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Name: Coco

Nicknames: N/A

Breed: Calico

Attached to: Order

Alignment: Order

Fav. Food: Sweet sugary treats, peanut butter, and jelly, fish crackers, fruit snacks, apples, caramel, strawberries, juice.

Hated Food: Anchovies, lavender rice, spicy food, pizza, orange candies, rootbeer.

Hobbies:

Painting/Art viewing Coco loves art in all its forms when she is in cat form she likes finding open cans of paint so she can make kitty paw paintings where ever she can. Coco also hangs around local art shops to look at the art that humans make. She often wishes it were possible for her to paint like the humans can.

Exploring Coco spends a great deal of her time exploring the city, looking for new art spots. New senshi to help. New art hangouts to discover.

Virtues:

Sweet Coco is a sweet little kitty she is kind to everyone she meets even if others would scold her for being nice to them. Coco is a giving little guardian cat and she doses her best to help everyone she meets.

Outgoing Coco is outgoing, she travels the city, exploring seeing different art she can find. Looking for chances to help new senshi and maybe bring corrupted senshi back from the darkness. Coco doses her best to live her kitty life to the fullest and Waiting for the day she will be able to take human form when she has the power to do so, but being a kitty is a good life in her book.

Flaws:

Easily Distracted Coco is easily distracted which can end in disastrous events. She has gotten hurt a few times, looking up at something pretty and falling into a whole by accident.

Curious Coco is a curious kitty, she sees or hears something odd and she is out the door to explore the source even if it might be foolish and dangerous.

Challenge: Paint Splash!

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION : CAT FORM

Face/Ears: White, black, orange, grey calico

Body: Adult

Fur: White, black, orange, grey calico (Star CC)

Eyes: Blue-green

Star Color: CC

Accessories: Collar with paint splashes on it?

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION : HUMAN FORM

Eyes: Blue-green

Hair: Short, black and white mixed hair

Face: Round or oval face

Star Color: CC

Clothes: Light colored outfit with paint splatters? Rainbow color paint splats?

Hey, Middy!

Coco seems really cute so I will try to be quick with this crit! There are a lot of words here, but please don’t be intimidated! I just wanted to be thorough and explain my suggestions!

The first thing I want to go over is that she only has one hobby, and I know it says you are open for suggestions but there are a lot of things she could do. Did you have at lest one other hobby in mind? (She will need at least two before she can be stamped!) She could do something physical, like exploring, or something else that is creative, or something educational (like reading or something) but it is hard to make suggestions without knowing what you might find fun to play!

The second thing is that a lot of how she is written is designed on what form she is in. Eventually, when she unlocks the ability to reach her human form, much of this profile will have to be rewritten. I would suggest to instead work on revising the profile now so that it isn’t so focused on her form!

For example, in her painting section it mentions that she does a painting in human form, but it is incredibly dangerous for a cat to be in human form unless they are in an area that the Negaverse cannot track them (such as on the Moon or someone’s homeworld). As a Mauvian, she would be smart enough to either teach herself how to paint by holding a paintbrush in her mouth, or perhaps by developing some tool that would make it easy for her to hold a paintbrush! (Mauvians are natural tinkerers and creators!)

For her traits, three of them directly mention needing to unlock her human form. Traits are best when they are applicable in a wide variety of situations and when they are written to give people a better understanding of your character (so they know what they are getting into when they are plotting!) so I would suggest expanding a bit on her traits!

For example, ‘Sweet’—this says she likes to cuddle, but that is a physical preference more than a personality preference, so if you instead focused on her personality being sweet (perhaps she is kind, charitable, eager to help others, understanding, etc) you could use those words to emphasize that she has a sweet personality. For ‘Outgoing’ it focuses more on tasks and goals rather than personality—for example, you could say in the description that she is friendly, eager to meet new people, willing to try new things, and is driven to make the best of things.

For her flaws, ‘stubborn’ also focuses strongly on people telling her she can’t do two things, so it would help if you could expand a little more on how she acts when she is stubborn? For example, you could say that she can be argumentative and belligerent when her ways are challenged, that she won’t back down, and that she thinks she is always right and it would help flesh out this flaw!

For ‘Impatient’ especially, this flaw doesn’t seem like it is applicable in a wide variety of situations and seems like she is only impatient to get her human form. I would suggest adding more focus to how her impatience can affect her entire personality rather than just this one goal of hers. For example, does she get exasperated/snippy if she is waiting on someone, does she try to shove her way into a situation if someone is taking too long, does she get callous and hostile when she doesn’t reach a goal fast enough?

These are all really quick fixes and a little expansion/editing on these traits will really help flesh out her profile and prevent you from having to revise all of it when she reaches her human form requirements!

The last thing I want to go over is her outfit, and this is something you can work out with your artist but just make sure that she is designed to look very ‘fantasy’! Right now she is really cute but the clothes seem pretty casual and like something someone might wear out in public. Guardian cats really need to have some fantastical element to their design to make them stick out as magical guardian cats, so if you can’t come up with anything, try asking your artist for suggestions! Sometimes even just cute accessories or trims on an outfit can really give an extra boost to the ‘fantasy’ style!

I know I have a lot of words here, but if you make any edits or have any questions, please let me know! Give me a quote and I’ll be back as soon as possible!

I think this works! Have fun!