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 Posted: Fri Jul 03, 2015 12:45 am
Name: Sabrina Luna
Nickname: Rine, Ree-ree, and Sabbie.
Age: 11
Birthday: October 31, 2002
Sign: Scorpio
Gemstone: Garnet
Blood Type: AB
Fav. Food: Mac and Cheese
Hated Food: Spinach
School: Knightside Elementary
Hobbies:
Writing: Crime Novels No matter where she is, she can be seen deep in thought. Thinking about her next novel. Where will the next murder take place, and who will be murder. The one you never see coming, or the one who is right in front of your nose. So close you could touch their shirt and not even know. She never understood why, though for some reason she was always drawn the beauty of writing about murder.
Scrap-booking: This hobby is something not most people knows she does. She has scrap books, blank pages, stickers, and tons of photos. Each of these things built what she liked to call everlasting memories. On the pages she brought to life each memory. It was a way she never forgot things, but they also helped her remember her life in general. It was like her way of keeping tabs on her life and its events.
Photography: A picture is a memory that never fades away or so she believes. In her life things sometimes seem to fade and she has always been concerned about preserving the past. So people in the future, or even just her, could remember it for what it was. Happy, sad, confusing, beautiful. No matter what it was a persons past was always important, just like the Pharaohs in Egypt whose life and story were preserved and told to all.
Virtues:
Courageous : She is known for being first and volunteering to be the first to give anything a try. Some people like to relate to her as a Divergent. Since just like the main character Tris. Since she figures why not, someone has to do it. Why not her? She will stand up even for those that aren't as strong or worthy of being stood up for. She believes everyone deserves a chance, even her. Fears and all.
Self-Sufficient- While she has a great father who loves her above all else. She would rather be able to take care of herself, with out his help. Since her father is well more dramatic than most, which helps with her writing. Though sometimes she would much rather make her lunch than to suffer through his love filled lunch.
Flaws:
Impatient: Sabrina hated to wait. While she was very well relaxed normally. She actually couldn't stand slow traffic or even waiting in general. She found it beyond pointless. Since if she was able to order a latte over her phone. Why couldn't people learn to move quicker, after all they were in the new age right? She will sometimes sit there tapping her feet and crossing her arms.
Jealousy: While all girls get jealous, she has a tendency to go a little far. Since for example in relationships she can not stand not having something or someone to herself. If she feels like things aren't going her way she begins to set rules and her jealousy begins to let loose like a green monster.
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION
Eyes: Emerald Green!
Hair: Black with Red streaks.
Face: heart-shaped face
Clothes: School Uniform - when not at home.
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Posted: Fri Jul 03, 2015 8:12 pm
Senshi: Chibi Senshi Shedir ; Senshi of Mummies. Challenge: I'll wrap you up! Fuku Colour: Main Color: 8B0000 Secondary Color: F2B233 Fuku: Collar -- cc Bow -- cc. Bodice -- cc. Sleeves -- Mummy Wraps on her arms Brooch -- cc Bottoms -- cc Tiara -- Egyptian Tiara snake tiara in gold Choker -- Choker is a classic, or a necklace? Or a scarf? Shoes -- Go crazy? Gloves -- Mummy wraps around her arms. Accessories -- Any accessories? Earrings? Jewellry? Your MAIN COLOUR should dominate. Your SECOND COLOUR should be used for trimming. Attacks: These are your senshi's abilities, which will be used in battle. These abilities correspond to your senshi's element. Think of it as a "summary" of what your senshi can do in one word. Sailor Scout Attack: Mummy Wraps. She throws her arms out in front of her, and her mummy bandages begin to start glowing and then magical bandages extend from them. Then the magical bandages shoots out straight towards her enemies and bind her them in a mummified bond. This attack will last no more than 20 seconds. She can do this three times per battle. Distance travel possible is 8 ft. Now this attack can be stopped: the bandages will lose strength if they are attacked. Depending on how many attacks/how strong the attack. If no one attacks them then the bandages could last longer, but if they are attacked the bandages could lose strength or just begin falling off. Super Sailor Scout Attack: Mummified Phoenix She throws her arms out in front of her, her mummy bandages begin to start glowing, and her magical mummy bandages begin to unravel. Then it shoots out straight towards her enemies. Though as it unravels it begins to take the form of a phoenix. As it heads directly towards the enemy. If the attack hits it binds the enemy in a stronger mummified bond. She can do this two times per battle. Distance travel possible is 12 ft. Now this attack can be stopped: the bandages will lose strength if they are attacked. Depending on how many attacks/how strong the attack. If no one attacks them then the bandages could last longer, but if they are attacked the bandages could lose strength or just begin falling off. Eternal Sailor Attack: Mummified Scarab beetles This time as she throws out her arms her wraps unravel and from under them flies out scarab beetles. Beetles that head towards any opponent within ten feet and once they reach. They open and sand like gas hits them stunning them for a moment and causes them to be disoriented. This attack will last no more than 35 Seconds. She can do this two time per battle.
