Range: 500 meter Description: Dragon's Bane - S Range: 500 meters By infusing arrows with lightning and fire chakra, the user is capable of a number of things. When released from a bow, the arrow causes a thunderclap, which can be heard from 125 meters away. Since the user is in such close proximity to the thunderclap, firing the arrow causes some slight disorientation, which prevents them from performing complex actions such as forming hand signs or stringing another bow or even running at full speed. Due to the lightning chakra, the arrows are fired at increased velocity, making the arrows difficult to react to. Furthermore, it gives them the capability of piercing solid steel. The fire chakra, on the other hand, causes anything the arrows has pierced to burst into flames. Unfortunately, this leaves a chakra trail behind the arrow, making it easier for the arrow to be detected. Alternatively, it also makes it easier for the user to track the arrows down after they're fired. Upon missing their target and colliding with a dense object such as stone or wood, a field of electricity will surround the arrow, causing anyone caught within this field to have severe problems with moving their body. The field covers a ten meter diameter, and instantly begins to shrink at a meter per second until it dissipates completely. As soon as anyone within the field is no longer inside of it, all of their motor functions quickly return to normal. Once fired, arrows may also split into up to 19 lightning-clone versions of themselves; however, since the chakra is divided, each arrow is considerably weaker, but still capable of piercing through the human body. Furthermore, without the extra chakra, the arrows are no longer capable of creating an electric field, including the original.
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It requires the user to shut down unneeded senses like taste, touch, smell, ability to perceive color, emotions, and requires immense control of one's own chakra flow.
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To any one he deems worthy, for any one else to teach it to another person they need his permissim. It'll most be passed down in his family.
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Angel's Tears and Heaven's fall has the ability to condense chakra, store it, neutralize the chakra's element. Since they can condense chakra they can store vast amounts of it, they can store the weilder's own chakra, but for some one else to store chakra they need to give it willing. They are designed for mass-use, another words the bottle chakra (or potions just for sh!t and giggles) can be use to restores a person's chakra supply and that includes the weilder of the weapons. The potion restores forty percent of the person's chakra, when they drink it. It's two bottle per person per battle. There are no other known side effects, besides drinking more then what's recommended the person will become sick, also the person currently weilding the weapons is not a doctor. S-rank
Posted: Tue Jun 20, 2017 12:43 am
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Shango's Hunt Rank: S maybe Range: 500 meter Description: The user infuses the arrows with lightning and Fire. When the arrow is shot, anyone in a 125 meter radius can hear a thunderclap. The lightning chakra helps increases the velocity of the arrow it is very hard to escape, and can pierce through any obstacles, and the fire chakra trails after the arrow to help the user to retrieve the arrow.
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The fire chakra can add an extra benefit...such as causing the arrow to cause anything it pierces to burst in flames or something similar. Also, I wouldn't claim that it can pierce through anything. There's always something that can stop it. But you could say that it's strong enough to pierce through solid steel...as an example.
Varient #1: Shango's Hunt: Arrow barrage- Same as before, but one arrow is multiplied into twenty, nineteen of them are lightning clones. It can't pierce through as well as the original jutsu It's made to take out a group. Rank: S maybe
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Considering this may only be used on an arrow, you can lower it to C or B Rank. Depends on how strong you want the lightning clone arrows to be. The original arrow would still be S Rank in power though.
Varient #2: Shango's Hunt: Shango's lightning bolt- The velocity is slower, because a good portion of the chakra is need for controlled lightning explosion. It causes the enemies' muscles to seize up for a minute. It's not made to be shot directly at enemies. Rank: A maybe
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The explosion is basically a large field of a electricity, I'm guessing? If so, it would need an approximate size. And when you say "a minute," are you being literal?
Varient #3: Shango's Hunt: Shango's Wrath- Some much chakra is put into that the fire and lightning affinity absorbs the excess chakra and forms a seven meter diameter and ten meters long. Rank: S maybe
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I don't quite understand this one. Help me out here lol
Requirements: It requires the user to shut down unneeded senses like taste, touch, smell, ability to perceive color, emotions, and requires immense control of one's own chakra flow. Other varients require more chakra then others. Permission: To any one he teaches, for any one else to teach it to another person they need his permission. After he dies, his first disciple will be the one to decide who can teach to another person and it keeps repeating.
I hope it isn't to over powered
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Lastly, is your goal to make this one technique with multiple variations? Or separate techniques?
