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Name: Pepper Ann Halliburton

Nickname: Pep, Peppy

Age: 18

Birthday: 2/13/1997

Sign: Aquarius

Gemstone: Amethyst

Blood Type: A+

Fav. Food: Bologna + miracle whip sandwiches.

Hated Food: Scallops.

School: Destiny City University

Hobbies:

Drying & pressing flowers: Pepper dries flowers in her spare time. She has a small collection of flower presses and she enjoys framing them as gifts or decoration in her own studio apartment. She's learning how to make small keychains and other crafts out of the flowers that she presses, but for now her other great joy is...

Papermaking: Pepper uses the flowers she presses and dries to make hand-crafted paper. This paper is given away to friends, sold at small specialty stores, or used to pen letters to friends.

Virtues:

Industrious: A busy Pepper is a happy Pepper, and this young lady loves to stay busy. Her hobbies are of utmost importance to her, and all of her free time is spent indulging in them. She is very mindful of duties that she is given and will follow orders to a tee until the task at hand is completed. As long as she feels like she's accomplishing something, Pepper is thrilled; she finds pleasure in cleaning, crafting, cooking; she is an apt student and usually achieves high marks simply because the studious work comes easy to her. Her diligence, when paid off in praise, only makes her want to work harder and stronger so that she can do even better at the next task or assignment that comes around.

Sincere: Pepper cannot lie. She is always sincere even when it is not the proper route to take. Her attempts at being genuine have, at times, caused hard feelings, but Pepper simply cannot be any other way. Her lack of pretense goes beyond simple honesty; she will always speak her mind no matter the cost - those who know her best know that this is because Pepper thinks honesty is crucially important no matter how minor the interaction. She is not hypocritical and holds others to the same level of sincerity as herself, meaning that when she asks the opinion of someone, she expects the truth at all costs.

Flaws:

Methodical: Pepper strongly believes that behind every concrete process there is a proven success. Processes are in place because they work - and while some might consider this a virtue, for Pepper it is an absolute flaw. She follows everything by the book, rule by rule; there has never been an instance where this has not been the case. If following the rules means taking extra steps which in turn means spending more time doing what she perceives as the right thing, Pepper will follow the rules one-hundred percent of the time without complaint. When faced with the prospect of cutting corners or disobeying direction or anything of the sort, Pepper tends to freeze up in an attempt to extricate herself from the situation. She would much rather not be forced to make any decision that would put her in a position where rules and processes are side-stepped. When placed in a group situation where the decision might be completely taken out of Pepper's hands, well, the pill is still bitter but it's much easier to swallow - she absolves any guilt she might feel by reminding herself (and others) that the decision wasn't made by her (and that she still thinks they should have taken x route instead of y).

Meddlesome: To call Pepper nosy would be something of an understatement. She is, in all honesty, as meddlesome as they come. While every question she poses is asked with only the best of intent, there are times when her incessant needling can become irksome. She is something of an eavesdropper but she is not a gossiper. Simply put, Pepper likes to know what's going on in the lives of those important to her (and even the lives of those who aren't). She isn't usually satisfied with a quick answer, either; the more information she's given, the more questions that Pepper has until finally she has exhausted the patience of the person she's talking to or they've reached a solid end to the discussion. This flaw isn't always about other people, either - sometimes Pepper wants to know the why behind orders, and she is not shy about asking the questions that will get her the answers she feels comfortable with.


PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Green.

Hair: Deep brown. Just past her shoulders, straight; with longer bangs that she shoves off to the side.

Face: Heart-shaped. Dimple in her chin.

Clothes: CC. Practical clothes (capris, jeans, knee-length skirts, big slouchy sweaters, etc.)

Hello, pinchmonster! I'm here to take a look at Seppina and see what needs to be done.

The civ portion looks good, no complaints there. Now, for the powered portion... I think you can alter the effects of the Basic and Super attacks a bit. The disorientation can last a bit longer at Basic- 15 or 20 seconds for simple disorientation might be okay. You might also be able to get away with 3 uses of the attack. For the Super attack, you can boost the disorientation a bit more, but I do have one quibble. The headaches should not explicitly last till powering down; what if someone doesn't power down for a while after getting hit? Just leave it as a short term headache.

For Shrieking Cloud... first, you may want to specify that the bats aren't draining life energy (like what Negaversers drain), but some other kind of energy. It's not a huge thing, but it'll help you if people ask. On the upside, the bats can probably last longer than they do (30 seconds, perhaps), but on the other hand, they cannot be unavoidable. Homing properties are fine, but straight-up undodgeability is not. Also, Eternal attacks are typically single-use; considering the effects, one use should be what it gets. Lastly, the bats need to be confined to some kind of area; I suggest an area of 10 feet around Seppina.

That's all for now! Quote me when you've made changes or if you have a question.

Hmm... I could swear we have "health"-draining attacks elsewhere, so draining itself isn't much of a problem. You could say that it just drains general "energy" and makes people tired and whatnot. If it's too vague for your purposes, however, you can remove the healing. Or you can even remove the fact that it drains, period, and just say that it heals Seppina a little according to damage dealt. Does that help?

Almost there! Magic doesn't normally increase in uses from Basic to Super (this is to compensate for the attack getting stronger), so I would recommend 3 uses for Basic and 2 uses for Super. Let me know when you've fixed that!

Great! Here's your stamp~ A GM will be by eventually to give further crit and/or leave a full stamp.

Changed things up, let me know what you think!

So I changed that the bats could attack anyone in the AoE, but I made it so that any targets that move out of the AoE will not be followed by the bats. :3

Let me know what you think! <3