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 Posted: Mon Dec 28, 2015 3:21 pm
 Name: Margaret Marchesi Nickname: Madge. She hates being called Margaret Age: 16 Birthday: April 13th Sign: Aries Gemstone: Diamond Blood Type: B Fav. Food: Broccoli!! Especially beef and broccoli~ Hated Food: Asparagus and brussel sprouts. Bleeeeeh School: Crystal Academy Hobbies: Karate
Madge has been taking lessons since she was little, and she loves it! It's great exercise and a good way to relieve excess energy, frustration, and stress. She loves the feeling of power she gets when she throws a punch or a kick, even if she's just kicking the air. Rock Climbing
She loves to be outdoors, and is forever looking for more climbing buddies. There's just something about the rush that comes from climbing using only what handholds the rock gives her to use and then dancing on the top. When she can't get outside to climb she'll go to one of those indoor places, but it's just not the same. Virtues: Passionate
About nearly everything. Madge is a very tempestuous person. She can get herself excited about almost anything, especially if she can turn it into a competition. One of the only things she can't get excited about at all is math. It's just so boring. She even tries to turn it into an internal competition, but it doesn't always help. Active
Madge is one of those people who hates sitting still. If she can be up and moving doing anything then she's going to be doing it. If she has to sit still, like when she's in class, then she'll likely be bouncing her leg or twirling her pen in her hands or doing just about anything other than sitting still. Even when she's walking with her friends, it's never just a straight walk for her. It's a skip, a jump, a hop, walking backwards, dancing, or even walking in circles around her friends. Flaws: Irresponsible
Except about her electronics, Madge takes a devil-may-care attitude toward most of her belongings. She has a terrible tendency to leave things in places and then wonder what in the world she did with them. She might look for a couple days or so but then she'll usually end up just buying herself a new one. Unless it's electronic. Those, she is insanely protective of. She also doesn't always think before she speaks or does things. If she gets an idea in her head, she'll usually just go for it unless someone stops her.
Unforgiving
Madge holds grudges. For probably way too long. Trust and loyalty is very high on her list of priorities and if someone breaks her trust? She will completely cut them out of her life, and there is very little chance of her ever letting them back in. This is not limited to people she's not related to. When she was fourteen, Madge's parents got a divorce. And while she has no problem with this (mostly because her parents didn't get along anymore), the problem came when her father continuously promised her things and then broke those promises. Now she refuses to even speak to her father. PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION Eyes: Large, round, burgundyish? Hair: Long, brown. Wavy with some braids thrown in for fun. She prefers to wear it down. Face: See senshi ref. Clothes: Crystal Academy student~ But have some more fashion refs anyway 8'D
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Posted: Mon Dec 28, 2015 5:11 pm
 Senshi: DMC Sailor Elodie, Senshi of Softness Challenge: I'm not as soft as I look! Fuku Colour: Black Main Color: Burgundy Secondary Color: Turquoise Fuku: See WIP to the right~ Attacks:Sailor Scout Attack: Soft Space! Elodie creates a burgundy tinted ball of softness around the target as long as they're five feet away or less. It completely surrounds the person and acts as a shield. This ball lasts for 30 seconds or about three strikes from the inside or outside and she can use it three times per battle. If a higher ranked opponent hits the shield, the durability reduces (such as two strikes for a second stage, one strike for a third, etc). Super Sailor Scout Attack: Softly Bound! This turquoise tinted ball of fluffy feeling goodness completely restricts movement for 20 seconds and is a stronger shield than her first attack, it can handle up to six strikes from inside or outside and can be used up to ten feet away. While inside of the ball, if they are an ally of Elodie then they will become re-energized and give them a small strength boost on their next turn for that turn only. If an enemy is trapped within the ball, then they would receive a debuff where they deal less damage on their next turn for that turn only. She can use this twice in a battle. Eternal Sailor Attack: Soft Strings! Elodie shoots burgundy and turquoise colored yarn that bind whatever it's shot at. Legs, arms, weapons. Anything bound in her yarn has the potential damage cut. For example, a normal punch might knock her out but a punch thrown while wrapped in her yarn might only make her dizzy. A sword/other sharp object wrapped up in her yarn wouldn't cut the first couple strikes after being bound. The binding lasts for 30 seconds, and she can use it twice in a battle. The target's player may choose where the yarn actually lands (ie, Elodie aims for leg but target dodges and gets hit in the arm instead).
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Posted: Sat Mar 19, 2016 7:42 pm
hhhhh wow this took me forever to even try and get three attacks written xDD
./distracted by life and stuff
but uh. yes. I'm totally open to any kind of suggestions to fix up her attacks and whatnot. 8'D
Also I'm not quite sure how it works when you get the senshi before you get the civilian >.> Do I just then have to get her civ through customs? ouo
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Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2016 8:52 pm
Hey Strawberri!
Congratulations on winning the Elodie!
I have to admit her favorite food is one of mine too. A wonderful choice!
Overall, Margaret's civi side looks good!
On her senshi side, if you could please link us to the space body you got her name from. Just as a reference if you please!
For her attacks, I am sorry that I must point out they are very almost the same as existing Eternal Sailor Hugbell, Senshi of Comfort.. If it is possible to tweak them a bit, I believe this sphere can be a good deal of fun!
