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Posted: Sun Nov 30, 2014 12:53 am
Custom: Full Character Name: Saedaisti Race: Dovaa Gender: Female Clan: Firani Class: -- Appearance: Humanoid- Apprentice- dusky tan skin, black swept back spiral horns, pointed ears, jagged edged leather dress, long dark blond hair to shoulders or mid back, crimson scales on various parts of her body, eyes are lavender
Adept- dusky tan skin, black swept back spiral horns, pointed ears, jagged edged leather breast wrap over one shoulder and short skirt, long dark blond hair to at least her hips and unbound, crimson scales get some burnished gold markings, eyes are a fiery-red after choosing clan
Expert- dusky tan skin, black swept back spiral horns, pointed ears, jagged edged leather breast wrap over one shoulder and short skirt, long dark blond hair to at least her hips tied back with a free dreadlock on either side of her face, crimson scales get some burnished gold markings, eyes are a fiery-red after choosing clan, feathers tied in her hair at the scalp
Master- appearance same as expert with: tattoos, gemstone earrings, dragon claw/gem necklace, gold armband, anklet
True Form- Black body with crimson belly/wing membranes and burnished gold markings, swept back spiral horns, heart shaped tail tip, crest of spines from back of head along spine to nearly tip of tail.
Personality: These are general ideas, and each one builds on the previous stage. Not set in stone, but just the base ideas I have for her. Apprentice- Quiet, observant, curious, reserved around strangers, slightly opportunistic
Adept- loves all things shiny, hoards, dislikes handing over her dragon orbs, becomes fascinated by Khehora and Dragons, prefers wilderness to cities
Expert- wants to travel, sees the war as a way to benefit Dovaa by getting the Oblivionites and Orderites to exterminate each other which leaves the Dovaa to rule the world, animal tamer, she starts to show her chaotic neutral
Master- prefers to spend much of her time in her True Form and among those Khehora and Dragons she has befriended, adventurer, guide/treasure hunter for hire, occasional merchant, chaotic neutral has become an art form for her.
Biography/Background: Mother: Zoina, trapper Father: Suledu, a tanner Older brother: Rusaegh, trapper in training Older sister: Lerayet, tanner in training
They live in a log cabin on the edge of the Fields of Aloradhan near Dannon’s Thicket. Together they ran a trapping and tanning business. Once every few month the couple would head into the city to sell the furs they had and bring back any supplies they required for the next several months.
Saedaisti is their third born child. She has an older brother and sister. Rusaegh, the oldest sibling, has taken after Zoina and he is learning how to trap. Lerayet, the middle child, has decided to learn tanning from Suledu. When Saedaisti was born, it was debated which trade she might be interested in. Her observant nature and curiosity about the world impressed her parents. They decided it would be good to send her to the city to learn once she was older.
From a young age the dovaa liked to spend her time exploring the fields and woods around her home. She enjoyed being in nature and the many things it could show her. Her favorite was observing the animals and befriending any she could. Sae didn't show much interest in either of her parent’s professions, nor any of the neighbors. In truth, she felt a deep connection with the forest and the wild places. She felt the happiest roaming in the woods, befriending birds and deer, or learning flora and its uses. Sae isn't a girl that likes to sit still.
When her parents first told her they would like her to go to the city for more formal training, she was reluctant to live her wild home. In the end she agreed reluctantly. She could always return if she didn't like it. In her 9th year, her father brought her to the city to learn all she could. She packed up a few possessions and began her trip to the city her father. It was a long, hard trip to leave the lands she'd known for her whole life and go into the city for more than half a day. The noise and smell assaulted her senses as it had the few times she'd gone with her family to the city to sell their furs.
That was the hardest hurdle, finding the will the carry on. Sae stood at the edge staring for a long time. Finally she took a deep breathe and started walking. Her dad simply stood and let her get her wits together. When she started walking, he smiled silently.
Thoughts on the Great Engagement: re-doing
In the beginning growing up she feels the other two races are a bit full of themselves. As she learns more, she will lean more toward using the conflicting sides to make a profit for the dovaa. If the other two wipe each other out, or mostly, then the dovaa can take over cause they are clearly the best race anyhow.
Thoughts on the Magescian Races: Before she meets any of the other races she’ll be rather indifferent. Oblivionites and orderites are seen as an ends to a means. A way for the dovaa to further their wealth and after the others have destroyed each other it will be the dovaians who rule the planet. For a long time she won't realize hybrids are a factor of life, unless she runs into one. The other races will be viewed as slightly below dovaas, and hybrid dovaas will need to prove their worth and loyalty to their dovaian side. (I have plans for her to get an Oblivionite mate in her far future lol.)
