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 Posted: Sat May 27, 2017 5:47 pm
Name: Jacline Tallart
Stage: Prentice
Race: Yaeli
Gender: Female
Sex: Female
Class: Prentice > Healer > Monk > Scholar (Book)
Three Base Traits: Meticulous, Puritanical, Prudish
Personality:
Meticulous: Everything has a place and must be put there. Jacline notices small details and will not settle for calling something finished until it is finished right in her mind. She expects this of others and becomes irritable when her expectations are frequently disappointed.
Principled: Living comes with standards, set out by the gods, that should be followed absolutely. Jacline has a firm set of beliefs that, for better or for worse, she sticks by rigidly. People who she considers to be morally 'wishy washy' or unprincipled are repulsive and confusing, weak in spirit and destined to fall victim to sickness, bad luck, etc., befitting their lack of proper attention to duty and respect for the gods.
Serious: Life is not a joke. Jacline has difficulty relaxing and taking anything in jest. Her seriousness has advantages, of course, but can be difficult to get around for anyone trying to bring a little light to life through humor. She is as such slow to pick up on jokes, sometimes (often) resulting in her being the butt of them, and can easily take offense when none was meant if the 'humor' slips past her.
Disciplined: A minute wasted can never be regained. All of her rigidity in other areas does pay off in terms of getting things done, and Jacline, once set to something, is good at keeping her mind on her work and sticking to it until the job is done. She is also 'disciplined' in the sense of self-deprivation when it comes to not 'giving in' to common indulgences, including (in her later years) recreational (or otherwise) pleasures of the flesh, intoxicants, and lavish food or finery.
Intelligent: The world is blind as it is stupid. Jacline is not. Although she carries with her many strong opinions which a great many would (perhaps rightfully) disagree with, she does have a quick mind under it all. She learns quickly, listens well, picks up on things that might slip past others, and (when she does speak) likes to apply her wit to a stinging tongue if she can manage to summon the gall to speak up in the first place.
Prudish: The body is a temple; it should not be despoiled by hands seeking only selfish gratification and indulgence, nor should it be dressed so as to be looked upon in lust. Among Jacline's 'principles', a very rigid sense of modesty rests, strongly influencing her dress, mannerisms, and approach to others. She expects that she may remain celibate her entire life (when she is old enough to understand such things) and die pure in the eyes of her gods.
Dutiful: What must be done, must be done. Jacline does not hesitate in doing what she assumes to be her duty, and sets high standards for herself in this area. To shirk one's duty is a high shame and will not do in tailoring one's life to honoring the gods.
Cowardly: That said, living another day to serve the gods is crucial (or, such is the excuse she gives herself). In truth, though she would never admit it, Jacline is, on no uncertain terms, a coward. As one might imagine, this can clash with her sense of duty and principle, and as a result of her cowardice, sometimes she will feel she has failed to uphold her own standards. Usually, however, she will come up with personal excuses, and place the blame elsewhere, stewing in the wrongness of others and hiding away from actual confrontation. When it comes down to it, Jacline is willing to risk very little when it comes to not only her life and safety, but even general comfort or personal pride.
Puritanical: Lurin is the Light and Dafiel is the Darkness. Honoring the gods is pivotal to a life well lived. Jacline is fervently religious, and this defines a great deal of her attitude towards many things, shaping her and serving as the framework for her approach to life.
Petty: Little things really are big things. No slight is too small to be noticed, and though she wouldn't recognize it as such, Jacline can be incredibly petty, holding on to small grudges and inconsequential disagreements like small stones weighing down her mood and attitude. She will later on occasion throw these 'stones' back at people to sate her sour humor when she is feeling particularly cross about something.
Repressed: One really shouldn't stray too far; there is no telling what might happen. In line with her prudishness, Jacline is, overall, quite repressed, especially sexually in her teens and rising years, but also in terms of general emotional attachments, friendships, and casual 'day to day' luxuries like laughing, loosening up, and enjoying life.
Description: Plain. Jacline is not remarkable looking in any way, other than her notable pallidness. She is a twiggy, narrow bodied young girl that will eventually grow into a thin, lanky woman. Palest lavender hair straight as a ruler; palest Yaeli skin tone.
Clothing: Simple, modest, straight laced clothing befitting a girl of middle class who takes herself far too seriously, brown, cream, and dark, dull/de-saturated purple please. Full-length dresses only, no pants. She has small, round glasses. Specific hairstyle is CC, but please have it anywhere between chin and shoulder-blade length and simple if styled (it can just be loose if desired).
