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 Posted: Tue Aug 22, 2017 8:13 am
Quest Incoming!
[VelvetVixie | Dire | Nefertari – From Egyptian Nfrt-jrj meaning "the most beautiful".] Edit Level: Heavy
Wolf Species: Dire
Gender: Female
Starting Stage: Adult
Cosplay?: No
WIP Request: Not Required
Size: Average
Build: Petite
Limitations/Disabilities: None
Scars: None noticeable
Overview: Calm || Contemplative || Pro-active || Practical || Intelligent
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Nefertari is the type of wolf who is calm, collected, and always contemplative. She grew up in a time when everything was chaotic in nature, and yet she was able to keep a neutral disposition on the other wolves she encountered, and the circumstances that had already arisen, and were to come in the future. She does not recall much of her earlier years when she was a younger pup still under the watchful eye of her pack, as she grew older, she became more pro-active and tried hard to take things on by herself. This often times would get her into the way of trouble, but due to being born in the pack she was in they all kept her well guarded, her mother had given her the name Nefertari, and when she asked her mother why she had chosen to give her such an odd sounding name, her mother explained that the name meant "the most beautiful". She told Nefertari the reason I named you this is since to me you are the most beautiful treasure our pack has to defend.
She is practical in how she approaches the other wolves who wander in the area she is rather intelligent and knows when there is a meal to share she offers something contribution wise to the feast. Since she enjoys having company around she usually brings a couple of small prey such as rabbits, or fish to the dining area, she has learned quite successfully using great skill to take a paw, and slap a fresh fish out of a waterfalled area, or in more calmer waters she has learned how to move with out disturbing the muck under the water, and thus when she spots the unknowing fish that has become her prey she will lunge at the fish muzzle first with a strong chomp of her jaw, and a head toss to the shore she lands a catch every time.
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Posted: Tue Aug 22, 2017 8:23 am
Body Coloration/Markings: Base Dark Charcoal Grey || Close to black as possible.
Face Coloration/Markings: Golden Eygtian eyeliner.
Eye Colors: Golden
Nose/Pad Color: Black.
Leg Coloration/Markings: Black || Darkest charcoal Grey || Golden Toes
Tail Coloration/Markings: Black || Darkest charcoal Grey
References Images:
Ear Placement: Sideways
Eye Style: Neutral
Mouth Style: Neutral
Tail Position: Relaxed
Custom Edits or Stock Items:
Golden Cuff earrings
Golden Cuff Bracers on all four limbs.
Stock a necklace with a crimson crescent moon jewel.
Golden Ankh Tail charm
(I considered this a heavy edit.)
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Posted: Tue Aug 22, 2017 8:26 am
• History
Nefertari resides in the Blackwood territory. Her parents and previous pack den was formerly located in the Elysium Fields just south of her new territory. She often remembered once she was old enough to go on the hunting trips, she was at her father’s heels. While her mom would stay back at the den, since there were other pups to tend to, and her mother seemed to be the one that the new mothers would go to in seek of advice if something were to occur with their litters, Nefertari grew out of that sort of thing, and was more intrigued with the concept of being in on the hunt while the pack went for food supplies.
It was during these explorations with the hunting team, and her father, she developed new adaptations to the way the pack formation could gain the most out of their hunts. It was almost as if though she had a sixth sense, about where the prey would try to escape once the pack was spotted, she helped by telling her father the observations she made, where she thought the pack members could be placed, and through her contemplating the possible outcomes of success, the hunting pack soon realized she was gifted in this way and began executing each formation with nearly no flaws every single time.
Still, she yearned for more so her father took her to streams, lakes, and areas where fish was to be located. He started to teach her the aspects of how to catch the fish, though he was more aloof then her, he did manage to get the job done and successfully catch a few fish along the way. While she was observing his technique again she found the flaws where he would murk up the water, making it hard to see the prey at times, he would get excited, and place his footing incorrectly down, then under the water could be seen the fish darting off in the opposite direction leaving a murky water to look into.
She took the skills that her father, had taught her, and the hunting formations that their pack had been able to refine while she stayed with them, and deciding she was ready to go forth into the world and seek more challenges, and situations for her to solve out, she new the only way to do so would be to travel outside of her home territory, and find a new dwelling to make a den, and start a new journey, hopefully acquainting other wolves along the way, and perhaps even helping those wolves in turn by using her contemplative skills to help make formations for them to succeed whether it was in hunting, or perhaps something new they could contemplate, and formulate strategy for.
• Plots:
✦ Friendly Acquaintances: Present day she is wandering up to the Blackwood territory when she gets side tracked by a pack of wolves that seem to be congregating, and socializing, she contemplates joining up, and meeting them to see what all the buzz is about.
✦ A sudden farewell: In a not so distant future wind of her mother, and father passing will occur, and she has to decide whether to go back to her home den, or make the Blackwood territory a permanent dwelling.
✦ Decided Divide: Due to the loss of her parents, she makes an unusual choice, and decides while she will make a claim to the blackwood territory as her home, she will roam the other territories for some time in order to let the thoughts of loss leave her mind.
✦ Chance Romance: She re-encounters some from her past and spends more time getting acquainted with the familiar stranger, and it seems like there is a chance for future romance.
✦ No Longer time to roam: It seems the chance at romance may have just been a piece of the puzzle from that which is life she was searching for a chance she may be carrying a pup , possibly pups. This being the case she finally will choose her mate, and make a final claim to her home den, never to roam far across the lands again.
✦ Blessing in disguise: Over time she will grow as the shop grows, and the goal is for her to become one of the few the proud the blessed.
✦ What's this something I missed?: Oh I didn't forget , hehe but you can't give out all the details of a story, I can say it is a plot for how she got that crimson moon jeweled necklace and other trinkets though. wink
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Posted: Mon Sep 25, 2017 8:52 pm
I see we've changed specs! This is notibly better than your prior quest - good job!
• First and foremost, Blackwood isn't a "territory" so to speak. Numerous packs can exist within named places on the map, they're simply named for the ease of everyone's enjoyment while roleplaying. It allows everyone to be on the same page regarding the general area and description of said area so we don't have one person thinking their wolves are fighting at the base of a cliff, and the other thinks they're fighting on a beach. :') Nefertari would reside in the Blackwood in a small area that is patrolled by her parents pack, but would not control all of that piece of the map.
• We want to know a little more on how and why she is gifted. Is it just a fluke that she can do all of these things? Right now, she's coming across a little bit as "the perfect child." Is she able to do it the first time, or does it take practice for her to modify and better skills?
• I'd love to see some negative traits to balance her out. Is she TOO analytical where she finds it difficult to communicate with others? Does she feel any pressure from being looked to, to provide new solutions?
• We love to see plots - right now, it seems pretty straightforward for Nefertari. We'd like to see some variety. She has a lot of lifegoal plots, but we enjoy FLAVOR here. The plots are a place where you can get creative - they don't HAVE to happen, but they allow us to see you're considering your options and get a grasp on your playstyle and your character.
--- What if she fails? She makes a wrong calculation, and someone she loves is put in the line of fire and harmed for it. What if SHE'S the thing that costs one of her parents they're life? It would bring some trauma to her and make her understand that there are consequences to her actions.
--- What happens if the pack she joins with isn't a pleasant experience? Will her family try to free her? Will she make friends on the inside to help her get out?
--- After she goes to claim her family pack, there's potential here. It's a chaotic time for a lot of packs, and things get passed up on. What if another pack muscles in on their territory? What if she finds a friend from her old pack poaching?
We want to just see some elaboration and a bit more substance - you're on the right track!
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