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 Posted: Fri Mar 24, 2006 6:15 pm
I wrote this a while back.
~No More~
Here I am in the dark
My back against the wall
Dizzy and short of breath
Swaying, afraid to fall
Colors swirl before my eyes
Switching fast, I cannot see
Opening and closing them
It will not let me be
First one step and then another
Moving from my resting place
Blindly reaching as my chest hurts
Tripping in my hesitant haste
Moving closer to the moonlight
Coughing as I feel the flood
Hand across my mouth, it does swipe
Into the night, away with blood
To my knees and then to the ground
As empty tears fall down my face
Trapped in darkness, alone forever
They all crawl down at their own pace
My thoughts all wonder, questions they ask
What happened to me, am I cursed?
Afraid of the answer they disappear
All do fear the very worst
Breathing gets harder and harder
Closing my eyes, it's darker still
As finally I breath no more
Just this way no longer ill...
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Posted: Fri May 12, 2006 7:05 pm
over all you did ok id give you a 6.5 on that though and keep writing
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Posted: Sat May 13, 2006 2:45 pm
Tsukishiro-san I wrote this a while back.
~No More~
Here I am in the dark
My back against the wall
Dizzy and short of breath
Swaying, afraid to fall
Colors swirl before my eyes
Switching fast, I cannot see
Opening and closing them
It will not let me be
First one step and then another
Moving from my resting place
Blindly reaching as my chest hurts
Tripping in my hesitant haste
Moving closer to the moonlight
Coughing as I feel the flood
Hand across my mouth, it does swipe
Into the night, away with blood
To my knees and then to the ground
As empty tears fall down my face
Trapped in darkness, alone forever
They all crawl down at their own pace
My thoughts all wonder, questions they ask
What happened to me, am I cursed?
Afraid of the answer they disappear
All do fear the very worst
Breathing gets harder and harder
Closing my eyes, it's darker still
As finally I breath no more
Just this way no longer ill... 10/10! heart love it.
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