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Posted: Thu Dec 29, 2016 3:03 pm
Name: Joleen Age: 24 Sex: Female Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual Weyr: High Reaches Weyr Rider Rank: Greenrider Previous Rank/Craft: Journeyman (woman) Harper Physical Description: Joleen has long brown hair that she has difficulty controlling. She often has to brush it back out of her eyes or ends stick up where they ought not to. Her eyes are brown, she freckles. She's thin and short, her hands are nimble but calloused from playing guitar. Personality: Joleen has always been studious, even as a young girl. Being quick to learn, and having easily picked up the teaching tunes the hold harper was teaching the children over at Trine Hold. She quickly became one of the journeyman harper's favorites. Even as a young girl, however, she was always in a rush to get things done. She wants to reach the goal as soon as she starts a project, causing her to be rather slap-dash. She'll leave one thing if it isn't finished in the amount of time she's set and start on the next project. She sets goals to be done by a certain date, and when she fails to reach the goal, she leaves the current project and starts a new one. Joleen usually returns, in time, to her original project.
Joleen is not the nicest person. She tends to be independent; she wants to be left alone, she doesn't want pity, she doesn't want help. She's not above bribing people into leaving her alone if they get too obnoxious. Not quite antisocial, Joleen has few friends and fewer enemies (according to her, anyway). She attempts to keep herself hidden in crowds and her head down unless she's teaching or spending time with her beloved Hyweth.
Joleen avoids talking much in front of other people. It isn't that she's unable to; she's wonderful at speaking, she simply doesn't like to. She prefers to observe and convey feelings with actions rather than words.
Around children, she's a completely different person. Or almost. The grudgingly gregarious nature she had as a candidate and a younger harper shows itself. She is gentle with weyr brats and (certain) candidates than most of the surrounding people in the Weyr. She extends this gentleness, this love, to her dragon. Her social life is thus most active when he is near children. Her voice becomes gentler, and she'll tell stories of how Pern was long ago. She may be only twenty four turns old, but the young woman is well read from having spent many years in the Harper Hall. She feels that by teaching and inspiring children, she can somehow make up for her past failures.
This dragonrider, despite usual harper reputation, does not seem to know how to handle romantic advances. She finds love desirable, and she hopes to find the person for her eventually, but like the hopes she had while she was younger, she may start doubting her ability to find them. Failing to reach various small goals she's set for herself has made her self-esteem all but vanish, and at times, feels that people should not wish to be around her. Generally reassured by Hyweth, these thoughts are short lived and usually do not interfere with day-to-day life.
Joleen has never gotten along with (most) candidates, for obvious reasons. They're loud. They're obnoxious. They ask too many sharding questions! In fact, she may attempt to avoid them, if at all possible. History:
History: Joleen, rider of green Hyweth, was once Journeyman Joleen, of the Harper Hall; she was born a holder in Highreaches, but was quick in her lessons delivered by a hold-harper. The harper in question saw the girl's potential, and a few turns afterward, took the then twelve turn old girl to the Hall where she was bundled with other apprentices. Her initial specialty was singing, and though she tried her hand at various instruments, time after time she came up against enough difficulty to put her more or less off focusing on them. Her skills at playing quickly outstripped her ability to build them, and a lingering wariness of failure led to her searching for other areas of her training to focus on and excel in.
Eventually she realized that what she enjoyed most, what she could actually do, was teach. Old songs, history, singing...of course she could not teach others to make instruments when she could not master it herself, but she had enough knowledge that she could easily begin to specialize as a teacher. And just in time, too. A turn or two later, now an 18-turn-old herself, she was called to walk the tables and become a journeyman.
Succesfully reaching that goal gave her a boost in confidence, and she embraced a chance to move to a nearby hold to teach their children teaching tunes. Enough of that confidence had lingered that when a dragonrider came to call and searched her out a few months later, she went for it. Weyr children needed teaching tunes too, she figured, and with the added chance to impress? Who could pass that up.
Unfortunately, being left standing at her first hatching punctured her ego somewhat. She'd set the goal to impress for herself, and though the candidatemaster made firm that she hadn't failed by not being picked, in her mind she had. The next hatching was nearly a turn later, and now 19, she struggled to see dragonet after dragonet make a choice that wasn't her.
Then, at last (long, long last, she felt!) a small, almost fully buried egg exploded into her new partner.
Mine! You look terrible. Come, we must amend this. I am Hyweth, Joleen, I will make sure you look your best, always. Talents: Joleen has some skill with pipes and guitar. She sings and teaches
DRAGON Name: Hyweth Age: Five Color: Green Size: 26' Physical Description: Physical Description: Awaiting image to describe Personality: Personality: Hey, Hyweth caught you looking at her! She wasn't imagining it, and no, you weren't mistaken. She is the best looking dragon in the Weyr, thank you very much. Taking on traits that are often displayed in the larger dragons maybe more often than greens, this dragon is one vain gal! Truly an understatement, Hyweth knows she could save Pern--if only she wasn't so lazy. At least, that's the impression she likes to pull off. If other dragons think she's a lazy, vain, selfish dragon, they won't bother her so much. Hyweth hates answering questions, but even more than that, she seems to hates responsibility. She certainly doesn't envy golds their positions in life. Truly, Hyweth is an insecure dragon (she's not insecure about her own abilities!) and is prone to strange fears. It will be up to her rider to reassure her. Being a vain dragon, Hyweth is probably not one Joleen would like to take when purchasing new clothes. Oh, the green has fine taste! Exquisite taste. Only--a rider can't expect her dragon to understand that marks aren't always readily available. No, she can't purchase that brocade gather tunic. No, she won't wear it for flying. If Hyweth had her way, Joleen would always be down to her last quarter-mark. The burden of being the best looking dragon in the entire Weyr means that Hyweth must have the best rider in all the Weyr. Hyweth seems to believe that if Joleen is not dressed properly, others will judge her based on her rider's appearance. Like with her rider's appearance, Hyweth is very concerned about her own! Hyweth likes to look her best at all times, so Joleen best be prepared to give her plenty of baths and oilings! Joleen best be careful! If not tactful when concerning Hyweth's feelings; especially when speaking about the dragon's over all appearance, this crimson tends to be hyper emotional. She tends to pose, in attempt to look as best as possible when anyone is near, whether they be dragon or human. When it comes to mates, Hyweth is selfish as they come. She considers herself a great asset to the Weyr, and the one dragon she's interested in (Hatteth) belongs to her. She will not tolerate him participating in others' flights, and will become very angry should he do so. Joleen will have to be watchful during this time, right before a flight, or even after.
