine.

Powered

Her bracer weapons are fine, but metal on a knight should be generally minimal, so please keep that in mind. Her powers work, but for her Knight stage, I would recommend shortening it to 60 seconds, as 90 seconds is a bit long for a fight.

For Clarification: A summon is something that occurs instead of using your magic. You can use your magic OR summon your Summoned Creature. I love the idea of the Kraken, but it would have it's own power that's related to what Overlord's are. So instead of having a boost to Overload's power, Kraken replaces it with it's own, like having ink that stops people from moving (as the force of will keeps people from moving efficiently), or uses it's tentacles to grapple people and keep them pinned.

You will still need to do the related questing/perform the ritual before you play the Kraken, so please keep that in mind.

Please let me know if you have any questions, and feel free to quote me when you're ready to me to take another look.

Thank you!

Thank you for the editing.

There was a lack of clarification on my part, in regards to both the Metal and the summons, so I apologize. It has been since clarified with the GMs. Thank you for your patience with this matter.

You are correct when it comes to the Knight's Artwork. As first stage, it is meant to be minimal, from what I understand, and as it progresses, it can become more predominant on the character. As her gauntlets are made of Metal, I meant to convey that more clearly.

For her Summons, there was a miscommunication with the idea of summons, so what you have now is correct.

What you have written now works well, and You're good to go. A GM will be by shortly with a full stamp.