(Left and Right descriptions are from the point of view of the person looking at the drawing)
Race: Litch
~How they feel about their Race: Yihad doesn't really mind hus race much. Hu is a litch, and that is perfectly fine. Yihad does wish hu knew who hus parents and family were though, even if hu isn't the only one feeling that way. If some info on hus family popped up, hu would pursue that knowledge in order to know more about them and therefore more about hus role in the litch society. Other than that hu wouldn't go looking for it. Hu has no complaints about the litch tenants of litch society, and even follows them.
~How they feel about other Races: Hu is perfectly fine with other races. Hu accepts that fact about being a nightmare; there are other types of nightmares and that is okay. However, hu has a hard time reading other races social cues, so hu tends to try hus hardest to not socialize with them if hu does not have to.
Gender: Androgynous
Starting Stage: Junior
Body Appearance
Number of their Body type Base: O
Racial Features: Hu has noticeable rot, especially on the Right rib where the hole on the side of his shirt is. Not too much though. Only enough to make it noticeable. The color of hus eye on the left side is red, and the right side is blue (As mentioned in the description on the eyes.)
Hair: The sides are shaved off and the top of the head is like an afro, like in this picture. Hus hair color is a light brown.
Eyes: The right eye is light blue, while the left eye crimson red. Hu wears eyeliner. Note!* Sorry for the eyes looking so bad! I couldn't seem to get the sclera to look right.
Skin: Light red, slight gray tint perhaps?
Ears: The right ear has three silver colored earrings, while the left ear has a chip out of it.
Nails: Long, sharp, and painted black
Clothes Appearance
Neck: Spiked choker necklace
Outer Shirt: A loose fitting and glaucous blue colored long sleeve shirt with the left side's sleeve being looser than the right side. There are multiple holes in the shirt, with the main hole revealing ribs on right side of shirt. If the color of the shirt seems to clash too much, the artist may change the color to make it more suitable. Maybe a darker blue, black or grey would be a better choice?
Under Shirt: Slightly dark red t-shirt with multiple holes with one hole revealing ribs on right side.
Pants: Dark blue skinny jeans with multiple holes, with one hole on the left knee.
Shoes: Red Converses with words and drawings all over the shoes. The right tongue of the shoe is in front of the pants, while the left side is hidden behind the pants. The drawings on the shoes are artist's choice.
Personality
Zodiac Sign: Aether, The Staff
~A general description of their personality: Yihad is very scientific and logical. Hu is a huge nerd when it comes to science and science fiction, but due to hum being so anti-social hu tends to just stay to humself, keeping hus interests and obsessions to humself. If hu does end up talking with others, hu tends to be rather reserved about said interests unless the other nightmare brings it up. Hus perfectionist side is only visible to the other nightmares through hus constant fixing of his papers to align with the desk or making sure his bag is neatly organized to extreme standards, basic nit picky stuff like that. It is hard to find hum socializing with other nightmares if hu does not have to. Hu would prefer a book to the company of another, but hu does find it easier to socialize with other litches than with other races of nightmares. The only way to seemingly get to hum is through school projects or forcing yourself upon hum.
~Positive Traits
Intelligent: Hu has the brains to learn complex matters, and is able to use this intelligence to solve problems. Hu will even think outside of the box per say, so solving everyday problems is no biggy for hum.
Curious: Hus mind will lead hum where no nightmare has dared to think before. Hu will always question the facts until hu finds an answer hu thinks fits. This also is shown in hus science journals, constantly asking questions about everything around hum.
Analytical: Logic is how hu describes the world around hum. Due to hum being curious, hu will try to think logically about what hu does not understand. This trait as well can be seen in hus science journals, hum making observations that are most of the time logic based.
~Negative Traits
Isolated/Anti-Social: Due to being an orphan and a litch, hu hasn't had the easiest time getting out of hus shell. Hu prefers hus books to other nightmares, so that is where you can usually find hum. When hu is out in public, most of the time hu will remain quiet and ignore everyone unless hu has to talk to get something done, like talking to the cashier to pay for items. However, it is easier for hum to get along with a litch than another race.