History: Jacline is not clear on her early history. Her closest confidant and father figure, Master Theodall Tallart (after whom she takes her surname), has raised her for as long as her memory spans in a modest home in Pajore which doubles as the bookshop where he works. He binds and sells texts, as well as taking on occasional commissioned scribe work, and tells her that she was born of of a wealthy bloodline, but that her parents, sacrilegious and impure, abandoned her as a small babe, her mother having carried her illegitimately as the child of another man to whom she was not wed. Theodal, however, being the kind and righteous soul that he is, took her in despite her background due to being a friend of the father, and raised her as his own because he saw good in her and did not want to see her fall into an orphanage. A child destined for a higher path than her blasphemous parents.
In truth, Jacline is the daughter of Theodall’s brother, and thus his niece, sired under illegitimate circumstances which prevented the man from being willing to raise her himself, and pushing her into the relative ‘safety’ from suspicious eyes by having her cared for by a more trusted and stable figure (Theodall) who had no wife at the time and no intention to marry, such that he was willing to raise his brother’s child as his own.
Her father was wealthy but not a very good man who married for wealth and strategic purposes but really enjoyed his exploits. Her mother was a lover of his that he lead on until she became pregnant, at which point he wanted nothing to do with her, wanted his wife not to hear of her, and tried to turn her away, but she was most insistent and her behavior became increasingly erratic/forceful the closer she came to due.There was an extended period of tension there where, even after Jacline was first born, her mother would come threatening him, showing up at his house and work, saying she was going to tell everyone everything, who the girl's father was, never leave unless he at least paid to take care of them. Instead he eventually utilized his position to see to it that she was silenced indefinitely.
Meanwhile Theodall and his brother have always had a tense relationship where Theodall has never approved of his brother's wild and self-serving behavior, but nor did he like his brother's 'crazy' lover, and when it came to drastic measures, he decided to take the girl himself. At the time it surprised everyone, including Theodall, but he felt compelled to take in this particular child and decided not to question the impulse (do a 'better' job and fix his brother's mess). Her mother was consistently much more keen on the reputation and pretty things that came with being with Jacline's father and not so much on Jacline herself. When Jacline was an infant she was a tool/threat/bargaining chip, and she was not interested in raising an infant without support, so even if she is still alive somewhere she would not be risking coming back for the girl. As for her father, he wanted nothing to do with the child to begin with, but was fine enough with Theodall adopting her on the down low.
Such things may or may not be revealed in time, but in the meantime Jacline herself feels entitled to the personal 'secret' of being born initially to persons of reputed power and destined to follow a better path than they. A large chip for a small, growing girl to tote about. Theodall is incredibly religious, a Holier Than Thou sort with his nose in the air who believes in rigid adherence to the gods' will and has instilled this in Jacline. He has taken her to church every sabbath and felt (and conveyed to her as he did) that such education, worship, and attention to faith would help fix the messiness of her past and turn her into a good girl in the eyes of the gods. He has been very strict with her on this.
In all of her remembered history, Jacline has lived in Pajore, ever under Theodall’s watchful eye. As a young girl, she rarely left the home and did little more than clean and try to stay out from underfoot. As she grew, Theodall saw to it that she learned to read and write that she might one day study basic spellwork and, above all else, the word of their gods. By age fourteen, she will have long since learned her letters and be a capable scribe, maid, and errand-runner about the city when she is not tucked away indoors with a book.
Though she is allowed out, Theodall quickly becomes uncomfortable with her straying too far, which only exacerbates her pre-existing wariness of strangers. As such, if possible, she prefers to work and stay near to home with ‘lofty plans’ of perhaps one day serving the local library, counting office, or taking up Theodall’s business and running the bookstore.
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Posted: Sun May 28, 2017 2:01 pm
This has probably been seen by most of you, but fire when ready. c: heart
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Posted: Mon May 29, 2017 12:11 pm
So quick question before I go too in-depth on my crit...you are looking to have Theodall as a Priest who is stationed in the Sanctum?
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Posted: Mon May 29, 2017 12:28 pm
Elyessi So quick question before I go too in-depth on my crit...you are looking to have Theodall as a Priest who is stationed in the Sanctum? Ideally, yes. Though he would obviously just be a personal internal NPC, not anyone I ever planned for as a character or intend to represent the actions of the actual Sanctum. I just wanted to have a girl who was raised by a priest within the family section of the Outer Sanctum.