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Posted: Tue Jun 20, 2017 1:15 am
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Varient #2: Shango's Hunt: Shango's lightning bolt- The velocity is slower, because a good portion of the chakra is need for controlled lightning explosion. It causes the enemies' muscles to seize up for a minute. It's not made to be shot directly at enemies. Rank: A rank The explosion is basically a large field of a electricity, I'm guessing? If so, it would need an approximate size. And when you say "a minute," are you being literal?
Would ten meter be big enough? The closest thing I could find to it is a electromagentic pulse. So would a single minute be to much?
Multiple veriations, I also thought some more veriations. I'm sorry I added a couple things I thought was necessary. Amazing what a person can come up with, when they are tired and bored.
Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2017 3:52 pm
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Varient #2: Shango's Hunt: Shango's lightning bolt- The velocity is slower, because a good portion of the chakra is need for controlled lightning explosion. It causes the enemies' muscles to seize up for a minute. It's not made to be shot directly at enemies. Rank: A rank The explosion is basically a large field of a electricity, I'm guessing? If so, it would need an approximate size. And when you say "a minute," are you being literal?
Would ten meter be big enough? The closest thing I could find to it is a electromagentic pulse. So would a single minute be to much?
Multiple veriations
Well, just think about it this way. If by forcing muscles to seize up, you mean that they're unable to move, then the issue would be more so with the minute-long duration rather than the actual range. A minute is quite a long time to not be able to move. It would basically guarantee death for the majority of characters. How about I rewrite the technique to fit everything into it? As for your newly added weapons...just keep in mind that the amount of the boost in chakra you can receive should basically be dependent on the rank. So at D Rank, it shouldn't be that significant. I have a question pertaining to it though. Would they only be able to store your own chakra? Or would this affect, for instance, all chakra that they come in contact with?
Anyways, here's your technique condensed all into one description. I added a little extra detail to make it more viable, but it's roughly identical. The only thing I didn't really touch on was the Dragon-related variant, as I don't know what you're hoping to accomplish with it. "Forms a dragon..." doesn't give much detail on its effects. I'm not sure if it's supposed to be a moving field of electricity, similar to your lightning bolt variant...or what. Though it seems like that's really the only portion that should be turned into a separate technique.
Shango's Hunt - S Range: 500 meters By infusing arrows with lightning and fire chakra, the user is capable of a number of things. When released from a bow, the arrow causes a thunderclap, which can be heard from 125 meters away. Since the user is in such close proximity to the thunderclap, firing the arrow causes some slight disorientation, which prevents them from performing complex actions such as forming hand signs or stringing another bow or even running at full speed. Due to the lightning chakra, the arrows are fired at increased velocity, making the arrows difficult to react to. Furthermore, it gives them the capability of piercing solid steel. The fire chakra, on the other hand, causes anything the arrows has pierced to burst into flames. Unfortunately, this leaves a chakra trail behind the arrow, making it easier for the arrow to be detected. Alternatively, it also makes it easier for the user to track the arrows down after they're fired. Upon missing their target and colliding with a dense object such as stone or wood, a field of electricity will surround the arrow, causing anyone caught within this field to have severe problems with moving their body. The field covers a ten meter diameter, and instantly begins to shrink at a meter per second until it dissipates completely. As soon as anyone within the field is no longer inside of it, all of their motor functions quickly return to normal. Once fired, arrows may also split into up to 19 lightning-clone versions of themselves; however, since the chakra is divided, each arrow is considerably weaker, but still capable of piercing through the human body. Furthermore, without the extra chakra, the arrows are no longer capable of creating an electric field, including the original.
How's that look? I think the drawbacks I've given balance the technique out pretty well.
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2017 4:04 pm
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Varient #2: Shango's Hunt: Shango's lightning bolt- The velocity is slower, because a good portion of the chakra is need for controlled lightning explosion. It causes the enemies' muscles to seize up for a minute. It's not made to be shot directly at enemies. Rank: A rank The explosion is basically a large field of a electricity, I'm guessing? If so, it would need an approximate size. And when you say "a minute," are you being literal?
Would ten meter be big enough? The closest thing I could find to it is a electromagentic pulse. So would a single minute be to much?
