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Adopt - Viylahi - Orderite girl [Crit?]

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OpticPeach

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PostPosted: Thu Feb 26, 2015 10:37 pm


Adopt: Orderite Girl 1
Character Name: Viylahi
Gender: Female
Clan: N/A
Class: Not Chosen
Personality:

Curious: Ever curious, if Viylahi doesn't know something she will try and seek out the answer even if it gets her into trouble. She is constantly asking why things are, and if she doesn't like the answer she attempts to find a better one. If anyone is seeking an answer to a question, or even just trying to find out something new – Viylahi will be there in an instant to figure it out alongside the person.

Independent: Viylahi wants to succeed by herself with nobody's help. She struggles when trying to accept help from others and will avoid it as much as possible. Due to her blind eye, she sees accepting help as her admitting weakness; something she refuses to do. She will more often push herself far past her limits than ever admit to needing anything – even if it gets her into dangerous situations.

Open-minded: Always willing to listen and learn, Viylahi is very open to trying new things and meeting new people no matter what the race. No matter what your beliefs or who you are, Viylahi will try her best to understand and listen to what they have to say.

Shortsighted: Always focusing on the now, Viylahi doesn't take into account what her actions may do in the future. She's always focused on what's right in front of her instead of the big picture.

Forgetful: Whether it was from her fall off the cliff or simply her not paying attention to detail, something has made Viylahi a very forgetful person. It is a common occurrence for her to forget just where she is and what she had planned on doing. Even names are sometimes hard for her to remember even when she likes the person.

Biography/Background:
Born to simple farmers in the Valley of Andrah, Viylahi always wished for something more. She wanted adventure, excitement, anything to escape the dullness of life as a farmer or laborer. Even before she could walk Viylahi was always getting into things and causing trouble of some sort or another. The biggest influence in her desire to adventure was her Uncle Veyin and his Oblivionite wife, Tyria. They wrote to her about all the adventures to be had and how she didn't have to be a farmer like her parents. Her mother was already distrustful of her brother and his wife, and to have him put such thoughts in her daughters head was the last straw. All contact with Veyin and Tyria stopped, and Viylahi was never allowed to speak about them or her cousins, not even to her mother. This pushed the young girl to attempt to adventure even more in hopes of somehow making her way to him so she could explore more than the Valley. She left several times and was always caught fairly quickly, but the last was a different story. Having finally gotten out of the Valley and into the city, she wasn't prepared for the dangers that awaited her there. Attacked by bandits had been the last thing she had expected, and the damage sustained from it was enough to leave her blind in one eye. Managing to get back to her parents with the help of a kind old woman, Viylahi wasn't let out of their sight after the incident. to this day her parents refuse to let her forget about it and stifle her with how overprotective they are. The constant babying of her has solidified her need to escape, and when the time comes she will leave whether her parents like it or not. For now she stays with them, practicing her swordsmanship in secret while biding her time until she can leave.

Thoughts on the Great Engagement:

Though she believes it was necessary for the growth of all the races before, she feels that the off and on battles now are petty and are detrimental to the continued growth and bonds of all the races. She wants the

Thoughts on the Magescian Races:

Orderites

As far as her own race goes, Viylahi is comfortable with them. Having grown up around her own kind for as long as she can remember, she's easily able to find comfort speaking with them - as long as they're nice that is.

Oblivionites

She understands there is a lot of bad blood between the Orderites and Oblivionites and that she will be judged because of her race, but she would still like to get past racial differences if possible. While she does get nervous around Oblivionites due to their differences and the troubles, she is open to getting to know any Oblivionite as long as they give her the same courtesy.

Dovaa

Incredibly curious about the Dovaa, she would love to interact with them and get to know their customs more. More likely to run up and speak to a Dovaa than she would an Oblivionite.

Hybrids

Absolutely loves the thought of Hybrids and the fact that the races could get along and care about each other enough to conceive a being of two different races. Hybrids give her hope that maybe all the races can get along peacefully with no problems one day.

