Welcome to Hivestuck! First staff crit inbound!


Right off the bat, it's worth mentioning we already have a troll named Byakko who has a white tiger theme. While we don't discourage multiple trolls to a theme, the name might be confusing. You can check the journal subforum to see what names have already been used.

Character-wise, I'm unclear on how Halley could be around trolls enough to be teased for having vitiligo while also being as feral as she's described in the rest of her profile. That said, mutations far more severe than vitiligo are present on Alternia, to the point where it would be a non-issue to most trolls--especially since it doesn't negatively impact her physical abilities. If she were to be harassed by other trolls, it would more likely be for being a poorly-spoken hermit.

Being "slightly cannibalistic" and "actively hunting other trolls every few weeks," is contradictory. Looting a corpse is one thing, but making a habit of killing people is serial murder. Halley would be imprisoned and culled for it. Everyone on Alternia has weapons training and a lusus of their own. It's also worth noting that Halley will be starting out as a child. The likelihood of regularly taking down trolls without Halley or her lusus dying in the process is slim to none.

How well-socialized is Halley? It sounds like she rarely leaves the forest, or at least never has the need to. What would prompt her to get out in society? Does she enjoy the company of others, or is it more of a chore? What types of people does she befriend?

On a similar note, I'd also like to hear more about Halley's intuition. What in her life has helped it develop to be as accurate as it is? I'd imagine living in the woods gives her a pretty good sense for physical danger, but in what ways does she read people?

How does Halley's arrogance play against her blood color? She seems aware of the hemospectrum and what it means for her as a lowblood. If she's at odds with someone in a fight she can't win, say a physically stronger highblood, how does she react?

Halley's "suspicious" flaw isn't reading as a flaw, since it "usually pays off." Beyond that it seems to have a lot of overlap with her "stubborn" flaw where she ignores logic in favor of going with a gut feeling.

In RP, children have to be escorted by their lusii. To that end, how does TigerMom get along in society?