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Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2015 6:03 pm
An idea for an attack? what if she throws her arms out in front of her, and her mummy bandages shoot out and bind her enemies, damage them, and perhaps throw them around a bit?
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2015 11:05 pm
Sailor Hawk An idea for an attack? what if she throws her arms out in front of her, and her mummy bandages shoot out and bind her enemies, damage them, and perhaps throw them around a bit? Ooh that would be awesome, I love that! biggrin Thank you so much. Attacks are my weak point. >< lol.
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Posted: Mon Jul 06, 2015 10:45 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 08, 2015 2:20 am
Thank you so much for your help, and just trying to figure out what I could do for the other two attacks. Plus how her sailor outfit should look since I'm wanting it to look mummy like but Egyptian like too.
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Posted: Thu Jul 09, 2015 1:27 am
Officially ready for a stamp or to be looked at! ^_^
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Posted: Thu Jul 09, 2015 5:55 am
Hi chi! I just have a little bit of crit to drop before this is ready for a stamp! Her civilian profile is wonderful and ready to go as is, but her powered side needs a few changes before approval! First I want to touch on her Super attack. This shouldn't be a completely different attack, but an upgraded or stronger version of her regular Senshi attack. You can find those guidelines here. So this attack should be similar to her regular Senshi attack, but with a longer duration or some sort of an extra effect! The other thing I wanted to touch on is usage limits. Four uses as a regular Senshi is rather a lot! A good rule to go by is 3-2-1. 3 uses at regular, 2 uses at Super, and one at Eternal (however, since her Eternal attack doesn't cause a lot of damage and is more disorienting than anything, leaving it at two should be fine in this instance). Let me know if you have any questions! I'd be happy to help!
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Posted: Thu Jul 09, 2015 7:59 pm
Sunshine Alouette Hi chi! I just have a little bit of crit to drop before this is ready for a stamp! Her civilian profile is wonderful and ready to go as is, but her powered side needs a few changes before approval! First I want to touch on her Super attack. This shouldn't be a completely different attack, but an upgraded or stronger version of her regular Senshi attack. You can find those guidelines here. So this attack should be similar to her regular Senshi attack, but with a longer duration or some sort of an extra effect! The other thing I wanted to touch on is usage limits. Four uses as a regular Senshi is rather a lot! A good rule to go by is 3-2-1. 3 uses at regular, 2 uses at Super, and one at Eternal (however, since her Eternal attack doesn't cause a lot of damage and is more disorienting than anything, leaving it at two should be fine in this instance). Let me know if you have any questions! I'd be happy to help! Yay well one down. As for the attacks. for her super would it work if it transformed and still bound them like the first one. It just would bond them tighter? Or should I change it entirely. I changed to match that. Since that way it does the same thing. All it does is take the shape of something and goes further distance. ^^' attacks are not my strong point. lol. Okay great well I changed the super to 2 and left the other at 2. Since yah it it isn;t really strong just disorienting like you said. smile thanks again for all your help!
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Posted: Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:16 am
chi honda Yay well one down. As for the attacks. for her super would it work if it transformed and still bound them like the first one. It just would bond them tighter? Or should I change it entirely. I changed to match that. Since that way it does the same thing. All it does is take the shape of something and goes further distance. ^^' attacks are not my strong point. lol. Okay great well I changed the super to 2 and left the other at 2. Since yah it it isn;t really strong just disorienting like you said. smile thanks again for all your help! Looking good! I think the super magic is fine the way you describe it! It has the same effect, it simply looks a little different! That said, using her regular Senshi attack four times is still too much. If you bump it down to three, I can go ahead and post a trial stamp! :3
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Posted: Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:49 am
Sunshine Alouette Looking good! I think the super magic is fine the way you describe it! It has the same effect, it simply looks a little different! That said, using her regular Senshi attack four times is still too much. If you bump it down to three, I can go ahead and post a trial stamp! :3 Sweet-ness! I'm glad I was able to make it work. Thank you for your advice and help with her. As for the regular attack - it is officially bumped down to 3. ^_^
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Posted: Tue Jul 14, 2015 3:58 am
Excellent! Everything looks good now! I'll drop a trial stamp and a GM should be around soon to take another look!! 