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Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2017 1:02 pm
Hey there! Congrats on your first quest here in Tendaji. There are just a few things we would like to address to start with before we can move on with the critique. Unfortunately, the history as it is doesn't fit into the structure of Tendaji or the Sanctum. Priests are required to get permission before starting a family, and the only way to do that is through marriage. So while we can understand wanting to have a character raised by a priest, the Sanctum would have ruled to put the child in a Sanctum owned orphanage to be cared for. They would not have allowed Theodall to raise her as his own. She would not have been raised inside of the Outer Sanctum, since the orhphages aren't located within their walls. If you could alter her quest to reflect these changes, we can go ahead and continue with our critique ^.^
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Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2017 1:36 pm
Oh, that's fine! I didn't realize priests/priestesses were not allowed to adopt. I definitely imagined him approaching the Sanctum and asking to take her as his own first, i.e., start a family/have her be his family officially, since I didn't really originally imagine him marrying. But he did want to have a daughter/was eager to have her as a daughter, so I can edit it to where he did have a wife and she is his daughter if that works better? c:
Or, if it would be allowed for him to adopt but it is the complications with family background that are objectionable, I would be happy for her not to be blood related to him at all and instead simply have her be a girl that he adopted after presenting his case to the Sanctum and stating that he preferred to remain celibate but would like to raise a child from the orphanage and take her as his own. Whichever works best!
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Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2017 1:46 pm
I'm sorry, I might have been unclear. The problem with the quest is that she is being raised by a priest in general. Her history doesn't work as is, but we also don't allow a character to be quested in any situation that would have her raised by a priest or priestess. They cannot have ties to the Sanctum as a playable character in Tendaji unless they are won through an event that way since these are exclusive characters. I'm sorry for the confusion, I meant that her history would have to be changed to exclude being raised by a priest altogether.
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Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2017 2:04 pm
Oh, yes that wasn't clear at all and is disappointing to hear. Since the Sanctum is said to be their form of government in the race description and there are descriptions of the Outer Sanctum being a place for family, I assumed engaging in such a big part of the Yaeli culture would be encouraged. It's really what made me want her to be a Yaeli in the first place, because her history comports with that religious component so well (though obviously I knew I could not have her be a priestess and am not trying to make her 'officially' tied in with the Sanctum at all, it's just the sort of upbringing I wanted for her). Maybe there could be information somewhere that lets people know we're not allowed to connect with the Sanctum at all. Also, I thought I had read the history of at least one character who had a sister who was a priestess, but maybe I'm misremembering or the situation was different then. ^^;
In any case, it's alright! Would it be possible for Theodal to be a lesser government official who is incredibly religious (but not a priest), and living in Pajore with her? c: Or are all positions in government strictly tied to the Sanctum. If he cannot be that, then I would like for him to own a bookshop in Pajore. heart (Edited because I just thought it would be easier and more preferable for him to just own a bookshop, so ignore this question~ Cx)
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Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2017 2:28 pm
I have edited her history so that Theodall is the owner of a local bookshop in Pajore and she was raised by him there. No Sanctum relation. c:
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Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2017 12:27 pm
Now that her history has been sorted out I just have a few questions for now. ^.^ With Theodall being a bookstore owner now, what is the pull for her to be incredibly religious? Is Theodall overly religion himself so it was raised with her? Or is it something she found herself for other reasons? (All Yaeli are religious to some extent but it seems like she is very much so.) Can you explain her birth parents a little more? Were both of her parents of importance? Why didn't the mother take her in as her own if the father couldn't keep her? Why couldn't the father keep her? What were the circumstances regarding her birth that made giving her up the only way?
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Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2017 4:20 pm
That is just how she was raised. He is incredibly religious yes, a Holier Than Thou sort with his nose in the air who believes in rigid adherence to the gods' will and has instilled this in Jacline. He would have taken her to church every sabbath and felt (and conveyed to her as he did) that such education, worship, and attention to faith would help fix the messiness of her past and turn her into a good girl in the eyes of the gods. He has been very strict with her on this.
Her father was wealthy but not a very good man, married for wealth and strategic purposes but really enjoyed his exploits. Her mother was a lover of his that I imagine he lead on for a while but when she became pregnant, he wanted nothing to do with her, wanted his wife not to hear of her, and tried to turn her away, but she was most insistent and her behavior became increasingly erratic/forceful the closer she came to due. I see there being an extended period of tension there where, even after Jacline was first born, her mother would come threatening him, showing up at his house and work, saying she was going to tell everyone everything, who the girl's father was, never leave unless he at least paid to take care of them. Instead he eventually utilized his position to see to it that she was silenced indefinitely (depending on the parameters of the shop culture this could be having her killed for threatening him or just driven forcibly away and made to relocate with threat of worse if she ever showed up again).