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Well, just think about it this way. If by forcing muscles to seize up, you mean that they're unable to move, then the issue would be more so with the minute-long duration rather than the actual range. A minute is quite a long time to not be able to move. It would basically guarantee death for the majority of characters. How about I rewrite the technique to fit everything into it? As for your newly added weapons...just keep in mind that the amount of the boost in chakra you can receive should basically be dependent on the rank. So at D Rank, it shouldn't be that significant. I have a question pertaining to it though. Would they only be able to store your own chakra? Or would this affect, for instance, all chakra that they come in contact with? How's that look? I think the drawbacks I've given balance the technique out pretty well.
Thats good, Now it just needs a better name. I put D-rank, because I didn't know what rank to give the weapons. I was thinking of having the weapons as a family heirloom. They can store the weilder's own chakra, but for some one else to store chakra they need to give it willing. The weapons neutralize the chakra's element, so the bottled can be use to replinish any one chakra supply no matter what element they use. I had the idea of the weapons being a family heirloom and has chakra stored in it for generations. I guess they could be considered SS for how much chakra they can hold. Although not bad for some ones first time creating weapons and a technique, I suck at balancing things out don't I?
Posted: Fri Jun 23, 2017 3:03 pm
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Thats good, Now it just needs a better name. I put D-rank, because I didn't know what rank to give the weapons. I was thinking of having the weapons as a family heirloom. They can store the weilder's own chakra, but for some one else to store chakra they need to give it willing. The weapons neutralize the chakra's element, so the bottled can be use to replinish any one chakra supply no matter what element they use. I had the idea of the weapons being a family heirloom and has chakra stored in it for generations. I guess they could be considered SS for how much chakra they can hold. Although not bad for some ones first time creating weapons and a technique, I suck at balancing things out don't I?
If they were all separate techniques, they would be fine for the most part. But having a single arrow capable of so many things at once...there has to be some downside to it lol
And I wouldn't say SS no matter what, if all they do is store chakra. But that does mean that they should be limited. You could give an example. Completely restoring a single person's chakra? Ten people? A hundred? The problem is...if you deem it an heirloom that has stored the chakra of multiple people before you get it, that would imply that it will gradually "weaken." As in....the more times you use it, the less it has to offer. Because your character will only take up one generation (obviously), so it wouldn't really be possible for her to match the reserves of chakra that has already been stored in it.
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If they were all separate techniques, they would be fine for the most part. But having a single arrow capable of so many things at once...there has to be some downside to it lol
And I wouldn't say SS no matter what, if all they do is store chakra. But that does mean that they should be limited. You could give an example. Completely restoring a single person's chakra? Ten people? A hundred? The problem is...if you deem it an heirloom that has stored the chakra of multiple people before you get it, that would imply that it will gradually "weaken." As in....the more times you use it, the less it has to offer. Because your character will only take up one generation (obviously), so it wouldn't really be possible for her to match the reserves of chakra that has already been stored in it.
Well I did say I was thinking of making it a heirloom. Well that went down the drain. Well it can't be five hundred, I probably already know the answer to that. sweatdrop
Posted: Fri Jun 23, 2017 8:20 pm
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If they were all separate techniques, they would be fine for the most part. But having a single arrow capable of so many things at once...there has to be some downside to it lol
And I wouldn't say SS no matter what, if all they do is store chakra. But that does mean that they should be limited. You could give an example. Completely restoring a single person's chakra? Ten people? A hundred? The problem is...if you deem it an heirloom that has stored the chakra of multiple people before you get it, that would imply that it will gradually "weaken." As in....the more times you use it, the less it has to offer. Because your character will only take up one generation (obviously), so it wouldn't really be possible for her to match the reserves of chakra that has already been stored in it.
Well I did say I was thinking of making it a heirloom. Well that went down the drain. Well it can't be five hundred, I probably already know the answer to that. sweatdrop
If it's meant to completely restore one's chakra, then 500 uses would be far too ridiculous. There's only a handful of members with more than 500 posts in the guild, so it would essentially be an endless supply of chakra for yourself. I honestly don't like the idea of a set amount of uses. Perhaps a time limit would be more appropriate.
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If they were all separate techniques, they would be fine for the most part. But having a single arrow capable of so many things at once...there has to be some downside to it lol
And I wouldn't say SS no matter what, if all they do is store chakra. But that does mean that they should be limited. You could give an example. Completely restoring a single person's chakra? Ten people? A hundred? The problem is...if you deem it an heirloom that has stored the chakra of multiple people before you get it, that would imply that it will gradually "weaken." As in....the more times you use it, the less it has to offer. Because your character will only take up one generation (obviously), so it wouldn't really be possible for her to match the reserves of chakra that has already been stored in it.