May I suggest that instead of creating a soft landing space, perhaps the attacks create a soft space around a target who is either attacking or in need of healing? (could go either way). Sort of, surrounding them in a cotton ball like effect or yarn to match her sweater. As a base it could either protect someone from an attack or make it hard for one to walk (think waddling with a giant ball around them).
If this does not suit what you had in mind, I will be more than happy to work with you to make Elodie the best she can be. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions or quote me after any changes!
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Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2016 6:44 pm
Thank you!! I was so excited~ And I feel awful for taking so long to get her finished x.x I'm actually not a fan of broccoli x3 but know a couple people who love it~ I added a link for her space body, but it's a big list! She's in there, though :3 Oh no! I had no idea they were so close ;w; I tweaked her attacks to your suggestions, hopefully they're okay now!
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Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2016 8:09 am
Strawberri,
My apologizes for the wait! That link was all we needed. Easy to do a search for the name then!
Now, let's tweak the attacks a bit and get them ready to go!
Sailor Scout Attack:
Here, there are a couple of quick things. How big is the ball? Does it completely surround the person or more like part of the person? And how close does the person need to be for her to use her attack on them? (A typical range for a basic attack is about 5ft give or take a few feet)
The ball is only able to do one simple thing at this stage. Feel free to pick it acting as a shield or providing some sort of pain relief. If you go with the later, please do realize then that there is a chance the ball could still be attacked. Make sure you take into account what happens when someone attacks it.
Also, 5 times is a bit much for a basic level. 3 would be very feasible for either direction you take this one!
Super Attack:
This attack should just be an upgrade of the base attack. Meaning that should the first attack protect someone as a shield, this would be a stronger shield that could take a bit more of a bating. Time and use amounts are perfect.
Eternal Attack:
This is a very cool attack! Creative thinking! I just have one thing. When doing something like this, it is strongly encouraged to include a bit in here that the player of other character has a say in what is wrapped in her yarn so that it does not come off as over powered. You are able to suggest in your posts 'she aimed at the legs' but the player could move and she instead hit his arm (just an example).
Just include a line that explains what is bound is players choice.
If you have any questions, feel free to contact me!
I look forward to seeing the changes! Quote me for another look <3
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Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2016 9:31 pm
No worries :3 I think I hit everything you suggested~ Let me know if I still need to fix anything!
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Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2016 8:14 pm
Strawberri,
Great adjustments! Just a few more tweaks and she will be ready to go! Thank you for putting up with me through all this!
Sailor Attack:
The only bit is the about five strikes. Because of the potentially different strength levels the target could be facing (Base level up to even a 4th stage), five strikes is a bit much. It could be five physical strikes (punch, kick, etc) and then should magic be used against it, the time the ball lasts is cut in proportion to the level of magic used (such as half when attacked by a 3rd stage and goes down the weaker it is. A base attack could be lumped in with the physical strikes)
Super:
This still reads as a different attack from the base. >.< The Restricting movements and wound bleeding throw it off.
What it could be is 'A stronger shield than her first, it can handle up to eight stikes and can re-energizes the target wrapped within the ball allowing them to throw their next punch harder' or something >.<
Again, please make note of the magic levels in the shop. Because this is her super, it could stand up to those of her level or below but anything above will hit harder.
Eternal:
This one looks great!
Let me know if any questions!
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Posted: Fri Apr 15, 2016 4:46 pm
ahh no x3 I'm glad you're being patient with me~ Hopefully I got it right this time xD Let me know if the buff/debuff aspect of her Super is too much and I'll take it out <3
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Posted: Tue Apr 19, 2016 7:13 am
So close!
One little thing on the Super attack! The buff for the ally!
Physical or Magical attack? Also, please state that if it is the next attack they use. Aka, they come out and throw a punch, there is the buff. Or if they don't use the buff, how long does it last before it disappears.
It's one of those things we sadly can't have people walking around collecting buffs. >.<
We should be almost there!
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Posted: Tue Apr 19, 2016 10:48 am
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Posted: Tue Apr 19, 2016 11:51 am
Believe it or not....
You officially no longer have to put up with me! <3
A GM will be by soon for final approval! Congratulations!
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Posted: Thu Apr 21, 2016 9:57 am
Hey, Strawberri! I love her design and am super excited to see Elodie come into play (RP with meeee 8D) so I'll try to make this quick! Her civilian side looks great; for her powered side I just have two things I want to go over! For her super attack, I think allowing an ally to strike back twice as hard with their normal attack might be too strong (if only because she might have an eternal attack whose attack is already very powerful and it might make the magic too lethal); a quick fix to this might be just to give an ally an extra boost of concentration or a small boost of strength! (The debuff is fine!) For her eternal magic, you say that it lasts for ten second, but as long as the yarn doesn't actually restrict movement/imprison someone and is only making contact to have a magical effect, it would be fine to have this last for thirty seconds and still have two uses (or 45 seconds and one use). I just wanted to throw that out there in case you wanted it to be stronger! Please quote me if you have any questions, comments or make any changes and I'll be back as soon as possible!
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Posted: Thu Apr 21, 2016 3:59 pm
Yay 8'D I'll definitely RP with you haha <3 I adjusted the things you suggested, and I'm super excited to be so close to finished with her xDD <3
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Posted: Sat Apr 23, 2016 8:56 pm
8D Looks awesome; have fun!
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