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 Posted: Sun Nov 29, 2015 5:39 am
Due to the nature of this guild's profile area being different in that everyone must post their profile in the profile approval area and not make it in its own thread, this thread is here for applicants to discuss with mods about the nature of their profiles. Just because your characters are demigods or of another race, not everything will slide by as in the end, they are all humans to which most of their abilities take a strain out on them. That means no over the top absurdities will be approved, but if you feel there's a proper argument to be presented, quote the mods who reviewed your profile and look for ways it can be improved. Vice versa, the mod can quote you here and begin discussing ways for you to change the profile for the better.
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Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2015 6:17 pm
Hey Bear, I understand what you're trying to say about Dante's "Versatility" thing and it makes sense. I almost forgot about how good Luke was with a sword until you reminded me (its been a while since I've read the original series...) But yeah, I like your idea of having him being able to learn skills faster and so on. However, I wouldn't go as far as calling it "The Ultimate Man Perk" but I don't know what to call it for Dante's case...
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Bear Necessity Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2015 7:05 pm
Rebel the DESTROYA Hey Bear, I understand what you're trying to say about Dante's "Versatility" thing and it makes sense. I almost forgot about how good Luke was with a sword until you reminded me (its been a while since I've read the original series...) But yeah, I like your idea of having him being able to learn skills faster and so on. However, I wouldn't go as far as calling it "The Ultimate Man Perk" but I don't know what to call it for Dante's case... To be fair the Ultimate Man Perm was just my example of a tighter/somewhat broad power. A similar circumstance if you will. For Dante it would be something that was Aptitude based for a name - something like "Superhuman Aptitude" for a power to do with learning skills quickly and mastering them faster than normal. You could even add similar powers for like Precognitive Aptitude (being able to foresee things you would be good at) or even skill sharing etc.
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Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2015 8:11 pm
Bear Necessity Rebel the DESTROYA Hey Bear, I understand what you're trying to say about Dante's "Versatility" thing and it makes sense. I almost forgot about how good Luke was with a sword until you reminded me (its been a while since I've read the original series...) But yeah, I like your idea of having him being able to learn skills faster and so on. However, I wouldn't go as far as calling it "The Ultimate Man Perk" but I don't know what to call it for Dante's case... To be fair the Ultimate Man Perm was just my example of a tighter/somewhat broad power. A similar circumstance if you will. For Dante it would be something that was Aptitude based for a name - something like "Superhuman Aptitude" for a power to do with learning skills quickly and mastering them faster than normal. You could even add similar powers for like Precognitive Aptitude (being able to foresee things you would be good at) or even skill sharing etc. Oh okay, I gets you. I'll edit asap.
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Posted: Sun Dec 27, 2015 7:33 am
Hey Bear, I edited Dante's profile with your suggested changes and I believe its ready for re-evaluation. Oh and I also added one more power that I thought would make sense for a child of Hermes to have.
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Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2016 4:27 am
DoomedAngelForgivenDemon You still haven't replied or anything.
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Bear Necessity Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2016 4:08 pm
Hey Bear, I was wondering if we could go over my profile. I've been having some trouble trying to add some stuff to it.
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Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2016 12:49 pm
Tsuki-chan4 Hey Tsuki, How do? There are quite a few things I want to work through with your profile so I wonna take it in like... stages... Is that okay? If you want me to list everything just let me know in your next reply and I will go for it. smile The first thing I want to talk about is your Lineage. Lineage is about if you are a Demigod or a Legacy or even a Demigod and a Legacy. It's about Immortals that YOUR character is directly related to your mortal bloodline. It's not about who your divine parent is related to. Otherwise... We need to have a bit of a long list, does that make sense? A good example is Frank Zhang who is the Son of Mars and a Legacy of Poseidon. Your weight is a little weird too considering if you look: Here. It's almost like... I dunno... You would have to have a body/fat ratio equivlent to Bruce Lee or something. You may wonna look at this. The last thing I'm going to mention in this post and at this stage is your notable features. You can't say you don;t have notable features and then list a bunch of notable features... Like... Wut? Reword that if I were you.
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Bear Necessity Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 11:22 am
Sure I'll be willing to work with you on my profile because I'm interested in hearing your opinions. I hope you respect that I may disagree with some of your ideas for my character though.
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Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 11:49 am
GracefulRose_Knight Sure I'll be willing to work with you on my profile because I'm interested in hearing your opinions. I hope you respect that I may disagree with some of your ideas for my character though. That's fine, I don't think that it should be too like "out there". They should be pretty good ideas, I think maybe some edits here and there to make your profile seem a little more... I dunno... developed and interesting because as of right now it's kind of sparse and doesn't seem to reflect your ability. We'll take it in stages if you'd like. smile - Your assignment would be Cabin Nineteen: Tyche's Children - I'd advise capitalizing the word "Goddess" due to it being a proper noun in this sense, it's almost like a race, like when you write Humans. - Would that weight work with your body type. Muscle is quite heavy. Candour is kinda built like... I'd say Vin Diesel... but taller. That's why he weighs so much. Wouldn't your character also kind of weigh more than expected. Does that make sense? Whatcha think so far?