Well I did say I was thinking of making it a heirloom. Well that went down the drain. Well it can't be five hundred, I probably already know the answer to that. sweatdrop
If it's meant to completely restore one's chakra, then 500 uses would be far too ridiculous. There's only a handful of members with more than 500 posts in the guild, so it would essentially be an endless supply of chakra for yourself. I honestly don't like the idea of a set amount of uses. Perhaps a time limit would be more appropriate.
I agree. Oooh considering the chakra will be condensed and probably put into a bottle, it should have like a time limit of how long it takes to digusted and fully replinish the person's chakra supply. Or it could be like the instant health potions from skyrim, but has time / chakra limit before you can use another one. But then again he will be only handing them out, when some one is out. Just throwing out ideas. By the way I hate unisex japanese names!
Posted: Tue Jun 27, 2017 10:38 pm
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If they were all separate techniques, they would be fine for the most part. But having a single arrow capable of so many things at once...there has to be some downside to it lol
And I wouldn't say SS no matter what, if all they do is store chakra. But that does mean that they should be limited. You could give an example. Completely restoring a single person's chakra? Ten people? A hundred? The problem is...if you deem it an heirloom that has stored the chakra of multiple people before you get it, that would imply that it will gradually "weaken." As in....the more times you use it, the less it has to offer. Because your character will only take up one generation (obviously), so it wouldn't really be possible for her to match the reserves of chakra that has already been stored in it.
Well I did say I was thinking of making it a heirloom. Well that went down the drain. Well it can't be five hundred, I probably already know the answer to that. sweatdrop
If it's meant to completely restore one's chakra, then 500 uses would be far too ridiculous. There's only a handful of members with more than 500 posts in the guild, so it would essentially be an endless supply of chakra for yourself. I honestly don't like the idea of a set amount of uses. Perhaps a time limit would be more appropriate.
I agree. Oooh considering the chakra will be condensed and probably put into a bottle, it should have like a time limit of how long it takes to digusted and fully replinish the person's chakra supply. Or it could be like the instant health potions from skyrim, but has time / chakra limit before you can use another one. But then again he will be only handing them out, when some one is out. Just throwing out ideas. By the way I hate unisex japanese names!
Even if it took time to digest, there would still have to be a separate limit on how often they can be used to prevent spamming it. And what makes you mention unisex names? Lol
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Posted: Wed Jun 28, 2017 12:52 am
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Even if it took time to digest, there would still have to be a separate limit on how often they can be used to prevent spamming it. And what makes you mention unisex names? Lol
Well Noboru Takao is suppose to be a guy's name, but appearently they all sound like a girls. Anyways thats why I was talking about a chakra limit, like their chakra supply has to be depleted past a certian point before they can use it again.
Posted: Wed Jun 28, 2017 9:44 pm
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Even if it took time to digest, there would still have to be a separate limit on how often they can be used to prevent spamming it. And what makes you mention unisex names? Lol
Well Noboru Takao is suppose to be a guy's name, but appearently they all sound like a girls. Anyways thats why I was talking about a chakra limit, like their chakra supply has to be depleted past a certian point before they can use it again.
Hm, doesn't seem masculine or feminine lol And that would still allow you to use it an infinite amount of times. Just means you'd only be able to use it when it's actually needed.
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Exactly what I was thinking
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What do you think of the weapons? Not sure what rank they are suppose to be. I was aiming to keep it simple.
Posted: Sun Jul 30, 2017 7:27 am
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Dragon's Bane Rank: S
Range: 500 meter Description: Dragon's Bane - S Range: 500 meters By infusing arrows with lightning and fire chakra, the user is capable of a number of things. When released from a bow, the arrow causes a thunderclap, which can be heard from 125 meters away. Since the user is in such close proximity to the thunderclap, firing the arrow causes some slight disorientation, which prevents them from performing complex actions such as forming hand signs or stringing another bow or even running at full speed. Due to the lightning chakra, the arrows are fired at increased velocity, making the arrows difficult to react to. Furthermore, it gives them the capability of piercing solid steel. The fire chakra, on the other hand, causes anything the arrows has pierced to burst into flames. Unfortunately, this leaves a chakra trail behind the arrow, making it easier for the arrow to be detected. Alternatively, it also makes it easier for the user to track the arrows down after they're fired. Upon missing their target and colliding with a dense object such as stone or wood, a field of electricity will surround the arrow, causing anyone caught within this field to have severe problems with moving their body. The field covers a ten meter diameter, and instantly begins to shrink at a meter per second until it dissipates completely. As soon as anyone within the field is no longer inside of it, all of their motor functions quickly return to normal. Once fired, arrows may also split into up to 19 lightning-clone versions of themselves; however, since the chakra is divided, each arrow is considerably weaker, but still capable of piercing through the human body. Furthermore, without the extra chakra, the arrows are no longer capable of creating an electric field, including the original.
