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 Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 11:41 pm
Name: Mr Payne
Ht/Wt: 6'7, 265Lbs
Hometown: Manchester, England
Entrance Music: Mercy- Kayne West
Entrance Moves: (Walks out from the back area, Walks slowly to the ring with his walking cane in hand and a smug look on his face. Once in the ring, he stays in his corner and )
Appearance: Appears just as Avatar does.
Common Moves: Flying Clothesline, Jumping drop kick, Big Boot
Signature Moves: The Dog Shot (Punch from behind while opponent is confused, tired or preoccupied),Chokeslam, Spear
Finisher: The English Breakfast (Power Bomb), The Manchester Express (Tiger Suplex)
Gimmick: New fighter from England whose face is always wrapped in red cloth. Mr Payne Obviously comes from a wealthy background, but why is he here?
Alignment: Heel
Weapon Expertise:Walking Cane
Division: Heavyweight
Title History: N/A
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Posted: Thu Mar 06, 2014 9:32 am
Well it looks like you're off to a good start. Welcome to BBW! Allow me to offer you a perfunctory ice cream cone.
*Offers said perfunctory ice cream cone*
I'd thought I'd drop a few tips because other wont do it so amicably. Firstly your character is a Heavyweight, not a light heavyweight. The cutoff for the Light Heavyweight division is typically around 220lbs.
Also I recomend fleshing out your move set some more. I can provide links to wrestling move databases, and can be reached via PM or Skype if you'd like to ask for further help.
Now onto tips that are more opinion than anything. I think you should reconsider your gimmick. I get the mysterious stranger bit, but it's a little overplayed. So is the strong silent wrestler type. If you stick with that, don't be surprised if you find yourself in a match with another mute and no chemistry. The problem is, the only heels that don't really talk tend to be the mindless monsters which doesn't really mesh with the rest of the gimmick.
I suggest you drop the silent gimmick to focus on a wealthy character with hidden agendas. Make him vocal about his money, allow him to use it to his advantage since he is a heel. The more dynamic you make your character the more people are going to want to read your work, and the more likely you are to get pushed by our bookers.
Beyond that I'm glad to see a new face in the community. Cheers mate.
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Posted: Thu Mar 06, 2014 10:21 pm
Wealthy heels, Monster Heels and Silent Heels are the top three, in that order.
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Posted: Thu Mar 06, 2014 10:33 pm
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