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Name: Anxo (An-Shaw) DeLuna

Nickname: none

Age: 20

Birthday: March 28th

Sign: Aries

Gemstone: Lodestone

Blood Type: He doesn't know.

Fav. Food: Green Onions, pan fried with eggs and sausage.

Hated Food: Mushrooms, anything overly bloody, cold food for dinner.

School: Destiny City University, Studying Backstage Technologies

Hobbies:

Theater Work: As part of his major, he's required to do a number of hours between both the costume shop, the scene shop, and the props shop at the university. He began to start pulling more and more hours, and it seems to have consumed his free time. If he's not working on a show he may be found piecing together a lighting plot for an experiment of how light effects a costume, or reconstructing the stage from a previous show in miniature form to see what could have done better. He can also be found mingling with the actors and actresses of DC, asking their opinions on set design and costumes they'd like to see for their next show.

Swimming: A long day can only properly cooled down with a nice, long swim at the public indoor swimming pool. Whether or not it is winter or summer, he will try to make time to get to the pool, and do a few laps. During the summertime, he tries to go to the beach, though the pool is far closer, and more convenient. No matter which one, he will try making friends with random people, egging on swimming races or splash fights.

Scenery Observing: Like people watching, except more for the scene, than the people. He's always curious about lighting, and can find himself lost in the light that filters through trees, or how a cloudy day can change the way a fountain in the park looks. Museums also have become a huge hit with the boy. Occasionally, he'll pull out a sketch pad, and doodle out how it would look up on a stage. While sitting there, he might strike up a talk with someone, asking to take a picture to help match it with his sketch for later.

Food Sampler: Smells, tastes, texture... Anxo enjoys foods of all kinds and wants to try a little bit of everything he gets his eyes on. Is he a connoisseur? Not quite. Just tasting something new and strange gives him joy, even if the stuff tastes like trash. In addition to just tasting new food as restaurants and cafes he often goes to, he tries to be called in my his friends at the DC culinary school for testing of new dishes. His opinion on food isn't helpful since he doesn't like giving out negative responses however leading to some people seeing him as a mooch.

Virtues:

Passionate -- When something Anxo enjoys is mentioned he will add onto it, speaking of it like it's the best thing in the world. He can spew off his dreams in an endless manner, even if it's as simple as a new, fancy dish he wants to try from his friends or how nice . People enjoy having him on teams for projects due to his passionate approach to the topics chosen. He'll consistently work towards giving out something greater than ever seen before.

Giving: -- Time, money, food, homework answers. If Anxo hears that a person he knows needs something he's willing and ready to give it out. A warm fuzzy feeling fills him when he gives, and he gives out what he can. He'd be willing to go to the ends of the earth for another person even if it cuts into his own agenda. That wouldn't matter, if he can give something to another person, he's content. Limitations do exists. If it's out of his power or unrealistic he knows when to stop.

Humble -- Anxo recognizes that no one is perfect and that even when you think you're doing fantastic it shouldn't go to your head. He may find himself having done something amazing but he will deny that it was his success alone. He is well known in his community for making sure that credit is given where it's due, and does not show off his talents regularly. When it is shown he caves in with blushing and stuttering, insisting that it wasn't entirely his own work. As his with his passion, those who work and learn along side him enjoy this due to the ease of working with him.

Flaws:

Impatient -- His being humble does not affect the amount of patience he has with working with others. He wants everything done at the right time, his time and if does not work that way then you are off of a project. He will give you everything in the world but if you can't keep up with him you're likely to be forgotten. He has no time for slackers or the unmotivated.

Needy -- When things are calm and quiet Anxo begins to lose his mind. He needs attention since he does not have much confidence in what he does. When he wants attention, he will go to such lengths as to constantly text someone, call them, or message them until they answer him. When someone finally snaps and tells him to back off, he will act as if he was hurt, and find himself unable to forgive that person unless they beg for him back.

Transparent -- The motives behind Anxo actions are very easy to see. If he has any secondary goal in doing something in secret most people can pick it out and call him on it. He is ultimately a terrible liar, and will continue to try to lie, even if he's caught. Most people who have caught him in a lie will learn not to trust him, because once he is caught in one lie it's easy to see when he's lying again.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

He is a distant cousin of Clifford Barnes, and has hair and skin of similar color.

Eyes: a color between green and blue, he looks a bit sleepy, but he's alright.

Hair: Long and dark. he has no bangs, and his hair is frequently in his face.

----> Like that, with no bangs!

Face: Anxo has a oval face, and rather average ears. He has two moles, one right beneath the corner of his right eye, and about a centimeter down, and an inch closer to his nose, another one.

Clothes: t-shirt and jeans. Nothing incredibly special, sans the occasional splash of paint, or a tear caused by a stray set nail.

Hey Pod,

I got the chance to look over your boy today, yay! I think your civilian profile looks great. The only thing I have to say is that food as a hobby as written feels a little strange because its not like he's a connoisseur or trying to be, but if he was that would make more sense. I'm not saying to take it out, but I feel it needs a bit of expansion.

As for his powered profile, for future reference you can just describe it in a paragraph, and add any effect in there. A pros and cons list isn't necessary.

Example using his first attack:
Fornax snaps his fingers and opens both palms summoning two hand-sized hard rolls. He can toss them, or hold onto them. If thrown, they might give a good smack (depending entirely on Fornax's ability to throw accurately), but no real damage is caused outside of maybe a small whelp or a little cut from the crust. If held he can certainly his a person with it, but it will crumble and disappear afterwards, leaving a mess of crumbs all over in is wake. The attack can only be used once per battle.


For his basic attack its very cute, it only needs a few things. I think it could definitely be used twice in a battle for 4 buns, it such a simple attack and really isnt causing much harm, if any. Also, senshi cannot summon fully corporeal items, therefore the bread he summons shouldn't be real actual bread, its made of energy/ is magical, so should look and probably smell like bread, maybe be glowing if you like,but no one should be trying to eat them anyway.

For his super attack, the attacks timing is to big, the buns can stick around for a minute and 15 secs, per attack which is 3 minutes and 45 secs total. As a rule of thumb, we try not to make total usage time more than 1min and 45sec max, as battle tend only to last for somewhere in the 5 minute ball park. I would suggest that the buns only be around for 30secs each summon, they are hot and sticky and can cause burns. Also I do not think he should be wearing oven mitts, unless they are something close to form fitting and his fingers can be freed, speaking entirely functionality point of view because he has to be able to fight, making a fist with an oven mitt is a bit odd. Also the attack need not burn him, and doesnt have to have any adverse attack to him at all, but if can, just noting it doesnt have to. As said before, couldnt be eatten anyway.

For his eternal I'm having as are time visualizing it. I think it would make a bit more sense for him to summon it and bring it down to his abdomen for the attack. I assuming from the cons that he could potentially be forced to drop it?Otherwise the mechanics itself seem fine, I checked against the senshi of shards and the attacks dont seem to simliar so you're good there. Again, the bread could not be physically eatten and it's not likely crumbs would get into someones lungs.

Quote me back when you are ready for a second look!

The changes you made look great! Good luck winning your boy!