Requirements:
It requires the user to shut down unneeded senses like taste, touch, smell, ability to perceive color, emotions, and requires immense control of one's own chakra flow.
Permission:
To any one he deems worthy, for any one else to teach it to another person they need his permissim. It'll most be passed down in his family.
Special Weapons:
Angel's Tears and Heaven's fall has the ability to condense chakra and store it. Since they can condense chakra they can store vast amounts of it, they can store the weilder's own chakra, but for some one else to store chakra they need to give it willing. The weapons neutralize the chakra's element, so the bottled can be use to replinish any one chakra no matter what element they use. More dense the chakra becomes the more volital the liquid chakra becomes, when it's outside the weapon. The weilder can use the stored chakra in the weapons to help with jutsu. The bottled chakra can only be used when the person's chakra supply is empty. D-rank
The only thing that needs to be added is some sort of indication of how much chakra can be stored at one time. At D Rank (I assume each weapon is D Rank separately), each weapon could reasonably have a one-time use of roughly 20% chakra restoration. After used, you'd have to store more chakra into it before it can be used again.
If you wanted it to be a mass-restoration ability that focuses on being used on a ton of people, then you could lower that to 10% and make it useable on a given person once per battle.
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Dragon's Bane Rank: S
Range: 500 meter Description: Dragon's Bane - S Range: 500 meters By infusing arrows with lightning and fire chakra, the user is capable of a number of things. When released from a bow, the arrow causes a thunderclap, which can be heard from 125 meters away. Since the user is in such close proximity to the thunderclap, firing the arrow causes some slight disorientation, which prevents them from performing complex actions such as forming hand signs or stringing another bow or even running at full speed. Due to the lightning chakra, the arrows are fired at increased velocity, making the arrows difficult to react to. Furthermore, it gives them the capability of piercing solid steel. The fire chakra, on the other hand, causes anything the arrows has pierced to burst into flames. Unfortunately, this leaves a chakra trail behind the arrow, making it easier for the arrow to be detected. Alternatively, it also makes it easier for the user to track the arrows down after they're fired. Upon missing their target and colliding with a dense object such as stone or wood, a field of electricity will surround the arrow, causing anyone caught within this field to have severe problems with moving their body. The field covers a ten meter diameter, and instantly begins to shrink at a meter per second until it dissipates completely. As soon as anyone within the field is no longer inside of it, all of their motor functions quickly return to normal. Once fired, arrows may also split into up to 19 lightning-clone versions of themselves; however, since the chakra is divided, each arrow is considerably weaker, but still capable of piercing through the human body. Furthermore, without the extra chakra, the arrows are no longer capable of creating an electric field, including the original.
Requirements:
It requires the user to shut down unneeded senses like taste, touch, smell, ability to perceive color, emotions, and requires immense control of one's own chakra flow.
Permission:
To any one he deems worthy, for any one else to teach it to another person they need his permissim. It'll most be passed down in his family.
Special Weapons:
Angel's Tears and Heaven's fall has the ability to condense chakra and store it. Since they can condense chakra they can store vast amounts of it, they can store the weilder's own chakra, but for some one else to store chakra they need to give it willing. The weapons neutralize the chakra's element, so the bottled can be use to replinish any one chakra no matter what element they use. More dense the chakra becomes the more volital the liquid chakra becomes, when it's outside the weapon. The weilder can use the stored chakra in the weapons to help with jutsu. The bottled chakra can only be used when the person's chakra supply is empty. D-rank
The only thing that needs to be added is some sort of indication of how much chakra can be stored at one time. At D Rank (I assume each weapon is D Rank separately), each weapon could reasonably have a one-time use of roughly 20% chakra restoration. After used, you'd have to store more chakra into it before it can be used again.
If you wanted it to be a mass-restoration ability that focuses on being used on a ton of people, then you could lower that to 10% and make it useable on a given person once per battle.
Like I said earlier not good with ranks, but I was thinking they could be A-rank or S-rank. A-rank would be 50% and S-rank would 60% right?