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Bear Necessity Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 11:59 am
Bear Necessity GracefulRose_Knight Sure I'll be willing to work with you on my profile because I'm interested in hearing your opinions. I hope you respect that I may disagree with some of your ideas for my character though. That's fine, I don't think that it should be too like "out there". They should be pretty good ideas, I think maybe some edits here and there to make your profile seem a little more... I dunno... developed and interesting because as of right now it's kind of sparse and doesn't seem to reflect your ability. We'll take it in stages if you'd like. smile - Your assignment would be Cabin Nineteen: Tyche's Children - I'd advise capitalizing the word "Goddess" due to it being a proper noun in this sense, it's almost like a race, like when you write Humans. - Would that weight work with your body type. Muscle is quite heavy. Candour is kinda built like... I'd say Vin Diesel... but taller. That's why he weighs so much. Wouldn't your character also kind of weigh more than expected. Does that make sense? Whatcha think so far? I can do that but I think my weight is appropriate considering that the actor's actual weight is ten pounds less than what I put and the actor has pretty good muscle tone already. He's just thin instead of bulky.
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Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 12:14 pm
GracefulRose_Knight I can do that but I think my weight is appropriate considering that the actors actual weight is ten pounds less than what I put and the actor has pretty good muscle tone. He's just thin as well instead of bulky. He isn't really that muscular from what I'm seeing (Google'd). I suppose it works if you want him to just be kind of skinny. Fair enough. I can live with that, his definition literally comes from him being quite scrawny. - As for Ambidextrous, I'm not sure if you would be as the Goddess of Luck's son. I made an announcement about this. You can check it out if you like. I'd also like just put what hand your stronger with. I know we made a joke in the format but... Y'know... This profile is to advertise you to people. - Could you not put your tattoos on your notable features as a paragraph? There are a lot of sections I think you could expand like this. Look at the other approved profiles to see what you can take away from them. - You need to explain your powers at the moment there is nowhere near enough description. Again, if you look at the profiles before yours you could look good and really show off your skills in your profile. I always think of a profile as a bit of an advert, like a lonely hearts column. So I would show off if I were you. There are a couple of powers I would work on too but... Yeah... I wonna see how you expand on them first before offering up alternatives.
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Bear Necessity Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 1:02 pm
Bear Necessity GracefulRose_Knight I can do that but I think my weight is appropriate considering that the actors actual weight is ten pounds less than what I put and the actor has pretty good muscle tone. He's just thin as well instead of bulky. He isn't really that muscular from what I'm seeing (Google'd). I suppose it works if you want him to just be kind of skinny. Fair enough. I can live with that, his definition literally comes from him being quite scrawny. - As for Ambidextrous, I'm not sure if you would be as the Goddess of Luck's son. I made an announcement about this. You can check it out if you like. I'd also like just put what hand your stronger with. I know we made a joke in the format but... Y'know... This profile is to advertise you to people. - Could you not put your tattoos on your notable features as a paragraph? There are a lot of sections I think you could expand like this. Look at the other approved profiles to see what you can take away from them. - You need to explain your powers at the moment there is nowhere near enough description. Again, if you look at the profiles before yours you could look good and really show off your skills in your profile. I always think of a profile as a bit of an advert, like a lonely hearts column. So I would show off if I were you. There are a couple of powers I would work on too but... Yeah... I wonna see how you expand on them first before offering up alternatives. Ok. I've made the edits as best as I could so far. Is there anything else?
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Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 1:54 pm
GracefulRose_Knight Ok. I've made the edits as best as I could so far. Is there anything else? A lot of your profile could still be developed. Try and expand on some of your single sentence areas, explain why they are a good thing to have as part of your persona. Describe why it's a bad thing to have in your persona. C'mon, you don't honestly think that the profile couldn't be improved do you? I know it's effort but it's also effort for me to help you. So let's not be like lazy, let's do the best we can.
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Bear Necessity Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 2:10 pm
Bear Necessity GracefulRose_Knight Ok. I've made the edits as best as I could so far. Is there anything else? A lot of your profile could still be developed. Try and expand on some of your single sentence areas, explain why they are a good thing to have as part of your persona. Describe why it's a bad thing to have in your persona. C'mon, you don't honestly think that the profile couldn't be improved do you? I know it's effort but it's also effort for me to help you. So let's not be like lazy, let's do the best we can. Ok, I know you are part of the crew and all but you don't have to be rude about it. I only edited what you told me to. If you aren't specific with what you want then more than likely my profile won't satisfy you. I haven't roleplayed in a long time because all the guilds I was in became inactive so I'm a little rusty, so can you please not drill me on minor detail? Also what fun is it to spill everything about the character before the roleplay? There won't be any surprises. I'll add more detail because you want me to and because I want to show you that you are wrong to assume that I'm just being lazy. I worked on that profile for over an hour which is ridiculous.
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