Obsessive: When hu finds something hu likes, hu likes to focus any talking that hu does on that subject, making hum hard to converse with the disinterested. A few of these subjects and interests include hus liking for science fiction books, science experiments, and drawing realistically for science observations in his journals.
Perfectionist: Everything has to be as good as it can be. If a book has too many noticeable grammar issues, hu will have to put it down and take a few deep breaths before attempting to read it some more. This is to help him to not write in the correct wording or spelling if it is a text book or library book hu cannot write in without getting in trouble. Hu usually turns assignments in right at the last minute because hu was spending so much time just to make it perfect. Hu also has to have hus day run exactly according to plan, and if it isn't what hu expected it will make hum very nervous.
~General hobbies, abilities, likes and dislikes: Hus hobbies include reading science fiction and scientific novels, making observations in hus science journals, and drawing. Abilities of hus include being able to write, drawing realistically, and being able to study with ease. Hu likes problem-solving, theories, new ideas, and making scientific observations. Hu dislikes limitations, feeling incompetent, and crowds of nightmares.
~What are they motivated by?: Yihad is motivated by the will to know more about the world around hum and the desire to expand upon that knowledge. Science is what hu is passionate about, and hu isn't about to turn back now.
Academy House: Enoch
~How their life at the Academy is likely to affect their personality: Yihad will become less isolated overtime as hu slowly starts to socialize with others and broaden hus interests so hu can get along with others, even working on studying other race's social cues so hu can understand them better. However, it won't be easy. For a while hu will struggle with being around others, but over time hu will start to become better around others as hu starts to find a select few hu feels hu can trust.
~How they fit into their Academy House: Yihad likes to search for knowledge, always looking for everything hu can when it comes to science. Knowledge and learning is very important to hum, and hu feels that hu can learn more by going out and searching for answers.
Whether or not non-staff can critique your post: Yes
Posted: Thu Aug 20, 2015 2:31 pm
Backstory
Yihad has never known anyone to be hus parents, since hu was an orphan from a soul stone. Due to this, hu didn't know for the longest time who hu was exactly. Hu knew hu was a Litch and an androgynous, but nothing else. Despite hus caregivers trying hard to help hum, it just didn't click for Yihad. Hus anti-social tendencies also did not help in the slightest. Hu didn't make any friends or socialize with the other nightmares very much. Hu didn't even socialize with hus care takers much despite them trying to help hum, only going to them when hu needed to. This was mostly because hu found it hard to trust others, mostly from hus problem of understanding social cues.
However, after learning about science from a class experiment, hu began to dive nose first into this amazing subject to help hum cope with being alone with no friends or family. It wasn't long before hu was a science nerd to behold, even starting to do hus own science journals to write and draw all hus observations down. Despite all this, hu seemed to become even more isolated, to the point hu would stay to hus books more than hus fellow class mates.
Future
As Yihad meets new people, hu will begin to confront the conflict inside humself, hus isolation after struggling with others as a young one. Slowly but surely hu will begin to show improvements with hus socializing capabilities, and even start to make friends. Yihad will then finally realize that friends are more important than scientific observations, becoming more social by the day with hus new found friends. Most of this growth will start with hum doing a school project with another nightmare and getting to know them more overtime, or someone forcing their way into hus life somehow, by like a simple conversation about similar interests, and hum growing to be more social due to hus new experiences. As this process comes along, hu will slowly start to have a small desire to socialize, especially with those who have helped hum along the way.
Your Nightmare has just woken up on a day where they have class. What is their morning ritual? How do they get ready?
Yihad's alarm began to ring at exactly 6:45, hus body stirring in bed before sitting up and reaching over to turn off the alarm. Once hu was sure it was off and not going to play again later, the Litch stretched hus arms up in the air before pulling the covers off of humself. Once out, Yihad went over to hus daily schedule and began to read it aloud. Hu found it easier to understand things when he just woke up if hu read them out loud ", Things to do before classes start for the day, make bed, get dressed, find something healthy for breakfast, grab school bag, go to the cafe to get a drink to reward yourself for your great test scores on Friday's math test, then head to class."