Thoughts on the Dragons and Khehora: The dragons and khehora will become an utter devotion to her once she learns about them. She will want to learn as much as she can. It will become her goal to travel to all the continents and meet each breed of dragon and khehora. Later when she’s traveling she’d rather befriend them than fight. If she can get some to confide in her she’ll want to trade favors for eggs and things. Statistics: Int: 6 Att: 1 Def: 3
Young dovaa would be taught that though the first two races were brought into the world first in history, they were imagined by their respective goddesses for all the wrong reasons - greed, pride, power, and above all, war. The war is a waste of energy and life that raged for far longer than it should have based on nothing more than a power show and futile desires to prove superiority. Dovaa children will be taught that they were designed by their god last, but best, with the purpose of their eventual destiny being to bring balance to a world needlessly torn asunder. Though the world created for them by their god is separate from Magesc, the elements that run in their blood which are the beating pulse of their magic are designed for earth, oceans, wind, and thunder of Magesc itself. Through their attunement to the natural world and the design of their god, they can accomplish what neither of the races before them did: peace, and a world worth living in. Of course, many dovaa will disagree on how that peace should be sought, and many will take one side or the other, believing that the only way to bring balance will be to end the war the way wars end: by winning it. And even those who want peace through negotiation generally see themselves as distinctly separate from and not designed to mingle with the other races other than to be ambassadors for a greater purpose, etc. - plenty of racism amidst the dovaa, just a different sort since they're not absolutely on one side or the other.
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Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2014 6:15 pm
So far she's sounding good. She'll be an interesting addition to Magesc.
Maybe try to get a little more detail into her background? It's not *needed* per se, since you have the base and you can expand later...but it can't hurt (and it's less you have to worry about if you get her). Plus I'd love to know more about her. Her personality points are pretty good and her master stage is what got me interested in her.
I feel like you might need to redo the Great Engagement part or add to it. When I first read it I thought I was reading about her feelings towards other magescians but then noticed it was under "Great Engagement".
Also, what are her feelings towards the hybrids?
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Tangled Puppet Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2014 6:53 pm
I just have one problem, and mostly my suggestion is food for thought when plotting the getting of khehora eggs.Quote: It will become her goal to travel to all the continents and meet each breed of dragon and khehora. Later when she’s traveling she’d rather befriend them than fight. If she can get some to confide in her she’ll want to trade favors for eggs and things. I don't see khehora's just giving away their eggs, even for favors and especially to two-leggers. (Except Oblivion, who paid dearly for that ^^"""" )
However, as I have shown, it has been done, but it's rather rare that they would do that. Cause how would you like it if someone gave away your child, even before they are born, and especially because most khehora think the bond is evil, basically "enslaving", their young?
You could have a clan selling/trading off eggs they stole from a rival clan, but this would be less rare than a parent giving an egg away.
Stealing them is the most common form of getting an egg. Killing for an egg is more common in that category, good luck trying to steal from a live parent ^^"""
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Posted: Mon Dec 15, 2014 10:14 am
I'm going to approve this girl. I see nothing crucially wrong with her, she's very promising, and though there are places you could fill her in more, you can do that once you get her if you choose to aim for her this round.
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Posted: Mon Dec 15, 2014 7:20 pm
Thank you! I've been trying to work on her a little bit as I have time. Fully intend to keep working on her. ^_^
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Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2014 7:18 am
I'll give her my approval too~ Things should straighten out once you really get settled into the world. ^w^ With that, she's officially approved and you can submit her in for choosing~ OwO
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Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2014 6:56 pm
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Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2014 7:09 pm
Thanks for your feedback! I wasn't ignoring you. You have a valid point. It will be hard, but at the same time I kind of want to give her a hard goal. Something to strive for in her life ya'know? She's gonna be obsessed with dragons, so she'll have the drive to try to achieve it. <3
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Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2014 7:11 pm
magnadearel Thanks for your feedback! I wasn't ignoring you. You have a valid point. It will be hard, but at the same time I kind of want to give her a hard goal. Something to strive for in her life ya'know? She's gonna be obsessed with dragons, so she'll have the drive to try to achieve it. <3 Oh it's quite all right, I thought I insulted you ^^"""" If you need khehora help, come see Avani sometime.
Avani: omg, all the khehora.... OTL
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Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2014 7:17 pm
*hugs* no no! I'm so sorry I didn't reply sooner. I really meant to. Ooooo thanks! I'll take you up on that. Where is Avani?
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Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2014 7:21 pm
magnadearel *hugs* no no! I'm so sorry I didn't reply sooner. I really meant to. Ooooo thanks! I'll take you up on that. Where is Avani? Serina ^_^ She's ma Orderite baby ^_^ She's also a farmer who lives in the woods with her little khehora youngling ^_^
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Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2014 7:49 pm
Hahah Sae is gonna have so many people lined up to meet when she grows up. XD I'm looking forward to rping her with people.
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