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Posted: Thu Jul 23, 2015 4:04 pm
Hi, Chi! This is a cute profile! The civilian side looks great, so I'd like to just head on down to the powered side! Because the wiki you linked leads to the constellation Cassiopeia, I want to make sure that the Homeworld you are using is the star Alpha Cassiopeia; I double checked the wiki you linked and it was to the constellation Cassiopeia but it mentioned that Alpha Cassiopeia was also known as Shedir. Because there are numerous stars labelled Cassiopeia it should be fine to take on a traditional name to distinguish it from the others, though when I went to the wiki page for Alpha Cassiopeia it seemed that the more frequently used traditional name was Schedar and that it was only sometimes spelled Shedir. I think either should work, but I just wanted to let you know in case you preferred Schedar and Schedar wasn't mentioned on the other wiki page you had ;v; For her attacks, I have a few things I'd like to ask about: Are the bandages that expand from her magical? Because they are a magical attack they should not be created from anything she is wearing; if the bandages on her sleeves were to start glowing and then magical bandages extend from them, this would be all right since it is just tying into her sphere/is a visual thing, but when her bandages should not be the bandages doing the attack (otherwise this is too close to knight magic!) Do her bandages totally immobilize someone/is there some way they could stop the bandages from wrapping all around them? Presently we ask that any attack that entirely immobilizes last no more than fifteen seconds due to how vulnerable it would leave them to deadly attacks, but if there was a way for the target to escape or otherwise defend from life threatening attacks, this duration would be fine! For her eternal attack, this looks fine! Since they are stunned and disoriented but not prevented from defending from lethal attacks, this sounds great! Please quote me if you have any questions, comments or make any changes and I'll be back as soon as possible!
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Posted: Thu Jul 23, 2015 9:05 pm
Hi there! Thank you for your wonderful feedback I appreciate it. Oh I did not know that hmm i'll have to think which one I'd like to use. The attacks have been changed to reflect her bandages glowing and other magical ones extending from that. Okay that makes sense - oops you are right. that would be way to close to a knight. thanks for helping me fix those. I'm still working on learning more about character attacks. I was thinking of totally immobilization for a short time period. Though do you have any suggestions for ways they could escape or defend from an attack like mine? if I can't figure out something then I will definitely lower the time they last. Yay! though I'm glad her civilian and eternal attack are good. ^_^ Are her attacks okay as far as power wise do you think? I didn't know if I made them under powered or if power wise they were good. So thanks again for all of your help!
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Posted: Sun Jul 26, 2015 7:31 am
It is my pleasure! As long as there is a way to escape the immobilization in order to defend themselves from fatal blows it should be fine, so perhaps if they are attacked while immobilized, the bandages will lose strength and they can break through them? That way they at least stand a chance if they are being attacked? If no one attacks them then the bandages could last longer, but if they are attacked the bandages could lose strength (or just begin falling off depending on how many attacks/how strong the attack was) should work? I think the attacks are a fair power range; immobilizing a character for twenty seconds is enough time to get away or to allow at least one good blow in before they can defend themselves, so there are some good options there (either for one on one battles or group battles), and her eternal attack has good magic! Looking at it though, I think you could make the eternal magic stronger and still be within a fair range; instead of just one target, you could give it a radius (say any opponent within ten feet) and the scarabs could run out and attack all of them? While most battles are usually one on one, I think this would be more effective in a group setting while not detracting any abilities in a one on one battle, if you might be interested in that? (It could still be used for two times per battle and keep the same duration; but if you wanted to allow it to affect multiple targets instead of just one, I think that would be fine!) You don't have to make any changes to the eternal attack since it is stampable as it is, but I just wanted to let you know that you could have that option with it!
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