Setting the book down, hu went over to hus bed and began to make it, making sure there wasn't even a wrinkle in it. Yihad even fluffed up the pillows, wanting to make the bed look nice and perfect. The Litch then went over to hus closet, deciding on hus cleanest outfit. Sure it wasn't hus usual outfit, but hu decided that today hu should look nice. Getting changed finally, Yihad went to the cupboards to find a nutritious breakfast granola bar, putting it in the pockets of hus pants before going over to hus backpack hu filled the night before a putting it on hus back. Now to head out for that special drink, a caramel and vanilla latte before heading to class. Surely today would be a great day.
As hu made it to the coffee shop, a realization came to hum on how crowded the place was. All sorts of other nightmares talking in line or at their tables with others. Oh no, what was hu going to do? Being around ohers made hum nervous, as it was hard for hum to pick onto social cues at all. What if they were talking badly about hum? What would hu do? Should hu leave and come back later? No, hu planned on getting this latte and hu was going to get it! This was to be hus treat for a test well done after all.
Stepping into the shop, hu got in line and put hus hoodie up, ignoring anyone and everyone until hu got to the counter to order hus drink. After paying the lady and getting hus number order, hu went over to the one spot in the coffee shop without anyone there and sat down, taking out hus text book for biology and beginning to read it until hus number was called. As quickly as hu could, hu got up and got his order, rushing out the door with a sigh. That could of gone better, but at least no one seemed to of been talking badly about hum or at all. Perhaps hu had overreacted, but hu just didn't know what to do around others. It was better to ignore everyone than to make a fool of himself from talking to them, right? After all, science was always more important than making a possible friend.
Posted: Thu Aug 20, 2015 5:03 pm
Staff Crit~
Racial Feelings:
- Since they are curious about where they came from are they interested in trying to look through records and finding out if they have any living family? Or does that not interest them? Your sentence about family is confusing and I'm not sure what their intention is on that front.
Appearance:
- Is the rot noticeable through the hole in their shirt? Because otherwise it wouldn't show at all if it's not concentrated on the side of their body. If it's more centralized it wouldn't show. Please clarify where exactly on the ribs the rot is.
Personality:
- Please write a short overview of their personality as a whole along with the trait break down.
- Either the Obsessive trait or the Perfectionist trait need to be toned down a bit or possibly combined and another negative trait used all together. The obsessive trait would not allow the perfectionist to put down a book with errors, especially if it were on a subject that interested them or for a school assignment, while the perfectionist would obsess over fixing the errors, and have to do them even if they had to do it on another sheet of paper.
- I understand that some of this development would come about through RP, but there is nothing that stands out that would allow this character to branch out to become more social, and it seems the only way they would become social is if they were forced into it.
Backstory:
- Being such an independent child, what would make them want to reach out and have friends? They're already isolated and anti-social so are they also lonely which would lead to the desire to try to reach out and have friends? Currently being so self reliant I don't see the tipping point for socialization.
To help point out the changes I made, check out the spoiler below. Sorry for the rant!
Racial Feelings:
- Under How they feel about their race; "Yihad does wish hu knew who hus parents and family were though, even if the other nightmares around hum are experiencing the same longing. If some info on hus family popped up, hu would pursue that knowledge in order to know more about them and therefore more about hus role in the litch society."
Where should I put the bit on his family if it shouldn't be in how he feels about his race? Perhaps write a small section on family?
Appearance:
- In Body Appearance, under Racial Features; "Hu has noticeable rot, especially on the Right rib where the hole on the side of his shirt is."
Personality:
- The overview was there, but it was under a different name, A general description of their personality and how they see the world, which was underneath General hobbies, abilities, likes and dislikes. I have now moved it to the top of Personality, underneath their zodiac sign, and renamed it to A general description of their personality.