In the background I see Theodall and his brother as having always had a tense relationship where Theodall has never approved of his brother's wild and self-serving behavior, but nor did he like his brother's 'crazy' lover, and when it came to drastic measures, he decided to take the girl himself. I think at the time it surprised everyone, including Theodall himself, but he felt compelled to take in this particular child and decided not to question the impulse (do a 'better' job and fix his brother's mess). Whether the mother was secretly murdered or simply forced to disappear 'mysteriously', I saw her as being much more keen on the reputation and pretty things that came with being with Jacline's father and not so much on Jacline herself. When Jacline was an infant she was a tool/threat/bargaining chip, and she was not interested in raising an infant without support, so even if she is still alive somewhere she would not be risking coming back for the girl. As for her father, he wanted nothing to do with the child to begin with, but was fine enough with Theodall adopting her on the down low.
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Posted: Sat Jun 10, 2017 12:23 pm
<3
Heads up to staff I will not be around much on Monday, so if there is anything I can do to help get her ready by sometime tomorrow that would be much appreciated. c:
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Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2017 9:37 am
Per Nilah's instruction I have edited her history to reflect my comments to Kana. Thank you, Nilah! c:
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Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2017 4:01 pm
Hello Lucid! Jacline seems to be pretty solid, but I had a couple of questions for you to just kinda help get some more understanding~ So I understand she is extremely religious and was curious about how she would handle meeting someone who was skeptical about her beliefs. I also am curious about how she views not only the mainland, but also how she views the new area of Belrea. Is she interested in learning more about their culture, beliefs or is she stuck in her own ways completely and just focused on Yael no matter what? (This would also include any reactions / feelings concerning the Elaria + Extremists living on Yael) Is she forever going to be repressed/prudish or do you think there's any possibility for someone to shake up her life one day? This is just curiosity on my part to see if you have any future plans of character development for her. <3 You may not have anything yet which is fine, but I was just curious about how headstrong she is and if anything could ever deter her from her current attitudes. Also, I know that she sees her secret heritage as a goal to overcome (by following a better path than them) but would she ever be jealous of others with a more normal family? Or is she happy with her father figure alone and would never wish for anything else? And would finding out that he is actually her blood change anything between them?
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Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2017 4:24 pm
Jacline has very little respect or time for skeptics. She believes that given their culture, with the faith all around, any Yaeli who has been raised on Yael who doesn't respect/believe in/adhere to the will of the gods is intentionally antagonizing the gods/blasphemous or wholly stupid and lingering around them too long is a bad idea. There might be some exception for those who seem impressionable or capable of being 'saved'/brought around by the truth, but if it doesn't seem like they are ready to listen in any seriousness she will not want to spend much time with them.
She believes the mainland (based on Theodall's words for the most part) is a dangerous place filled with mad men and women, sin, and danger. Mainlanders look different because they are deformed, and leaving the island is incredibly treacherous destined to lead to death. The loss of glow is the first step and a horrible omen. (Jacline sincerely believes the next thing likely to happen after loss of glow is to have one's eyes fall out and pass into a deadly illness. Theodall has told her these things even though he doesn't believe them himself, he just wants her to stay on the island and away from the bad influences of mad and sacrilegious foreigners.) She does not know of Belrea yet (or if she should, her opinion on them would be similar/the same to that of other mainlanders, they are all dangerous foreigners).
The Elaria and extremists are jungle monsters and she would be frightened to even leave Pajore for fear of danger/attack.
She will definitely have someone shake up her life. Cx Jacline is actually a naturally internally passionate girl, predominantly homosexual with a very limited interest in boys. Struggling with the conflict between her physical sexuality and her mental want to refrain from anything of the sort will be a definite part of her character development going forward. Ideally I will find someone to help inspire that passion and conflict in her. <3
She is pretty content actually, or doesn't know better than to be content at the moment. She considers herself blessed to be raised by such a good and stern man and tries desperately to please him, but I may challenge her on this in the future, since Theodall is actually somewhat unhealthily controlling when it comes down to it, and she does not at present realize how different a 'normal' family would be. She understands that her situation is not exactly normal but she also has not been exposed enough to happy family set ups to understand what she's missing. I don't think learning that she's related to him by blood would change anything, though she would initially be very confused about why he had hidden it from her, he would find a way to posture it so that she took him for his word and things went back to the way they were between the two of them with a newfound distaste for her hedonistic father.
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