Thoughts on the Dragons and Khehora:

Dragons and Khehora make her a bit nervous, but she would still like to meet them so she can really see for herself if there's reason to be fearful of them or not.

Statistics:

INT: 2
ATK: 5
DEF: 3
PostPosted: Mon Mar 23, 2015 3:31 pm


So far, so good on her.

You might want to expand a bit on her personality. Give her some negative traits to go along with the positive ones. Everyone has both.

Also, need to include her feelings about orderites as well.

Tangled Puppet
Vice Captain

Sarcastic Demigod


OpticPeach

Otherworldly Bear

PostPosted: Wed Mar 25, 2015 11:29 am


Tangled Puppet
So far, so good on her.

You might want to expand a bit on her personality. Give her some negative traits to go along with the positive ones. Everyone has both.

Also, need to include her feelings about orderites as well.


Added some more on her traits and also her opinion on Orderites!
PostPosted: Sat Mar 28, 2015 9:28 am


A little sparse, but the information you have works, and I like that you expanded her personality to make it a bit more balanced. That would have been my primary critique earlier. Now, I'm more comfortable with her, but where did she get such a positive opinion on hybrids? Most all of her culture would have emphasized that hybrids are not only disgusting and a disgrace (and an insult to the gods), but dangerous, hateful, unpredictable, and often out of their mind due to the mixing of bloods that don't belong together. The world of Magesc is steeped in negative stereotypes regarding hybrids, enough so that it's not uncommon for people to believe they'd be doing the world a service if they killed a few off or even slaughtered one in its crib.

It's not impossible to have a more open mind, but highly unlikely unless there's some reason or experience basis out there for it.

Overall, though, I will give her my stamp of approval. 3nodding

Miss Chief aka Uke
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OpticPeach

Otherworldly Bear

PostPosted: Sun Mar 29, 2015 4:24 pm


The Only Black Uke


Thank you for the feedback. This month has been a bit of a nightmare so it's been hard getting things down. @_@ Fixed up her history more because I was unhappy with how it sounded, and also added more info that would go along with her beliefs. If this is still unacceptable I can change it.
PostPosted: Sun Mar 29, 2015 5:36 pm


I'm going to go ahead and give her my stamp of approval as well.

With that, she's officially yours. All you need to do is send a quote, for her cert, to me and I'll get her certed up ASAP and we'll get her journal set up too.

Tangled Puppet
Vice Captain

Sarcastic Demigod


OpticPeach

Otherworldly Bear

PostPosted: Wed Apr 01, 2015 12:44 am


Tangled Puppet
I'm going to go ahead and give her my stamp of approval as well.

With that, she's officially yours. All you need to do is send a quote, for her cert, to me and I'll get her certed up ASAP and we'll get her journal set up too.


I'm sorry I never saw this!! For some reason it didn't alert me to it. Oh well. Just quoting you for her cert. smile
PostPosted: Wed Apr 01, 2015 6:11 am


OpticPeach
Tangled Puppet
I'm going to go ahead and give her my stamp of approval as well.

With that, she's officially yours. All you need to do is send a quote, for her cert, to me and I'll get her certed up ASAP and we'll get her journal set up too.


I'm sorry I never saw this!! For some reason it didn't alert me to it. Oh well. Just quoting you for her cert. smile
I need an actual quote to put on her cert. Something she might say or think. Or if you'd rather skip the quote, that's ok.

Tangled Puppet
Vice Captain

Sarcastic Demigod


OpticPeach

Otherworldly Bear

PostPosted: Wed Apr 01, 2015 9:13 am


Tangled Puppet


Ohhhhh. Apologies for misunderstanding. "I can do this on my own."
PostPosted: Wed Apr 01, 2015 9:15 am


OpticPeach
Tangled Puppet


Ohhhhh. Apologies for misunderstanding. "I can do this on my own."
That's ok! A lot of new comers don't realize there are quotes on certs. So it's all good.

I'll get her certed asap.

Tangled Puppet
Vice Captain

Sarcastic Demigod

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