"Yihad is very scientific and logical. Hu is a huge nerd when it comes to science and science fiction, but due to hum being so anti-social hu tends to just stay to humself, keeping hus interests and obsessions to humself. If hu does end up talking with others, hu tends to be rather reserved about said interests unless the other nightmare brings it up. Hus perfectionist side is only visible to the other nightmares through hus constant fixing of his papers to align with the desk or making sure his bag is neatly organized to extreme standards, basic nit picky stuff like that. It is hard to find hum socializing with other nightmares if hu does not have to. Hu would prefer a book to the company of another, but hu does find it easier to socialize with other litches than with other races of nightmares. The only way to seemingly get to hum is through school projects or forcing yourself upon hum."
- Found under Negative Traits, Perfectionist.
"If a book has too many noticeable grammar issues, hu will have to put it down and take a few deep breaths before attempting to read it some more. This is to help him to not write in the correct wording or spelling if it is a text book or library book hu cannot write in without getting in trouble."
Rewrote Perfectionist trait to add a bit to not conflict with obsessive.
Backstory:
- I understand that some of this development would come about through RP, but there is nothing that stands out that would allow this character to branch out to become more social, and it seems the only way they would become social is if they were forced into it.
- Being such an independent child, what would make them want to reach out and have friends? They're already isolated and anti-social so are they also lonely which would lead to the desire to try to reach out and have friends? Currently being so self reliant I don't see the tipping point for socialization.
There is no drive for him to become social when he starts out. That is why roleplaying is an important part of hum becoming social overtime. From experience and seeing it time and time again over generations of people, male, female, and genderfluid, one way to become more social is to be "forced" into it. Being paired up for a school project and slowly getting to know the person, someone sitting by you at the lunch table and making sure you know that they care about you. Eventually you start to gain a bit of confidence, going to a club and sitting in the back, or sitting near that kid during class, the one who showed you that they cared about you. If Yihad does become a nightmare, hu won't have the ambition to be social unless it is for projects or going to someone when hu needs help with something. With the help of others though hu will become more social. Section below for more details.
- Under Backstory; "Despite hus caregivers trying hard to help hum, it just didn't click for Yihad. Hus anti-social tendencies also did not help in the slightest. Hu didn't make any friends or socialize with the other nightmares very much. Hu didn't even socialize with hus care takers much despite them trying to help hum, only going to them when hu needed to. This was mostly because hu found it hard to trust others, mostly from hus problem of understanding social cues."
Under Future; "Most of this growth will start with hum doing a school project with another nightmare and getting to know them more overtime, or someone forcing their way into hus life somehow, by like a simple conversation about similar interests, and hum growing to be more social due to hus new experiences. As this process comes along, hu will slowly start to have a small desire to socialize, especially with those who have helped hum along the way."
Roleplays are already planned with other people for if Yihad ever becomes a nightmare. There is people willing to help with this process mentioned above to help hum become more social. It does take time, but not just those who want to roleplay their nightmares with hum, but I as well are willing to help Yihad to grow to hus fullest potential.
If any of the issues that were mentioned to me are a problem still, please notify me so I can try to further fix them.
"Yihad does wish hu knew who hus parents and family were though, even if the other nightmares around hum are experiencing the same longing. If some info on hus family popped up, hu would pursue that knowledge in order to know more about them and therefore more about hus role in the litch society."
- The first sentence is incomplete and doesn't make any sense. Do you mean "even if the other orphans around hum 'aren't' experiencing the same longing?" I also don't understand where they would get this impression. Many of the other kids around them will have the same feelings of wishing they knew where they come from.
- Where are they going to get this information? Are they actively going to look for it, because that is the only way they're going to have it "pop" up is if they went looking themselves. If they don't look for it themselves it is very unlikely they would ever encounter anything that might lead them to their family.
VerityHattress
Posted: Sun Aug 23, 2015 11:44 pm
Updated to here.
-How they feel about their Race has gone through a few changes to make more sense and to answer previous questions.
"Yihad doesn't really mind hus race much. Hu is a litch, and that is perfectly fine. Yihad does wish hu knew who hus parents and family were though, even if hu isn't the only one feeling that way. If some info on hus family popped up, hu would pursue that knowledge in order to know more about them and therefore more about hus role in the litch society. Other than that hu wouldn't go looking for it. Hu has no complaints about the litch tenants of litch society, and even follows them."
