I'm planning to post this up on my blog this weekend. Is it good? Does it need some work? Be brutally honest, please. I'm not satisfied with it, and I don't know why, so I'm looking for some criticism, here.

Let It Go: Elfen Lied version

The blood rains down like a fountain tonight
It’s like walking through a bog
If they wanted to see their teen years,
Then they shouldn’t have killed my dog

The world is teeming with these useless human worms
I wanted to fit in, even on their terms.

They had their chance to coexist
But now they’ve gone and they have made me pissed
It’s time that they all met their fate
Exterminate!

Let it go, let it go
Their time has come to pass
Let it go, let it go
I’ll go Manson on their a**!

I don’t care
If they scream and cry
Try to run and hiiiiiiide
Fear the Diclonius in the sky

It’s funny how dynamic
Can change over night
How I once was just the victim,
Now they’re the ones contrite!

It’s good to know that at my peak
I make that Frozen b***h look weak
My vectors cut right through her ice
Slice slice!

Let it go, Let it go
It’s the dawn of a brand new age!
Let it go, let it go
I will let them feel my rage!

Here I stand
As the world’s new queen!
Let the people scream!

I don’t care if you say you do not like my horns
Like Lady Gaga said, it’s just the way that I was born
I’ll spread my genes to you, and if you’ve any luck
You’ll have my baby with
A literal mind ******** it go, let it go
And I'll rise up to claim my throne
Let it go, let it go
Now I’ll never be alone!

Here I stand
With the world aflame!
I will be your bane!
You really only have yourselves to blame.