Hyweth can be long winded! When addressed by authority, she has the tendency to wrap others in words, perhaps hoping to lose them in the blather. She usually means no, however long it takes him to say it. She does not do well with authority figures. Hyweth would much rather be doing her own thing. She often reminds her rider, that though Joleen considers himself a loner, there's no reason Hyweth should be. Joleen needs to get out there! To meet a handsome man and have him sweep her off her feet. Hyweth will help. Really!
Hyweth does not like being thought of as a nice dragon. She is, invariably, kind to her rider (whom she loves most dearly, but naturally, she will never admit this). She argues, she pokes fun; within her arguing however, is always a spark of affection. People would know if Hyweth didn't like them. She would not bother to even glance their way.
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Posted: Thu Dec 29, 2016 3:49 pm
Hey Thali!
First off, I"m not seeing Hyweth in the transfer thread. If you could fill out the transfer form, including the dragon, I can critique the character. But right now we'll only allow dragonriders for folks who transfer them over (and are waiting on the art) or who have official Echoes of Pern art sent to them.
Sorry about that! I see a couple small things to tweak, but will wait for Hyweth to show up in the transfer thread. gaia_star
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Posted: Thu Dec 29, 2016 5:26 pm
I was going to use the starter pack green, if that's alright? If not, I can totally put her up in the transfer thread! <3
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Posted: Mon Jan 02, 2017 8:21 am
You have a red Hyweth posted in the Transfer Thread. And this individual is the same name with the same rider. You can't use the Starter Pack green for this and yet also have a transferred Hyweth and Joleen coming over. Either remove Hyweth/Joleen transfer, or you'll need to come up with a new name/personality for the Starter Pack Green.
The Transfer Thread isn't just for getting a free dragon. Everything about the transfer is supposed to stay the same -- same name, same rider, same color. The only time a color can change is if it's a non-canon Pern dragon. Then it has to fit on one of the canon colors we offer, sans white or gold. Only non-canon whites can transfer as a white. Only golds can transfer as a gold. I'll try to make that more clear in the Transfer Thread.
As for your girl I see a few things that need adjusting. We don't have a Trine Hold. Now, while I am all for individuals making up their own minor Holds, I also know Trine came from aother shop, so I sort of feel we might want to change that name to something either in our canon or a more original.
I'm also a little confused. You say around children she's really different and good natured and all sort of gentle. But then around candidates she finds them loud, obnoxious, and ask too many questions. I feel like you just summed up in that line what all little children do, so I'm confused on why she'd treat them differently.
Is it that children tend to (usually) listen to authoritative figures and teens/young adults might not? I suspect you might want to change that from Joleen not getting along with most Candidates, and instead turn that to her not getting along with teens. Especially since Candidates make up a spectrum of early teens, older teens, young adults, and even adults well into their twenties.
As for Joleen, I feel like you need to go into what her talent was before she walked the tables. You mention she dabbled in a few different areas, but I can't see the Harper Hall allowing her to walk when she doesn't seem to have found a specialty. In our Pern, individuals can stay an apprentice for life if they just don't have the chops to make journeyman, or can't seem to find their specialty or niche. Additionally, what is it that she plans on teaching? Teaching Songs/History? Music? Singing? A little bit of it all? Given she can't seem to make her own instruments, and only seemed to dabble in various Harper fields, I really don't know where they'd send her if she hadn't already found her place. She'd be competing with other Journeymen, so I do feel like she'd need to have found her niche before making journeyman. Or work hard enough in those areas she struggled in to be well rounded enough where she could teach this- and that- at various Holds and Halls.
Also, her age is all over the map. One says she was 18 turns old when she became journeyman, the other said she was age sixteen. Hyweth is referred to as a gold in a few places. Joleen is also referred to as a man in some places. I assume this profile wasn't finished but just wanted to point that out.
If it's not done, please say WIP somewhere in the title so I know it's not meant to be critiqued. I've also added that to the rules since it's hard for me to tell when a profile is ready to be combed through. gaia_star
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Masterharper Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jan 02, 2017 6:32 pm
Oop. I thought we could use transfers, then I thought we could transfer as a different color. I hadn't edited my intent to make her a transfer instead of a use-starter-pack green. Sorry!
I wasn't done with the profile (work makes writing hard!) but I'm appreciative for your looking through it and pinpointing what needs fixing! <3
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Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2017 8:47 pm
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Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2017 7:42 am
You do need to pick a size for Hyweth. They're listed on the front page. Toss that in and she'll be set.
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Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2017 9:24 am
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Posted: Thu Jan 26, 2017 7:23 am
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