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Name: Amaryllis Arcadia St. Grey

Nickname: Aura

Age: 14

Birthday: May 31

Sign: Gemini

Gemstone: Pearl

Blood Type: AB

Fav. Food: Ginger

Hated Food: Eats just about anything

School: Crystal Academy, on athletic scholarship

Hobbies:

Technovore - Aura is a tech aficionado. She knows the ins-and-outs of most computers and electronic devices. She loves tinkering with objects, even if she doesn't always know what she is doing. If it's broken, she'll fix it and maybe add a few new features in as a bonus too. She has taken a liking to electronic music and she is obsessed with arcade games as well. Aura is rarely found without her headphones.

She's Like the Wind - Aura is athletic and quick. She is on the school's track and field team. Her favorite events involve jumping and she loves the rush she gets when falling. She is also a member of the color guard. Aura can be reckless, however, and has had her fair share of injuries. There is nothing she won't try and Aura never backs down from a challenge.

Can I Keep It? - Aura loves animals of all kinds. She sometimes volunteers at the local animal shelter. She has a natural affinity with animals and can read their behavior. She bonds with any creature that will give her a chance. Aura often takes home wild animals she finds which can get her into trouble.

Virtues:

'Til the Ends of the Earth - Aura has a natural protective instinct. She can be like a mother wolf protecting her pups at times. If she makes a promise to you, she will do anything to keep it. Promises to her are like a sacred oath. It is especially unwise to mess with her twin sister. Aura does not give up on any task easily.

Strength of Body and Mind - Aura has a strong will to match her physical prowess. She is fearless. She doesn't back down when things get tough. She has a particularly strong sense of justice. Aura will not stray from a path she has chosen if she believes it is right.

Tell It Like It Is - Aura is honest and is a poor liar. She knows the truth may be brutal, but it is what it is and nothing can change that. She is sincere in her words and actions. Aura won't stand to be lied to.

Flaws:

Ask Questions Later - Aura can be impulsive. Be it an everyday decision or a fight, she is bound to act first and think later. This can get her into all kinds of trouble. She often needs to be calmed down when things get heated. Aura relies on others for a plan.

Never Let Go - Aura doesn't forget easily. Promises are all well and good, but she can hold a grudge that you don't want to be on the wrong end of. She will also pursue a goal to the extreme and won't stop until she has achieved it, for good or for ill. She can fly into a rage if certain things don't turn out as planned. She is rather childish at times. Aura often holds on to the past in ways that are damaging to her persona.

Burning Out Like a Shooting Star - Aura can be hot-tempered. She lets her emotions get the best of her and her feelings show in her body language. She is over-confident in her own abilities and is often surprised when she fails. Sometimes she can come across as loud or even rude. Aura generally means well, but doesn't always come off that way.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Electric blue, fiery

Hair: White, messy with thin tail, moon rabbit clip to keep out of face

Face: Very expressive and fair-skinned

Clothes: School uniform, but can usually also be found with LED headphones

Hi, Meighei! Welcome to the shop! biggrin You asked, so I'm here to give you a quick review before you submit for stamping! This is nothing official, so if anything here rings false, please feel free to tell me to go to hell. wink

First of all, all of your descriptions for traits are very, very short, and I think that in a lot of cases you would probably benefit from being a bit more in-depth. In the next few paragraphs, I'm going to go through each of your traits one by one and let you know my thoughts on them.

Hobbies

Technovore - I would personally like more explanation for how a fourteen-year-old has become an expert-level hacker. How did Wolfie first get into computers, and how much time does she devote to learning about them? Is she a collector who likes having the latest gadgets, or is she more of a tinkerer who likes taking things apart and putting them back together (better/faster/stronger?) I'm also curious about what systems she hacks her way into and why, as software knowledge and hardware knowledge are two different spheres of expertise, and hacking is typically a criminal activity. Is this part of her Kleptomania?

She's like the Wind - What specific track and field events are Wolfie's favorites?

Can I Keep It? - I'm having trouble buying a fourteen-year-old as an expert handler working on difficult cases without any background - what is Wolfie's experience with animals that justifies her being so skilled at such a young age? Did she learn from a parent, start volunteering very young, have a lot of pets? Is she self-taught?

Virtues

'Til the Ends of the Earth - How does Wolfie's protective instinct manifest? How does she decide who's worth protecting? Is it just her sister, or is it any of her friends, or anyone she perceives as being the underdog, or just anyone, period? Is she the kind of friend who will speak up when people are being bullied? Does she get into physical altercations to defend her friends? Is she selfless? Generous? Is she always a helpful person, or only when someone close to her is involved in interpersonal drama?

Strength of Body and Mind - Does Wolfie make her decisions after a lot of thought, or does she jump to conclusions? Does she stand by her beliefs and try to impress them onto others, or just keep them to herself? Is she a persuasive person? And what does it take to make her change her mind?

Tell it Like it Is - this is reading more like a flaw right now, and I think that you may want to split it up and use her honesty as a virtue and her bluntness as a flaw. What about Wolfie's brutal honesty is something that people could admire about her? Maybe they respect that she is always sincere, that her opinions may be harsh but she never tells people lies to boost their own egos, and that her praise is always genuine?

Flaws

Ask Questions Later - This is short, but it looks workable to me. smile

Never Forgotten - I don't understand what you mean by "Promises are all well and good," and you may want to elaborate to make it clearer, or else change the sentence. How does Wolfie decide to hold a grudge? What form do her grudges take? Is she verbally cruel, does she give people the cold shoulder, or is she actively destructive towards people she dislikes? If so, what form does her destruction take?

Kleptomania - Mental illnesses are not flaws. My recommendation is to replace this with "blunt" and work this into her hobbies as something like "Borrowing" or "collecting".

Senshi Stuff

You might want to pick a single animal for her to summon per stage, or else a limited list per stage, but staff might have a different opinion.

Sailor Scout Attack What kind of damage does her summons inflict? Is it physical or simply sensational? Lasting or temporary? How severe is the damage?

Super Sailor Scout Attack Same questions as above.

Eternal Sailor Attack Senshi attacks can't summon weapons sad But you can probably get around this by changing your wording - "Natural defenses", maybe?

Anyway, you've got some really great ideas here, but in my opinion you would benefit from some elaboration! This profile is really bare-bones and adding more details would really flesh out your character more.

Changed sphere to hares and fixed powers.

Summons was deemed a bit too broad and is the name for a power knights receive, so it was changed. I talked to our senshi of rabbits and the sphere is good by her as long as the powers don't overlap. I thought hares would be a good sphere for her as I wanted to include her love of animals and her personality into her sphere. (The hare is overconfident just like her!)

The attacks are similar to what they were when I started her quest. Her twin has a defensive attack so I wanted an offensive attack for this girl. Let's see.

Maybe a charging hare for the first attack that knocks you down. More speed than strength. Perhaps the hare bites in the super form for a bit stronger of a hit. I am not sure about eternal, but I thought the idea of a mount was something that I hadn't seen done here yet.

Maybe she takes on an aspect of the hare itself and she punches with a giant paw or something like that?

I like where this is going too!

I modified the attacks above. Take a look?

Totally magical. I can cut that part out though as it may be confusing.

I thought the usages were determined by stage and the current stage attack was useable once and then previous stages could be used more than once. I think I read that somewhere, maybe?